I don’t see what was wrong with the way I worded that particular sentence haha.
Nothing. I think it works not to use an analogy, but DOTF’s “suffocate” could juxtapose nicely with the “spark.”
Episode IX
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER
Across the galaxy, the spark of hope lives on. To suffocate a growing unrest, the tyrannical First Order has silenced communication between neighboring systems.
As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training under the ailing General Leia Organa, their fledging Resistance gathers intel to forge a path to freedom.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar in search of a rumored Imperial fleet that would allow him to destroy any threat to his power…
Love that video.
lol
I wonder what the commentary will be like. Especially if I have guests.
Oh, boy, a truther…
Good revision. I feel the need to try to modify the clause about the rising tide of dissidence, maybe an analogy that doesn’t seem at odds with that of a spark. Not sure about ‘fabled’ either. I guess it’s time to bust out a thesaurus and get into the weeds.
Yousa point is well sid.
And I agree with Dom. I don’t think any of the possibilities are phenomenal so I guess I err on the side of leaving it alone and decry liability.
I’m sure Rose died offscreen after the previous scene. Maybe add her ghost… surprise Force user.
That’s a clever idea! I guess the earlier scene would then begin with “hey, Klaud, hows the air conditioner coming” or whatever it was.
Nice new crawl. Here’s my current draft for mine taking some of it into account:
Episode IX
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER
Across the galaxy, the spark of hope lives on. To quell an uprising, the tyrannical First Order has silenced communication between neighboring systems.
As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training under the ailing General Leia Organa, their fledging Resistance gathers intel to forge a path to freedom.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar in search of a legendary Imperial fleet that would allow him to destroy any threat to his power…
The Resistance base in TROS is now on Alderaan.
I don’t think it works, good of an idea as it would have been in production. But I think it has to be accidental, as it was with Chewie, or its too much of a deviation for the remaining footage to feel congruent.
Just my take on it.
Here’s a new pass! I downloaded a new 3D model of the falcon and brought it into cinema4D and recreated the flight path. After chatting with snooker, it turns out it’s the same model he’s using. I think his engines look better, though! So we’ll see what options we come up with!
https://vimeo.com/414985184
pw: fanedit
I love the clip, and the nitpicks.
Here’s a rough idea for changing the music in the final scene:
https://vimeo.com/415655381As nice as this is, I wouldn’t end the Saga on character centric theme. The Force Theme, as overused as it is, is perfect because it’s universal within the Saga.
I disagree, I see it as important for the forward-looking nature of the ending. We’re used to the force theme with the binary sunset, but now it’s Rey’s turn.
+1. It’s the perfect end theme to juxtapose with Rey Skywalker.
Just Rey is fine. 😉
(Seriously if this annoys you I’ll stop talking about it in your thread. I just think a Rey nobody edit isn’t really a Rey nobody edit if she’s still Rey Skywalker in the end.)
It doesn’t bother me. But I don’t see how that’s a punchy line to end on if her identity wasn’t an issue throughout the movie. I just don’t see myself going that route, but I’m know for conservative edits.
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Personally, I don’t think the line “you wanted your parents dead” works. It implies plotting, not an instinctual reaction. Why plead with them to come back? Having Rey deliberately kill them really casts a weird light on her character overall.
Here’s a rough idea for changing the music in the final scene:
https://vimeo.com/415655381As nice as this is, I wouldn’t end the Saga on character centric theme. The Force Theme, as overused as it is, is perfect because it’s universal within the Saga.
I disagree, I see it as important for the forward-looking nature of the ending. We’re used to the force theme with the binary sunset, but now it’s Rey’s turn.
+1. It’s the perfect end theme to juxtapose with Rey Skywalker.
Maybe if we buy him lunch he’ll record for us.
No, it’d have to be added to the entire film and I don’t care!
Glad to see you, though!
That being said, I wish I could rent out a theater and have a nine-day viewing of this whole thing with y’all. Hmm… maybe to commemorate whenever this is complete some sort of streaming thing could be arranged.
Probably not, though, right? Eh.
I’m glad that all the material generated here is open-source. Even if I am a stick-in-the-mud about some of them, “my” version won’t be the only one.
Man, even when working on TLJ my life was so different and I had so much time to just take walks and think through this stuff. I can’t keep it all straight with this one! I am so glad you all are working so well together and look forward to turning in an amazing final product as a swan song. Getting to sit down and address things in my NLE is just like “okay, execute the plan and GET BACK OUT.” I’m just so low on about all the resources a project like this takes, time… mental power… software that works well in 2020… less-than-decade-old-laptop… energy… a movie I kind of like to begin with…
You’re all so kind. I mean, what the hell am I gonna end up contributing to my own edit??
Here’s a rough idea for changing the music in the final scene, using poppa’s WIP final shot:
https://vimeo.com/415655381
Hell yeah!
Well then, heeeeeeeere they are!
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1bdebqqBMWvYbZ6LUXuj8xO9tymf2vrfC
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1qAbj4PiAIaO1Y3yHDgCWDG9O33iY2zgE
Yeah, I know the Falcon thing is an unimportant complaint. I do NOT want it changed to not go into hyperspace. Just thought I’d mention it. I STILL LIKE IT AND WANT TO USE IT OKAY GOOD OKAY
I don’t have any bright ideas, but ideally a way to handle the fleet would emerge, but I don’t see anything since they’re still gonna have those enormous guns mounted to them.
They stole it from us! We wants to chokes it!
This is NOT intended to represent a reservation I have about using the Falcon ending shot. This is such a nerdy thing to say that it would have rightfully been shouted down by people if this had been in the movie.
But…
The Falcon leaping right into hyperspace within a few seconds of taking off makes Han’s efforts to escape from Mos Eisley in ANH seem overly cautionary. (Doesn’t seem like entering hyperspace from within an atmosphere or planet’s gravity would normally be a good idea.)
BUT, it’s a perfect visual ending for the story. Just felt obliged to throw a neckbeard comment in for devil’s advocacy.