whoa sherlockpotter, this is really well done
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If anyone is still interested in my attempt, I’m not the best editor in terms of manipulation to audio, but I took Luke’s line, “I’m going to burn it all down,” took “burn” and cut off the last part to mix it in with the “th” part in “death of her son.”
I just updated my editing software, and it will take some getting used to. Sorry about that late reply.
This is ingenious. Please share.
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I like sherlockpotter’s attempt, if we go that route, but I also have no problem with keeping the theatrical line as-is. It was never really a problem for me, even if foreshadowing Ben’s death so obviously isn’t really necessary.
Also interested in Master Lawdog’s version. That sounds like a promising idea, but it’ll depend on Luke’s tone when he says “burn.”
Sherlock’s line sounds good to me. Star Wars to me is best when it doesn’t try to overexplain things, so it might edge out the original line here.
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Sherlock’s line sounds perfect to me.
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Yeah. ‘Sensing the end’ is a kind of ‘will of the force’ thing, so it’s very easy to roll with it.
Seamless. Sounds great.
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I wonder if a slight pause could help a little. Either “Leia told me that she had sense the end-- of her Jedi path” or “Leia told me that she had sensed-- the end of her Jedi path.”
It sounds like Luke is ramping up to emphasize part of the sentence and never does, with his tone changing in a way that doesn’t seem intuitive.
“Leia told me that she had sensed… PAUSE… she had sensed the end of her Jedi path”
Kinda makes Luke seem a little upset she didn’t finish her training. Whatever works!
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“Leia told me… that she had sensed the end of her Jedi path.”
Reading/thinking about the text alone, I think a quick pause in this spot would be most natural.
Hal was right earlier. The emphasis on “end” isn’t there properly.
EDIT: Also, should mention I agree with Neerb’s thoughts about this line in general - never was a big deal to me.
I’ll try getting my attempt out as soon as possible.
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Okay, here is just a test sample to get an impression from everyone. I think someone here who is much better at audio manipulation than I am can probably get it to sound much more natural.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1r-sCbw_TQmKS-d6xQ_vzCL-2CNKc4CCO/view
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Sentence mixing it in my head, it doesn’t seem like it’d sound natural. There ought to be emphasis somewhere in the sentence, like “Leia told me she sensed the end of her Jedi path.”
This was my go at it:
Oh I like the direction of that. A lot. I do agree with others, maybe adding a pause at some point would help “sell” this since it feels like a build up without a pay off, but having a pause, even a moment, would help it.
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Does anyone here still have the link to that guy who tried doing an impression of Luke saying that line?
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Have to agree, changing the line really seems like a small thing, but it really gives a lot to the overall feel of the scene and it just seems to fit Leia’s character more.
Here is a compilation I made for the Rey Nobody version. I’ll also post this to that thread. Let me know if it works.
https://vimeo.com/580074316
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It seems a little weird that there is a long quiet pause and then Rey says “Stop talking!”
Also, The “Tell me where you are” feels a little weirdly placed.
There’s some audio clipping around 3:00 mark onward through that whole scene.
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It seems a little weird that there is a long quiet pause and then Rey says “Stop talking!”
Also, The “Tell me where you are” feels a little weirdly placed.
There’s some audio clipping around 3:00 mark onward through that whole scene.
Yeah, I know about the clipping. I took audio from a sample a user in the Rey Nobody thread used as a pitch and tried mixing it in 5.1. This is just a pitch as well.
Also, Hal said he removed “They sold you to protect you.”
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Yeah, That line made no sense at all. Something else needs to fill that gap though so Rey doesn’t just blurt that out after the long pause.
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A year ago, I posted a video to showcase a better way of restructuring the aftermath of Leia’s death. I decided to update it since many of the elements done in the original video are slightly primitive. I know this may not too much since this is your edit, Hal, and you can do whatever you’d like, but I’d still like to at least show it off for everyone to see.
https://vimeo.com/583158626
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Nice editing work, really. However, it might just be me, but that feels like it’s really jumping all over the place in this clip. Like to the point where things revealed and told to me are harder to keep track of. But maybe the original movie is worse, it’s really been a while at this point.
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Nice editing work, really. However, it might just be me, but that feels like its really jumping all over the place in this clip. Like to the point where things revealed and told to me are harder to keep track of. But maybe the original movie is worse, it’s really been a while at this point.
It originally played out this way:
Poe, Finn and Chewie Receive the News
Kylo Ren’s Redemption
Palpatine Informs Pryde
Destruction of Kijimi
The Resistance Receives the News
Poe Talks to Leia & Lando
Finn Talks to D-O
Finn & Poe Talk About Occhi
Rey & Luke’s Scene
Threepio & Artoo Reunite
Artoo Restores Threepio’s Memory
Resistance Track Rey
Hal removed the destruction of Kijimi from his edit. I also split Threepio and Artoo’s scenes apart and replaced Threepio’s line, “Under no circumstances” with “Full of surprises, aren’t you” (taken from the Lego game). I also added in ariel stock footage of jungle/forest scenery for Ajan Kloss as Chewie cries out.
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May I propose a different order that seems to be a little more focused and hopefully allows less jumping around to other planets and topics:
Focus on Leia:
Droids:
Rey:
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I · II · III · IV · V · VI · VII · VIII · IX
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