Aw hell yeah! Would really appreciate link over here when it’s finished uploading. Thanks for all your hard work 😊
@jkimm, If you cut it that heavy you’ll miss the “never underestimate a droid” line. If you use a cut away to bb8 you can still keep that line of dialogue.
I was actually going to suggest removing Rey saying that line to BB8 on the skiff during the chase scene too. Seems highly unlikely that she would doubt a droids ability.
She’s not. It’s a reference to Leia who says the same thing to her earlier.
Please don’t remove the dyad exposition for the sake of it being exposition. It’s the only reveal that ties all three of these disjointed movies together, imo.
EDIT: It also creates several new problems for the movie. How the hell can you explain Vader’s mask and Rey’s lightsaber teleporting without the dyad? Crazy.
Oh I see, my bad. Perhaps a wipe would look the best then, but as you said earlier it could be extended slightly.
Seeing as how the original didn’t have a wipe it’s probably best to replicate that.
Sweet! Looks professionally made. Well done!
Hal 9000 said:
I agree, I’ll see about boosting the volume for a couple at the start. And I don’t want to distort all of them, but some could go further. Lando’s voice sounds super clear so I think the voices don’t need to be so modulated that it’s harder to hear them. But yeah I’ll keep tinkering with this.
Would you mind if I mixed this part for you? I do audio (not a video guy like most of you), so I could get the voices to sound more like the chatter Poe’s hearing in the beginning part of the scene. I wouldn’t have a problem getting them to sit on top of the music and spreading them out so they don’t sound like they’re sat right on top of each other.
Just as a show of what I can do, I’m currently working on giving the Knights of Ren voices, here’s my first attempt at recreating their vocal sound based off the grunts when Ben kills them. (Once we’ve pinned down the lines we want, we’ll need three other voices to join mine for this project if anyone’s interested!)
Wow! This really serves to enhance the little screen time these characters get.
Opening shot would be tie fighters going towards kylo’s ship just out in space (probably a reverse shot from TFA) with Kylo on the bridge staring into nothingness.
Liked the idea so I made a quick test. It works really well with Poppa’s tie fighter’s flying above the forest, would be nice though to have a shot of Vader’s castle with the 3 fighters flying by to tie it all together.
The shot of the transports landing I thought looked usable, too. Maybe try putting that in as well?
EDIT: I just had an idea. Could we put a shadow travelling across the land below the ties that is in the shape of Kylo Ren’s shuttle?
Hal 9000 said:
A new hope has been kindled in the galaxy. To suffocate a growing uprising, the tyrannical First Order has silenced communication between neighboring systems.
As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training, General Leia Organa has dispatched her brave agents across the stars to unite the disparate rebelling worlds in the name of Resistance.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar, chasing whispers of a hidden power that would allow him to destroy any threat to his rule…
How about this for the first section:
A newfound hope spreads! To suppress a growing uprising throughout
the galaxy, the tyrannical First Order has silenced communication
between neighboring systems.
The middle section looks fine.
And how about this for the last section:
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar in search
of his grandfather’s SITH WAYFINDER, certain that it will reveal the
secrets of his former master’s power. . . .
Hal 9000 said:
Does anyone besides masked Kylo and Palptine refer to Rey as a scavenger? I wonder how feasible it may be to remove that, as she seemed to move past that in the eyes of all the characters.
Yes. When Finn says, “You were a spice runner?” to Poe he responds with something like “You were a stormtrooper? And you were a scavenger? We can do this all day.” I personally liked that joke, so I would prefer not to mess with it.
Hal 9000 said:
Pan down to establishing shot of TIEs flying over Mustafar
Cut to interior of Star Destroyer, as Vader’s helmet emerges and Kylo places his hand on it. Maybe Vader says something vaguely relevant or just the vision that was there originally. Kylo begins to walk off.
This makes even more sense considering that he’s about to pay a visit to his grandfather’s castle. Of course he’d commune with the mask.
Okay so I’m pretty new at this After Effects thing but I edited a scene for Mustafar from Rogue One. The very beginning of the scene still has a portion from where I removed the ship, but I didn’t know how much to cut (some editors like to play around with footage or maybe it could be taken away with a wipe or something). It’s only a couple of seconds but maybe it could be useful.
This was really just a rough draft to see if I could do it, it seems kind of low quality so I might have to look into trying to find a way to clean it up a little before somebody actually uses it.
One thing I think we should do to any reused shots is mirror the image. It usually does a good job of making it look new.
Between the Force ghosts clip, the new Rey Skywalker delivery and the Falcon flying towards the two suns, this is gonna be one hell of an ending!
Phenomenal work everyone, like I got goosebumps!
You even forgot one of the most important parts - Ben’s ghost!
The new rey skywalker audio switch is incredible, I actually like the ending a lot more just by changing the delivery. Great idea, I straight up got goosebumps
I agree. When I first read the leaks online I knew that it all depended on the delivery of that line for it to be cringe or not. I like this delivery way more.
Nice looking crawl, Jar Jar Bricks, was this done in blender?
Decided to make my own personal crawl today just in case I’m personally not happy with whatever we end up going with. I’ve based it on what a couple of other people have said so far.
Hal, I know you just made it quite clear that you only want a Rey Nobody edit, but would it be possible to still have an optional file without those changes?
One thought I had recently regarding the Force ghost Ben angle, why not just Ben and Leia? That way it focuses on them finally reunited, and we don’t have to debate whether Anakin should be involved with this Skywalker family get together.
Then her declaration wouldn’t make sense as Leia is an Organa and Ben a Solo.
Bobson Dugnutt said:
looks really great.
but the escape is cut.the scene at the fueltank is missing.
i know the quality is…,but EXTENDED 😃
There’s a few shots and lines missing between them walking down the fuel tanks, and Anakin saying “No structue”. I’d love to use it in a workprint cut of the film however.
