Hmm, Faraday, you make a convincing argument for keeping it. I do like sherlock’s idea, where his last line could alternatively be a little egotistical (“I wonder if they’ll make a statue of me?”). It kind of shows off one of his other character flaws. I don’t mind keeping it once I see it from your perspective, but I think an alternate line that displays either his cowardice or his ego could still be fun to play with.
I’m glad you like some of those ideas, sherlock! The idea of Zori’s crew saying, “Jedi!” is an idea I got from the Duel of the Fates script. When Rey pulls out her saber on Kuat, the laborers all start saying, “Jedi! Jedi!” This wouldn’t necessarily have the same impact, but I did like that moment in the script.
bbghost’s test for Poe “Not a Spice-Runner” is pretty good! I think for an edit that went that route, I think it would be good to make Zori say “I’m still digging myself out of the hole you put me in when I left the Resistance”. Now that Poe isn’t a spice-runner, this would be the new way we could explain how Poe and Zori have history.
DominicCobb said:
The Zorii stuff is interesting. I’m all for cutting the spice runner backstory as I’m sure many are, but I wonder if there’s some way we could replace it with something else? Feels like there’d be some obviously missing info about Poe’s connection without that there. Zorii being a part of the Resistance seems like a nice solution but I’m not sure the connection is obvious as to what Poe did to make her mad.
This would be the one hiccup. There’s definitely some bad blood between them, and the line “I’m still digging myself out of the hole you put me in when I left the Resistance” wouldn’t really explain what Poe did that left Zori in the hole (I’m guessing a financial hole). There’s definitely a story there (in this version of events), but it’s not explained. But to be fair, she never really explains how Poe leaving the crew put her in a hole, either. In my head, I picture Poe and Zorii we’re on a mission together on Kijimi, Zorri decided to abandon the cause. Things went south, and she blames Poe for the consequences.
And yeah, like sherlock said, more power to the people who want to keep this stuff! Just trying to figure something out for those who do want to cut it. But I think trimming the line, "“I’m still digging myself out of the hole you put me in” would still be an improvement for both camps, at the very least.