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- #1143549
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- TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released)
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Yeah, those are included in my shorthand. đ
Yeah, those are included in my shorthand. đ
I assume they did the Leia hologram thing while they had everything out for the end of Rogue One.
Did Luke take his mechanical hand with him when he died?
His arm was already golden again at the very end of TFA.
I think I got an analogy for how part of me feels about THE LAST JEDI.
I feel like the grandfather from The Princess Bride was in the middle of telling Fred Savage a story. He had to leave and he came back the next day. Except, it wasnât him that came back, but Rick (of Rick and Morty).
There is a distant firey explosion after Luke tosses the saber over his shoulder, and after his face is offscreen, a quiet Joker laugh.
^ What Ridley said about those two.
And thanks, I hope these things are easily enough done, but I understand if you canât complete them before then. đ
And with TLJ⌠nothing about TFA really fits snugly with it. I donât think the movie wants any of it to.
From NeverarGreat, needing:
Recolored Leia deleted scene (needs it from Ridley first)
From Sir Ridley, needing:
Retimed sequences - Starkiller firing, Starkiller destruction
Tweaked audio - music brought down around Maz/Han and Snoke lines
3PO leg removal shot, sans widescreen matte
And âweapon fully recharged in 30 secondsâ line - waiting on two specific people
This movie deliberately challenges what I want out of Star Wars. If thatâs itâs goal, it is incredibly successful. I donât like what it did with âmy stories,â and that was what the movie was trying to do. It successfully makes me feel conflicted about it, which is good and bad. Which is good.
The dice died. Hehe, get it?
I had a whole post written, but deleted it because Iâm sure someone would click on this thread, mistaking it for the TLJ SPOILER FREE thread, and be in for a sour surprise. Iâll sit on that original post for now.
Iâm hoping for yearâs end.
I tend to have multiple perspectives about something at once, sometimes to the detriment of taking action.
With TFA, I had a perspective that loved the sheer STAR WARS tone and atmosphere which I felt it came close to nailing. The way the movie was made, written, shot and all else demonstrated a close effort toward that end.
My other perspective was that it was aping STAR WARS without much substance.
Ultimately, these two perspectives arenât far off, are they? I can easily reconcile them and give the movie a strong like.
With this movie, though, the two perspectives are a bit farther apart.
TLJ is a bold departure from STAR WARS, and TFA for that matter, in terms of filmmaking, story, and atmosphere. It adds story meat and we explore the mythology that undergirds the franchise. Things are turned on their heads and we get an unpredictable story that is very much not a retread, unless only retreading things in order to trick you with a subversion.
The other side of my reactions is to say that the movie seems to wantonly shake up the lore and characters in ways deeply incongruent with the message of the saga as Lucas completed it. Rey tries to take after Lukeâs loving beckon to his fatherâs inner goodness and brings about his redemption in a bold, powerful move that I have always admired. I do not mind that Rey fails in her effort. What I do mind is that Luke and Leia forsake this idea. For shame. The Last Jedi is, if anything, too unconventional and different from what came before.
I agree with Mark Hamill in this rough reworking of his quote: âI fundamentally disagree with what youâve done with Lukeâs character. But my job is to like it.â
This movie is harder for me to embrace than TFA, for certain. And that conflict, even just by being there, is discouraging. I appreciate that it had substance with which to interact and have emotional reactions to (even like this), but I dislike the strong incongruity with the story of what came before.
Luke was about to murder a yet-innocent child because he sensed the potential bad things he might do. He had his gun drawn and cocked. Thatâs profoundly different from the man who confronted Vader on the second Death Star.
Leia giving up hope with her son, essentially saying, âYeah, go ahead and kill him,â is profoundly different from Leia in the very last movie.
This themeatic element from ROTJ, which I find myself advocating for and is my greatest takeaway from the Star Wars story writ large, was punched in the stomach and kicked in the head repeatedly until suffering traumatic brain injury and entering a coma.
Will it wake up? Find out in Episode IX: Epilogue.
If it can be implied through editing or maybe changing a few mentions of her to different names, remove Maz and imply Poe sent them after the codebreaker. (Might be slightly incongruous when he asks if they got the codebreaker and doesnât seem to know who it is.)
Get rid of Maz.
Get rid of âDroidsâ style clowning around by BB8 on the casino world as well as using an AT-ST.
Bring the humor down just a notch through careful selection, avoiding jokes oneâs mother would notice being gone when viewing again a year later. (Yeah⌠letâs go with that as a rough barometer.)
Possibly remove Yoda burning down a church and Rey having the Jedi texts later on. (No need for a surprise reveal; thereâs already plenty of those and it was unnecessarily confusing to even me after two viewings! Rey can be safely assumed to go and refer to those texts sometime later.)
The last scene usually has no dialogue, but thatâs not the case here. If one wanted to remove the Oliver Twist ending, the previous scene wouldnât be any worse for it. (I probably wouldnât do that though, myself.)
âBig-ass doorâ? I did not appreciate the degree to which the real-world/Marvelish/GOTG permeated language and quips. Removing just the handful of those that go over the top would be helpful.
Guys, I left TFAâs second viewing concluding that no fan edit was necessary, and only ended up doing one because a beautifully elegant idea emerged that was too good to leave unrealized. In the case of TLJ, I find myself wanting to grapple with this movie but finding not a lot to do. Iâll be following this thread diligently.
