Hal 9000

Thanks, Muffy. I’ll look forward to your mockup.

I won’t comment on everything, but I’ll try most of those.

Is there anything worth altering about Boolio’s lines if subtitling him? “Holy hell, I heard Palpatine returned somehow. I had to search everywhere to find this SATA cable.”

Hmm, removing the dyad exposition may make it feel even more weird. “The power of love has healed my cold heart. Healed it… FOR EVIL.”

Fair enough.

Thanks to everyone for the feedback so far. Good stuff. Hopefully it won’t be too long before there can be a more complete workprint, with a crawl and Mustafar especially.

DZ-330 said:

I think this might have gotten lost in the thread but does anyone else have any feedback on cutting the Finn scenes from Rey and Kylo’s duel and have it not cut away except for the Leia moment.

I can take a look at that and see how it plays.

JEDIT: There’s a few points that would either be awkward cuts it having to cut out a fair bit of the duel. I’ll probably leave Finn there, just with one or two fewer exclamations if “RAAAAAYYYY”.

And I can’t even remember, did anyone ever find a non-soundtrack version of Duel if the Fates that sounded like a good fit for TROS?

Yes, I’m absolutely going to use Dominic’s two flashback scenes. They just aren’t ready yet.

Hadn’t thought of it, but if “excellent name” can be seamlessly trimmed that’d be all right.

“They fly now” has now been cut. (“They cut ‘They fly now’ now!” “They cut ‘They fly now’ now?” “They cut ‘They fly now’ now.”)

I’ve cut the TIE explosion, though it still rolls away like a meatball on a sunshiney day.

Even though I put some work into getting the audio right, I agree that the Hux Chewie scene might be better omitted. Man, ideally we’d be able to put the deleted Kylo and Chewie scene there.

I’m planning to use whatever added score for the DSII Duel is deemed best, as an alternate audio track.

I don’t plan to remove the Luke and Leia music from the Lando and Jannah scene. To me it telegraphs a potential family connection, or at least a spiritual family bond as they each fill the gap left by the other’s missing parent or child. It’s a leitmotif way of implying that Lando’s not just being a dirty old man. I dunno, I can see how it feels off, but I get what it’s going for.

Yeah, the ending is real nice. 😃

Here’s a clip of just the added fleet dialogue, and the center channel. https://vimeo.com/429818799

Well, what snooker did, anyway, mostly.

Sorry, Cinefy! You should be in there still, even if some reshuffling and additional voices means some aren’t really clear now.

I’m still planning to score the DSII Duel and include it in an alternate audio track.

That’s a fair criticism, as this is a pretty lax edit in terms of story changes. That’s my usual style; I would like for this to be something that truly could have been projected in place of the original and not cause any more problems. To feel really polished and not have anything iffy. (As far as I can help in the fan editor role. Do no harm.)

If that’s the main criticism, then I feel good. lol
And I will certainly join anyone in hoping someone goes further with more changes and ideas past this “safe” starting place. It’s not that I like this movie better than the others, just that there’s not a lot of wiggle room to finesse without taking it to territory I’m not big on. I still hope to do a ‘Rey Nobody’ edit once the world can see Dominic’s work on that front.

TFA:R is pretty conservative, too, but it has some elegant restructuring that really helps the overall narrative and plot. Nothing equivalent has been found yet for TROS. And I haven’t had nearly the same chance to give this project the sort of thought I did all the others, as my life is pretty different and I have practically zero free time, energy, or mental space.

I dunno, it’s nice to have a moment of just thinking and not having something heavy-handed happen.

Anyone else for cutting the “it’s good you’re here” thing?

I’ll raise the volume on the added music as the ghosts appear before Palptine. It seemed a little too quiet.

Movies Remastered said:

jkimm said:

I shared this in another thread. Kylo’s tie not exploding.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1J971QJXUBjJ9lbPHX2vXD_aVhRm1l8_l/view?usp=sharing

I honestly don’t think this scene should be here seeing as all supreme leader ships are prototypes. This just pops back in the next scene.

I hear you, but I’m gonna leave it for this edit. It’s like Gandalf’s staff, it’s just sort of something that happens.

idir_hh said:

I mentioned this ages ago but what do you think of a little switch around with force healing kylo, with the goal in mind to show Rey’s feelings as romantic, subsequently selling the Reylo kiss at the end.

Switch it around so that Rey’s hand reaches out to heal Ben after she confesses that she wanted to “take Ben’s hand”, healing him, and then running off as Ben stares in awe.
Proof of concept: https://vimeo.com/400042403

Boom. Thanks.

