Hal 9000 said:
Some great ideas! I’d be cautious of aping movie posters, as I can imagine gently rolling my eyes if I’d seen it in the theatrical.
Makes me think of something. One thing that did cause me to gently roll my eyes but not quite make a quip to my brother in the theater was the trooper in the distance on Kijimi saying something like “the door is locked, move onto the next one.”
I mean… mumble, grumble.
Hmm… Axlanian, any thoughts about augmenting that trooper line too? How about a sly allusion to the ‘77 mono mix with,”It’s secure, move onto the next one.” Or “It’s secure, next residence.”
Now that’s gotta be an allusion to the original film, right?
But you’re right, Hal. Probably best to cut and/or replace a lot of that background chatter, just to get the right tone across. Here’s what it is in the theatrical (and most of it is off-screen anyway):
- Open up. You’re wanted for questioning. (This line doesn’t really fit the new context.)
- Check this side of the street. (That seems fine.)
- Alright, we’ll check it out. (Fine.)
- Door is locked. Move on to the next one. (Stupid)
- Give me regular reports, please. (Should be replaced)
- You, up against the wall. Show me your identification. Where’s your identification? (Ehhhhhh…)
Maybe we could make or find recordings to the effect of:
- They’re gathering in the north quarter. Send reinforcements!
- Open up! Come out with your hands up!
- They’ve found a weapons cache, stay alert.
- Send your squadron to Sector 248.
But then again, I don’t think this would all have to be Stormtrooper dialogue anymore. Probably more like a mix of stormtrooper orders, rebel rallying cries, and battle sounds.