Hal 9000 said:
Wow, Sherlock, that really works pretty damn well! I read about it and the discussion before being able to actually plug in earphones and listen to it.
But you know how this stuff always goes: it needs some improvement yet. I think Rey’s “[and] I” sounded just a little abrupt. Is there another instance of her starting a sentence with “I” in a similar voice that could be blended into it?
Thanks, Hal! Like I said, I tried to paper over the gap with an added sound of her panting (maybe that made it worse, I dunno), but… hmm, I can think of one other line in the movie where her tone of voice might work. I’ll try that out later tonight.
Her “I am a Jedi” seemed just a little quick. Could it be stretched out a little bit more?
This one was tricky. I listened to a quite a few different instances of Rey saying “a,” but they were usually so quick that they’d blend into the surrounding words, and I couldn’t get any usable clips from them. (As it is, I basically removed the “th” sound from “the.”) Maybe I could restore some of the cut footage, and try to pad it out that way? There was some concern about the lip sync issue, but maybe it will be better if I tweak the line a little more?
How do you feel about the “All the Sith” line though? For some reason, I thought you weren’t crazy about it.
hinventon said:
Maybe because I’ve heard the original a thousand times but it feels a little weird going from you are nothing to the sith line, it might be worth it to put You are nothing at the end so Rey is directly responding to that. But that version is great too.
So: “A scavenger girl is no match for the power in me. I am all the Sith. You are nothing.”
“I’m a Jedi, bitch!”
I could see that working too.
Or: “I am all the Sith. A scavenger girl is no match for the power in me. You are nothing.” Although, I think I’d still prefer to end on the scavenger line, myself.