Here’s that missing stuff from the script for those interested
They run, EXPLOSIONS rattle the ship, and pipes continue to burst around them, spilling more fuel into the hallway. At the far end, SIX SUPER BATTLE DROIDS drop into the fuel. The SOUNDS OF SHIELD DOORS CLOSING AND LOCKING ECHO throughout the hallway. They pass several large power generators, which are topped with SPARKING excess power dischargers.
ANAKIN: They’re sealing this section off.
OBI-WAN: Six droids coming our way!
The last of the DOORS CAN BE HEARD CLOSING in the distance.
ANAKIN: Keep moving. There must be vents . . . This way.
They move along a wall. ANAKIN climbs up the side to a small vent. The fuel gets closer to the SPARKING dischargers.
OBI-WAN: We’ll never get through that. It’s too small!
They move toward a second vent. OBI-WAN is swimming in the fuel as it reaches to within a couple yards of the ceiling. ANAKIN feels along the ceiling and finds another smaller vent. He closes his eyes and tries to sense an opening, then he moves on. OBI-WAN is forced into hand-to-hand combat with one of the SUPER BATTLE DROIDS. It pulls the Jedi under the fuel. Just before he is about to drown, OBI-WAN disables the SUPER BATTLE DROID by pushing him into an exhaust pipe.
The fuel is up to the Jedi’s chins. ANAKIN finds a very, very small metal grate, then pounds on it until the tiny grate breaks loose.
ANAKIN: I found our escape vent.
OBI-WAN: Anakin, this is no time for jokes. We’re in serious trouble here.
ANAKIN: Only in your mind. My Master. Look, no structure. . . .
ANAKIN grabs the side of the tiny hole and gives it a big yank, ripping a large panel loose revealing a “man-sized” work shaft. They scramble through it as the DROIDS swim closer.
And also, here’s a (final?) cut of the Star Tours clip with some new SFX and score added to try and seemlessly cut 3 clips together
The second jump in quality is almost unnoticeable (probably since I’m on my phone). Although I can still see a jump in the first one. Honestly, I can probably look past that screen showing them in a hallway even though they’re in the hangar if it’s for the best.
Bobson Dugnutt said:
do you use for your edit “making of” and “behind the scenes” parts too?
Is there any specific shots or clips that would be workable?
Jar Jar Bricks said:
If I may, I would recommend your alternate Shaak-Ti clip with the extra space battle shot before the scene. This way, nothing needs to be cut, and it follows the original script better.
I don’t know if the clip works, the camera work isn’t quite like anything in the film, and is a bit short. I’d like it if it was a bit longer but currently its not going to work, sorry.
Here’s the probably the final cut of the Shaak Ti scene, I’m happy with it unless anyone else has some suggestions on what else to do with it
I’m actually surprised at how well that works, although the cut out of the footage feels a little abrupt with the camera movement.
The footage is supposed to be much longer but since it’s from Star Tours 2 they only released a small portion of it digitally. Perhaps it could be cut even shorter to prevent that abruptness? But then it doesn’t work as well to imply a passage of time.
I know you said that the clip wouldn’t work but I went ahead and made an example of it just to show you what I meant. The camera work is actually quite similar to the intro of the movie, but I know what you mean that it might not fit.
Chase Adams said:
Looking good Bobson, glad you’re back!
The clip works well in my opinion! Only problem I can see is that the alien says: “Two jedi have landed in the main hanger bay, we’re tracking them.” aren’t they still cutting down the droids at this point? Why do they need to be tracked through the ship if they aren’t running around like the hologram suggests?
I also noticed this and mentioned it earlier. That infrared screen shows them running through a hallway. The only problem is that I’m not sure what else to do about that.
I was going over the most recent draft of the crawl, and while it’s very good, I have just one suggestion.
“A shadow has consumed the galaxy. To suffocate the spark of rebellion, the First Order has scattered and isolated those with the bravery to face the darkness.”
Grammatically, it feels a little weird starting a sentence with “to”. I think a brief edit to something like “The First Order has scattered and isolated those with the bravery to face the darkness in an attempt to suffocate the spark of rebellion” OR “In an attempt to suffocate the spark of rebellion, the First Order… Etc.”
Something like that. I hope I’m not being too nitpicky!
I agree, I think starting the sentence with “To” seems a bit off.
I have a nitpick of my own, but its more just a personal preference. Does anybody else feel like the sequel content really beat us over the head with the spark/flame metaphor? Similar to how Rogue One and modern OT-era content seems throw the word “hope” around with reckless abandon. Personally, I appreciate those types of metaphors more in smaller doses. I would love to see that particular line swapped to something like “In order to prevent an uprising, the First order has scattered…” But maybe that’s just me.
I am genuinely curious if anybody else feels the same way about the use of spark/flame/hope stuff though? Cool beans.
I think an “upRISING” fits in nicely with the title of the movie too.
New-ish to this thread but all the work looks amazing,
I expect this has been discussed but I can’t find any mention of rescoring the fight between kylo and rey. Duel of the Fates or Battle of the heroes would have improved the scene so much. Examples on youtube:
Yeah we discussed it a bit further back. I think Hal just wanted a brief mention of one of those themes, although I would personally prefer a total rescore.
I decided to do my own take on Hal’s crawl:
Luke Skywalker has ignited a resurgence of hope across the
galaxy. To slow the flames of rebellion, the First Order has
scattered and isolated the brave.
As REY, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training under
the ailing General Leia Organa, their fledgling Resistance
prepares for an inevitable uprising.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader KYLO REN is haunted by the whispers
of a dark presence promising him enough power to crush his
opposition once and for all. . . .