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I started a new job (career, really) and so haven’t had nearly as much free time and mental energy to spend here.
But, does anyone know any foley effects that would fit in well for the people at Maz’s when they react to the looming TIES and Star Destroyer? Not mass panic, just a commotion enough for Fin to turn around.

Sounds terribly exciting.

Very good ideas in there. I’ll have to play around and see how it strikes me in finished form.

And Finn and Han know that Luke is in danger if they come for the map.
I think this works well for that hypothetical audience who hasn’t seen the film and doesn’t suspect anything.

Good, because that’s exactly what I was picturing!

From the other thread, here’s what I have so far for the scene. The line is, “It’s the First Order, they’ve done it.” I scoured the film and couldn’t find anything to replace the second part of the line, but it doesn’t sound that odd. He just sounds a little weird, like, “Now they’ve really done it!”
https://vimeo.com/165767941

Fantastic!

The podrace scenes sounds like a wonderful idea, for so many reasons.
But, would that necessitate either recasting the yellow pod we see as Watto’s all along?

Not that this really needs to be said, because we all know it: This was not my idea! I just want to see an edit that pretty much does this and leaves the rest of the film as is. (And to work together to perfect the approach so it’ll be available to others.)

All right, guys. I didn’t wanna do it, but I felt compelled: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/TFA-A-Gentle-Restructure/id/50117

Star Wars - Episode VII: The Force Awakens: Restructured V6

The following information and more can be found at FanEdit.org, home of the fan edits.

Running time is about 136 minutes.

Tagline: It’s another Death Star…
 
Synopsis: It’s the same Star Wars Episode VII: The Force Awakens you fell in love with, only restructured slightly so that Starkiller Base does not fire until close to the end of the film.
During the battle over Starkiller Base, the stakes are no longer protecting the Resistance base, but preventing the destruction of the Republic Capitol. Even though they destroy the First Order’s superweapon, they fail to do so in time to save the day.
 
Intention: To move the destruction of the Hosnian system to the climax of the film, and and implement all the little things necessary to facilitate it seamlessly.
 
How does this restructuring help the film?
 
• The second act centers around the events of Maz’s castle and remains focused on the characters and their struggle to keep the First Order from finding the map to Luke. The First Order catching up to Han and Rey is sufficient motivation for Finn to decide not to leave, without the Hosnian system being destroyed.
• Starkiller Base firing upon the Hosnian system in the third act links it very closely to Kylo Ren’s resolution toward the dark side as he kills Han. Pairing these events magnifies each.
• Han taking a risk motivated by love for his son which brings about costly failure is a dark mirror of Vader doing the same in Return of the Jedi and ending up helping to save the galaxy.
• It alleviates the plot’s very close parallel with the original Star Wars.
• Starkiller Base is depicted as functioning in an intuitive way: it drains the nearby star (or “the Sun,” as Finn describes it), which covers it in darkness, and then fires on the Republic Capitol. Gone are the awkward questions about why the planet was still in daylight when it fired the first time during the second act, and whether the base is mobile.
• It avoids depicting the Hosnian system clearly visible to the naked eye, very large in the sky, from lightyears away. The official Lucasfilm canon answer is that Starkiller Base created a “space-time disruption,” an obvious bandaid answer to apologize for a wanton move on the filmmakers’ part. One wonders whether such intersystem spectacles are common in this world, because no one who witnessed the destruction had the slightest trouble identifying what was happening.
• It avoids raising the question of why the Resistance did not begin evacuating their base during the third act when they know they are the target. In the original Star Wars, the Death Star was looming overhead; here, there’s no obvious reason why they could not have fled.
 
This project was born of the emergent idea from all over the Internet after we all saw the film. Numerous people at OriginalTrilogy.com suggested this idea immediately after release.
See also William Gillis’ blog post which explains his rationale for desiring this change: https://humaniterations.net/2016/03/26/how-to-fix-the-force-awakens/
 
Other sources: Various sound effects from the Star Wars franchise

Special Thanks:
Everyone at OriginalTrilogy.com who contributed, including:
NeverarGreat (Visual and audio effects)
Sir Ridley (Visual and audio effects)
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Sherman (Cover artwork)
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Others:
William Gillis (Blogger who voiced the core idea for this project which appeared shortly after the film’s release)
Noodle_Finger (fan editor behind a prior TFA edit)

Special features:
Fan Editor’s Commentary
Chapter stops
Subtitles (English, Spanish, and French)

Cuts and Additions (V6 changes marked with asterisks):

Poe’s ladder retracts as he prepares to take off from Jakku (borrowed from NeverarGreat’s Starlight project)*

Removed the glow from Kylo Ren’s saber during a shot it is deactivated (borrowed from NeverarGreat’s Starlight project)*

As Finn mans the TIE fighter with Poe, trimmed firing upon fellow stormtroopers so soon after planning to escape. Now, he causes peripheral damage to prevent them from firing at him and takes aim at the command center. (Slightly shifted the placement of the film’s trademark Wilhelm scream in order to retain it.)

