Hal 9000

There wasn’t really one. It’s slightly funny now, though.

Neerb said:

In the cave scene of TROS, when the flashlight gag happens, replace Poe’s flashlight with an actual lightsaber to eliminate the gag. The flashlight remains a lightsaber throughout the tunnel sequence, but it is never commented on.

On Kijimi, when Finn and Poe argue and Finn leaves to find Rey, show Finn taking that same lightsaber from Poe as he gives Poe the binoculars. In the hallway scene where Finn dramatically looks around, have him ignite the saber. The saber remains ignited as he runs toward Rey and calls her name, but when she pushes him back she also force-pulls the saber into her hand.

On Ach-To, cut everything about Leia and her training. When Rey “takes both sabers to Exegol,” it’s the Skywalker saber and the Finn/Poe saber.

Gorgeous.

YES. And through editing, imply he only appears as Snoke to Kylo Ren.

You can’t help but laugh at blowing Kijimi up.

And it’d be one fewer thing to just wonderfully all come together all of a sudden at the end of the movie.

Without Babu appearing like a pop-tart during the final battle, there’s one less reason to keep the little joke on Endor.

Looks like I’m gonna have to replace my big hard drive with all my SW stuff on it. I’ve got it all backed up, so that’s all fine, but GD. Won’t be able to do much with anything until then.

I’ll add the Babu Frik joke on Endor to the OP as something being considered aside from being part of the 3PO redub idea.

I’m still open to the 3PO dub idea, but like with many things I’m skeptical until seeing it work well. And if it gets done, it’ll be available for anyone to use, regardless of it this project does.

I am inclined to agree, as time goes on.

I was trying to edit down the Maple Films version of the Hobbit to a particular runtime. Edit some of it into Star Wars to get rid of footage.

Agreed. I think the final paragraph works well, since Kylo is afraid not of Palpatine but of those flames of rebellion.

Try it sometime, I think it’s pretty okay!

You have to dub in the redlettermedia guys over the comm yelling, “Did you see BOBA FETT?!”

To be fair I didn’t even realize that when I responded. 😅

I agree with you, Sherlock!

I’ll chew on that final paragraph, hopefully finding a way to gently imply that rumors are out there of something, enough to drive Kylo mad in search of.

And that would make (enough) sense of of Poe saying the intel confirms “the worst.”

TestingOutTheTest said:

“Mysterious origins of Snoke”? Come on, his backstory can already be inferred from TFA.

I would read this as sarcasm from anyone else.

I do agree with changing the third paragraph to imply Kylo is tracking down a rumored threat to his rule rather than a macguffin that would allow him to destroy any unspecified threats to his rule.

Something like “Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has investigated crap in Snoke’s desk drawer and rages in search of a rumored threat to his power…”

I wonder if introducing the idea in the crawl that all or certain systems are being silenced would help with the “making you think you’re alone” element.

“…by silencing any planetary system that supports their enemy.”

“…by cutting off any planetary system…”

“…by silencing communication between planetary systems that…”

Also, I think removing Kylo’s line “and take the throne” dovetails with the opening crawl mentioning concern about a “threat to his rule.”

At least with THAT, I would have felt respected as an audience member for at least the duration of the opening act.

I’m gonna be very picky about the crawl. I really like what we have already, aside from adjusting that one word. I don’t envision a total rewrite, and do not wish to introduce Palpatine in the crawl. Watching these platonically with no knowledge of marketing, that’s just silly to me. Might as well open with “Fuck it, somehow Palpatine returned.”

That’s a great little tweak to the crawl. Wish I’d have thought of that for V1.

And anyone want to undo Rey’s milky eyes for that one super short shot during her training vision?

As Anakin speaks with Bail Organa right before slipping away to meet with Padme in ROTS, and Bail says something like, “Well, I will do everything I can in the Senate,” add a response of, “Okay, yeah, whatever.”

NeverarGreat said:

“…your fake parents…”

Oof. Sly dig at “your real mother.”

^ I guess to both, but especially modifying Poe’s and Zorri’s conversation. I’m very much open, and hope it can work!

Master Lawdog said:

Is the VFX shot of Darth Nihilus as a background statue behind Kylo Ren being used in this edit?

If someone can send it to me it will be.

And I agree, Test: If Kijimi is to he shown rioting, we shouldn’t really see it until that moment.

I’m still not totally sold on using the idea overall. It’s great, and could totally have been done well while making the movie. I’m just still a little skeptical of doing it via fan editing in a way that would’ve worked completely if projected in theaters for real.