Hey, I’d be happy to give it a try! I am picturing plumes of smoke in following shots but maybe that’s more from production footage.

Also, no one seems to have noticed the slightly different Hal9000 logo at the end…

EDIT: There is smoke and fire, but the ball is pretty much intact, so I’ll try it!

Also, does the closeup of the shuttle while Rey and Kylo are fighting over it sounds like the OOT Sarlacc to anyone else?

I’m not sure the expression on Wicket’s face might be too indicative of “oh boy just wait until he catches up with the main characters.” I think less is more here.

You might need to download the workprint rather than play it in the browser.

And all I meant was that I hope to get enough done for V1 not to need to come back for a V2, and close this off mentally and set it down. But if there’s something like new deleted scenes, you bet I’ll do one!

StarkillerAG, ❤️

And I like Boolio! lol
Voiced by Mark Hamill, if you didn’t know.

EDIT: And I like Babu Frik. But I removed his pop-up during the battle, since Kijimi isn’t destroyed and there’s no need to show us he didn’t get blowed up.

^ My read on Luke’s comment about “Leia knew it, too” is that Luke MUST have learned about this only after he had died. Leia must have known, then told Luke, who then displays this knowledge to Rey while saying “Leia knew too.” TLJ Luke just does not seem to be in on this secret. Even so, I don’t see a good way to remove it unless you’re going to go whole hog and remove Rey Palpatine altogether.

I can boost the audio after the chess scene. I assume you mean the, “I’m kidding!” and subsequent bickering? I wanted it to feel like it’s coming from a few rooms away and not that audible, but enough to sell that it was happening onboard while Rey was getting off the ship.

Every frame of the Kylo shot is still there, btw.

Real quick, here’s a test of removing the Palpatine line: https://vimeo.com/429722548

Movies Remastered said:

Exceeded download quota. 😭😭😭

Thanks for the PM Hal. I’ll watch as soon as I can download it…

If you have a Google Drive, “copy” this to your Drive, then copy it again within your Drive, and then you should be able to download.

NFBisms said:

Klaud Squad here:

Idk if Klaud was supposed to be removed completely or not, but he’s still in one shot during the beginning Falcon chase, falling over with his classic Awed Klaud face

I’d like him to be removed. There’s a couple shots that would need FX. The shot of him falling over can just be edited out easily. Here’s the footage I’d need: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1u0x-OMfTBZ0dpnVflTzKSRjsxOp9uU6l/view?usp=sharing

There will be color correction, but I didn’t do it for the workprint as it would have held it up and been a pain in the ass.

I would adore any good new shots of ships heading toward planets, lol.

Chewie’s roar as they head to the ice wall hasn’t been touched; it was like that.

I can try to remove “they fly now,” lol.

I don’t know about Finn. There will be some residual Force-implication for him regardless, so I’m inclined to leave his “secret” as is. Maybe something to chew on after leaving the theater.

I don’t plan to remove Kylo’s exploding TIE. I’d have to gut the whole sequence, and that won’t help the film’s pacing. These Force users just sort of routinely defy reality.

I like the yellow lightning, but I would probably only use it for a ‘Rey Nobody’ version to distance from Palpatine. But I’m open to feedback and it seems like more people feel weird than good about it.

That’s a good point about the heroes leaving Pasaana. If that ship can be seen leaving the planet and maybe entering hyperspace, that’d be cool.

Nice idea, i’ll play with quieting the music as Rey tells Finn about her vision.

I’m not going to remove DO’s “sad” or “happy.” 😦 😃

I worry that if I remove the line “You are a Palpatine,” it might not be clear. He’s speaking through the helmet and can be hard to hear. I like the dialogue on paper better without the line, though.

The line “two were made” harkens back to Lando stating as much earlier in the movie. It doesn’t bother me, but I’m sure it could be removed easily if it bothers most people.

TK-422 said:

I’d love a PM please

Sent!

Maybe. I seem to remember, and maybe it was from TLJ artwork, a poster of Rey holding her saber up. That’d tie into the whole “rise” or “ascending” thing.

Okay and I think as of this post everyone should have a PM.

Thanks, sgroov90! Too bad I didn’t see your post until I got to this page. lol

Everyone so far should have a PM!

And that’s very nice, Muffy! Actually, that reminds me that at some point cover artwork will be needed. Ideally, in the style of TFA:R and TLJ:L. The others had Kylo Ren and Luke, so I guess Rey would be a natural fit for TROS:A.