EDIT: Oh, and if we could remove maybe just one of the seventy-four death fake-outs, thatâd be great.
Also, I saw the movie twice and I did not see the Jedi texts anywhere in the movie after Yoda burns down a church. If it werenât for you all insisting they made it onto the Falcon, Iâd be convinced they were destroyed. I suppose one could remove the entire Yoda scene, and even the texts from later in the movie, to assume Rey later retrieved them after the film ends. (Not a problem since we know she knows where to find them and havenât implied theyâre gone.)
I like the content of the Yoda scene, but that was a âlook what I bought at Targetâ level of horrible Yoda. CPY has nothing on this one. If thatâs the best they could have done I think they ought to have made it CG.
(It almost looks like when theyâre done, the real Yoda would appear, and take a puppet off his own hand.)
After two viewings, this movie at least seems integrated. Itâd be tough to do much plot restructuring, though perhaps some reordering and pruning could help.
I guess itâs a good sign that everything I consider whether it could be cut ends up being thematically relevant or necessary to the plot. (Example: After Finn says to Rose that rampaging through the Casino was worth it, Iâd be inclined to trim away, ââŚto make them hurt.â But, it ties into his and Roseâs story toward the end.
Doesnât matter to me at all. Of course, I put Padme on livable bedrest.
About the sound effect for the Destroyer⌠by the time we cut back to Finn it seems like people are already reacting to the spectacle. If we are to add a sound itâs have to be immediately prior to or during the cut to that shot.
Yoda burned down a church.
I donât get why Luke wanted to destroy the books, then got defensive about them with Yoda.
Perhaps a rank order will be the best preliminary judgement I can pronounce on it:
ESB
ANH
ROTJ
TFA
TLJ
ROTS
TPM
AOTC
I found it easier to list it after TFA than above it, though Iâm not sure to what degree familiarity influences that.
I guess that makes sense. I canât really tell right now. He does appear to 3PO as well, but doesnât leave footprints.
^ I think that line was supposed to sound clunky, the way Luke would hear it.
One tiny thing Iâd like to see fixed by one of us is when Luke sits down on a crate (on Crait) to talk to Leia. The crate he sits down on moves in response, when it ought to remain totally stationary. Itâs the same as if when Obi-Wan sat on a log on Dagobah the log creaked and bent.
(And yes, I just got out of a second viewing in one day. And yes, Iâm mentally exhausted.)
TFA was placed just below ROTJ for me, and Iâm unsure whether to place TLJ just above or just below it, until I see it again. Itâs a very different movie, which itself is a strength, the way each OT film felt unique. But it makes it harder to compare them.
Itâs far less conventionally Star Wars than TFA was, for better or worse. It was bold and gave me something to wrestle with in ways TFA didnât.
I think my biggest criticism of it at this very early juncture is that it felt a bit too John McClain. (âNeed a lift?â Yeeeehaaaawâ)
My best praise is that it contributed mythological meat to the ongoing saga.
Some unconnected thoughts upon first viewing:
They put Lukeâs X-wing underwater so they didnât have to show it covered in bird shit.
Nice âRaiders of the Lost Arcâ moment with the Imperial laundry room.
Yoda looks the worst Iâve ever seen him.
Interesting that the only prequel-specific reference was to the name Darth Sidious. Regards to L8wrtr.
Someone earlier in the thread said theyâd like to change Lukeâs saber to green at the end. It seems likely that Luke had long since discarded his green saber. Plus, him using Anakinâs saber is a very good hint that heâs not actually there, because we already saw broken in two. (Assuming it will be reforged in 3,000 yearsâ time.)
I was so certain Leia was going to die in space. Then I was so sure she would simply remain unconscious; the characters were already grappling with how to continue in her absence. I know the story and plot were finished prior to Carrie Fischerâs sudden death, but it still surprised me. Not sure how Ep9 will address this at all.
I found myself in tears, but was a little surprised at when that occurred. For me, it was when Luke and Leia were onscreen together and John Williamsâ âLuke and Leiaâ kicked in.
Iâm happy with Reyâs parentage. Good. Less so about Snoke; Iâd really have liked to hear who this guy is. Rey as a rando is good, Snoke as a rando is bad.
Why have âcaretakersâ on Lukeâs island? To me, that slightly undermines his solitude. I didnât mind the porgs so much. Sort of made me want to go to Chik Fil A afterward.
Maz felt totally unnecessary. And WTF is she doing as Finn and company are talking with her?
I think it was a misstep to introduce Rose at all. Just keep Finn around and have him do something without going off on a side adventure.
Canât put my finger on it, but it seems like having so many characters or things going on made it feel like an overstuffed blockbuster movie. Maybe like all these Marvel movies I donât care about.
I found Luke perplexing toward the end, and not necessarily in a negative sense. I wonder why Luke died. I also wonder why he suddenly has such conviction that Rey will become a Jedi and that the Jedi will continue. I thought Yoda joined him in agreeing it was time for the Jedi to end.
The novelization doesnât come out until March?!
Itâs far too early for me to be certain about such a thing, but no ideas are forthcoming immediately after my first viewing.
EDIT: Certainly not overarching ârestructuringâ type changes.