Removed Kylo Ren identifying Finn’s stormtrooper ID from memory.

Added the Falcon jumping to hyperspace after leaving Jakku, then being ripped from hyperspace soon after, along with removing a now-out-of-place line from Finn about “get[ting] out of this system.” (FX by NeverarGreat)

Trimmed Finn repeating, “cute boyfriend.”*

Removed Han’s somewhat kindly, “Come on outta there” to Finn and Rey while leaving the directional nod (thanks to NeverArGreat).

Removed Rey saving Finn from the rathtars, cutting from Finn’s line, “They look like that,” to Han and Chewie arriving at the door to the Falcon.

Removed General Hux from the first scene with Snoke, where he suggests using the weapon to destroy the Republic. (FX by Jackpumpkinhead to remove Hux walking offscreen during first shot)

Removed Finn’s comedic line about almost being killed several times by Chewie while tending to him on the Falcon (Mimicked DigModiFicaTion’s approach).

Removed the holochess game cameo (help from NeverArGreat and Burbin).

Removed Han describing the need for Maz to help them get a ‘clean ship.’ It doesn’t add anything, and their motives are already clear enough. (Idea from NeverArGreat)

Subtle rendition of the first part of the Emperor’s Theme has been added to the Imperial March as we see Vader’s shattered helmet (thanks to Sir Ridley).

Trimmed Maz’s journey across the table (borrowed from NeverarGreat’s Starlight project)*

Added two lines from the Emperor during Rey’s Force vision to very gently hint toward the revelations within Episode IX.

Repurposed excised footage from the rathtar sequence to depict Rey separated from Finn in her Force vision. (Thanks to NeverArGreat)
 
After Rey flees Maz’s castle after her Force vision, replaced the Hosnian system being destroyed in the sky with a Star Destroyer. Finn and Han now gaze up to see that the First Order has caught up with them, as they feared. Finn’s line to Han about the First Order has been changed, including a brief visual modification to his mouth. (FX by Sir Ridley and NeverarGreat)

Added a shot of the ship Finn is preparing to leave on, to imply Rey is planning to accompany him (borrowed from NeverarGreat’s Starlight project)*

Throughout the battle at Maz’s castle, applied a slight sunset color correction to harmonize the sunset lighting present before and afterward.

Audio from the trailer was used to add a sound effect to a TIE being shot down (turned out to be barely noticeable, but I did it anyway).

Slightly restructured Finn running after Rey (borrowed from NeverarGreat’s Starlight project)*
 
New deleted scene included of Leia discussing the Republic. The scene was originally intended for earlier in the film, and Leia’s prominent braid has been removed to match her scenes immediately prior and after. Audio has been redesigned to accompany a finished film, and the sequence retimed to accommodate it. (FX by Sir Ridley and NeverarGreat)

When Finn is introduced to Leia, removed mention of the Hosnian system’s destruction, though retained mention that Finn had worked on the base (thanks to FX work by NeverarGreat).
 
R2 now has a blinking light to indicate that he has begun searching for the map. (FX by NeverarGreat)
 
After Rey resists Kylo Ren’s mind probe, added the portion of the Snoke scene from earlier where General Hux suggests using the weapon to destroy the Republic. Kylo Ren’s face has been overlaid where his mask was for one shot, and a few shots from behind have had the back of his head replace his hood. (FX by Jackpumpkinhead and krlozdac)

Fixed two continuity errors introduced by the restructuring: Snoke is now seen rising from his seat in a new context rather than suddenly appearing upright, and his mouth no longer moves in a shot in which he is silent. (Thanks to NeverArGreat for the former.)
 
Moved General Hux’s impassioned speech to after Kylo Ren overreacts to Rey’s escape from her cell.
 
After the speech, the nearby Sun beings to be drained, as Hux and the troops gaze upon the stream being sucked into the planet. (Recolored to yellow-orange, and reversed so as to appear to be going down into the ground)
 
During the briefing scene at the Resistance base, removed Leia identifying their base as the Starkiller’s next target, Threepio lamenting the prior loss of the Republic fleet, and well as mention that the First Order is charging the weapon “again.”
 
Cleaned up the smoke and debris around the Starkiller weapon exhaust when the X-Wings approach. (FX by NeverarGreat)

During a brief cutaway to the Resistance base as Han and Chewie infiltrate the oscillator, removed Threepio’s line, “It would take a miracle to save us now.”

