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I’m still not sure TROS even means to state that Luke knew Rey was a Palpatine during the events of TLJ. But it might be easy to remove the idea that “Leia knew.” Is it just that one line that sets that up?

Adding Luke to the Palpatine deathsplosion 2.0 doesn’t seem fruitful to me, though.

I’ll try to remember to.

Slowing that shot down seems to work pretty well, so Snoke’s mouth doesn’t move when it shouldn’t. I… don’t know whether that was tried last time, but it looks okay to me now.

Wow, that’s really impressive!

I thank you in advance.

No, you’re right.

D’oh!

I love the idea. We should really do it.

This hypothetical project would not supplant TROS:A.

I’m almost afraid to type this, but…

I like the idea of just slipping into a contributor role for a TROS project with you at the helm. Partly because life is much more demanding than it was when I did TLJ:L, and partly because TROS is oil to faneditors’ water.

Eh, it doesn’t really add anything IMHO.

Yeah, this is a spitball idea; I don’t expect anything to really materialize from it. But I feel if TLJ highlights how things repeat and cycle through and democratizes responsibility, what TROS has to offer feels superfluous. Just end this two-issue comic sequel to Star Wars with an ellipses.

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I’m not dropping this project, just exploring the possibility of another which probably won’t be followed through with.

I’d have been okay with more than a kiss. It really felt good to see characters with blood flowing, feeling humanly passionate about something for once.

It’s no secret that I thought TROS was garbage. It’s painfully mediocre and unimaginative. I feel it’s a very poor note on which to end the entire saga. I honestly feel that the story is better served to end with TLJ, thematically if not plot-wise. If that film makes the point that “they blow you up today, you’ll blow them up tomorrow,” having the Emperor “somehow” return with the largest fleet ever and need to be defeated again painfully literally doesn’t help. TROS does nothing to counter the idea that these things ebb and flow, with no true finality. Even Anakin’s voiceover suggests Rey needs to restore the balance as he did, necessarily temporarily. While the story’s themes were closed out in TLJ, TROS can’t even be said to have resolved the lingering plot! The First Order is immediately dwarfed by Palpatine’s “Final Order” apparently developed independently. The whole threat needing to be resolved is dredged up wholesale for this movie.

I digress. As I said, I think a TFA-TLJ duology is greater in total than a TFA-TLJ-TROS trilogy. The only thing that would make that feel weird is the trilogy structure the audience expects. As an absolute minimum, all one would need to do is either do away with the opening crawls (and finding another way to set the story and political landscape up for TFA), or replace their “Episode” labels with something like “DUOLOGY TITLE - Part I - THE FORCE AWAKENS.”

However, I wonder what else could be done. Could bits and pieces of TROS be used anywhere? One idea would be to intercut star destroyers being taken down across the galaxy with Luke’s “I will not be the last Jedi” speech, or otherwise imply the First Order will be taken down by civilians rising up via an ending montage sequence, though still ending on broom boy.

Imagine this as a two-issue comic depicting Luke being sought out from exile and spending himself to reinvigorate hope in the galaxy. It’s not Episode VII or anything, just a story. It would be in keeping with at least TLJ to not even be totally sure it’s legit, but the archetypes would feel right. And it’d get around the problem of “okay but they would have made a trilogy.”

RogueLeader said:

They sound about the same to me. As far as shots, what if you put the shot of Hux over “-will rise” instead of during the gap inbetween his two sentences? That may

Or swap the reactions. Have Hux flinch at “the new Jedi will rise”, then use his stoic expression for, “So…” Hux flinching at the idea of the Jedi returning rather than Hux flinching at “So…” It made sense when Snoke stood and shouted “GENERAL!”, but his reaction doesn’t go with anything in this version, besides Snoke just standing up.

Yes, swapping the order of those two half-shots of Hux works a bit better, as you describe. It’s now one shot split in half, with the second half played first.

EDIT: OR… just cut the stoic Hux shot. Have it go like this: 1. Snoke CU - “Jedi will rise” 2. Hux flinches. 3. Snoke stands, “So…”. 4. Snoke CU “Our strategy must now change.”

It might make more sense to go from a wide to a CU without cutting to a reaction shot in the sequence of shots. Might be worth trying.

Just mocked this up, and it doesn’t work. Going from Snoke standing straight to a close up on him does not feel right at all, video and audio-wise.

Llirael Moroth said:

For me what is quite noticable is Snoke’s lips are moving while he’s not saying anything. During Hux “support the resistance” line.

That sounds familiar. I bet it was brought up when we were doing V2 and at that time nothing better could be found. I will look again, though, but I wouldn’t count on it.

This thread so far:

I’d think it’d be a lot easier to remove Rey Palpatine and Rey’s Virtuous Parents in one fell swoop.

I really don’t know. Forgive me if I let this thread out of my mind for a while until we’re a little closer to being able to actually do much with it.

And like I said, I anticipate being a glorified figurehead for this, aiming to produce a “well, here you go” version anyone else can run with themselves. My point is: I doubt it’s gonna be me that comes up with any of the good ideas, not the least reason being a super busy home and work like to juggle.

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I’ll keep it in mind. Hard to forecast something nuanced like that. It often depends on things I won’t be able to assess until I’ve got the video and surround sound audio in front of me to pick at.

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