Removed Finn’s comedic moment of misunderstanding Han’s head nod while searching for Rey (Mimicked DigModiFicaTion’s approach).
 
Immediately after Kylo Ren kills Han, the Starkiller fires and destroys the Hosnian system, as Leia senses it through the Force. (Some FX by Sir Ridley and NeverarGreat; V6 uses a shot from Starlight to remove an extra casually walking by during Leia’s reaction shot)*
 
As Finn and Rey start to head outside the oscillator, cut to Snoke and Hux planning to destroy the Resistance. (FX by Sir Ridley)

First Order technician redubbed to state the weapon will be fully “re”-charged in 30 seconds. (Voice from AbramPT)

Chewie has been cropped out of a shot of him walking past Leia. (Crop and image enhancement by Sir Ridley)

Extended the shot of R2 waking up, to allow him to finish searching his backup data. (FX by NeverarGreat)

Added a cloaked binary beacon from TLJ next to Finn (borrowed from NeverarGreat’s Starlight project)*

Color corrected Ach-to to bring it a little closer to the corresponding scene’s lighting and weather conditions in The Last Jedi.

Added a few subtle porg sounds to the background, replacing two native bird sounds.

The final shot of the film has been stabilized. (FX by NeverarGreat)

I like the idea of not seeing R2 at all until the very end of the movie. I’ll have to see how that works.
And I’m hesitant to start a new thread myself, lest I be pushed forward as the guy who is allegedly going to be seeing such a SKB restructure edit to completion. 😕

Absolutely, the TIEs need to be very distant to explain people gawking, as well as giving Han and Finn time to get to the basement before Maz exclaims, “They’re here!”

It only exists in 720p, being mostly sourced from Harmy’s De- and Re-Specialized Editions.

RogueLeader, I had done the very same thing with the scene where Finn meets Leia, after concluding that mention of SKB would have to necessarily be removed. I agree this is the only way to handle the scene given our “Hosnian destruction post-Han death” goal.

Jack, I agree with RogueLeader about the logic behind seeing the TIEs coming in. I don’t think xxTelecine 7xx would mind if I posted his version of the Fx for that shot: https://youtu.be/2ic4AmaBZFE?t=8s
You can see the TIEs are coming in headlong from the distance, making logical sense to cut back to Rey, who has run far away, seeing them coming from overhead.

I think a good next step for that sequence would be to work on the audio side of things, finding suitable low-key music and foley. I looped some TIE sounds so it sounds like a distant swarm is coming, as I posted earlier.

Haha, sometimes that’s the feedback loop we fall into with some of these projects around here. 😛

Subtitle the sand people phonetically (“URRRGH HURRRGH”), and dub then with Microsoft Sam reading your subtitles.

But isn’t BB8 also flying with Poe in the SKB assault?

It didn’t really stand out too much to me, compared to SKB sticking in my craw. During the movie I assumed there was a mystical reason R2 woke up when he did. (Did Luke reach out and wake him back up? Did he detect Rey?) And I still suspect the lame-o answer of “he just then overheard they were looking for a map that he happened to have from the Death Star” might be a cover to preserve a future plot development. I also assumed Luke left the remainder of the map with R2, with contingencies for letting people find him.

TFA introduces the Starkiller rather abruptly, halfway in. It would have been very easy to drop a line in the crawl. I wonder why they didn’t, and seemingly preferred to introduce it as they did.
That’s part of why I felt SKB was tacked on.

Posted January 21st by SilverWook as a sticky thread:

SilverWook said:

It’s been slightly over a month. If you haven’t seen the movie by now, I honestly don’t know what to tell you. 😉

Most of you have been pretty darn amazing about respecting this for many months, and that’s an impressive feat around here!

Keep in mind the rule still applies to any and all Episode 8 discussion. Have a nice day!

My biggest complaint about TFA is the constant references and recapitulations, particularly as manifested in Starkiller Base.
If George Lucas was writing and directing the sequel trilogy, it would have been at least as equally pandering in that regard, and have a lot less to redeem it.
I was, and still am, glad that Bob Iger immediately put Lucas’ treatments through the shredder. After they shook hands and Lucas had left his office, I’m sure that was the first thing that happened.

JEDIT: I really don’t know how you people post here all the time without making typos like I do.

jeanie90 said:

Can you please send me the Links to this edit? I watched it in 720p in 2014 and it was amazing. I would like to watch it again but I can’t find it on fenedit.info any more.

PM sent. Until FanEdit.info comes back, anyone can PM me for a link to the .dlc files.

He’s the reason I’d only consider using pre-2004 OT audio as sources for anything.