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- The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
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Absolutely sublime. Bravo.
Could we try generating a few tales of âFinal lesson, Reyâ?
Eh, doing that doesnât seem to solve anything. Whether fear led him there but didnât keep him or kept him there but didnât lead him there seems to be splitting hairs.
Iâd rather leave the line alone, but I appreciate the thought about it.
The focus should remain on Rey and not get too detailed about Luke. I donât like him saying âI failedâ in the present tense in TROS.
The existing line sets up his point well, in saying itâs what âkept him hereâ before Luke interrogates Reyâs misguided journey to that location.
I donât know how to rephrase the existing line to retain the link to the location, lead naturally into a question of Reyâs fear, and change the implication about Luke.
In isolation, it wouldnât be fair to characterize Lukeâs reclusion to the island as due to straightforward fear. But in the context of the whole TROS Ach-To sequence, I donât have a problem with this line. Heâs making a point by picking up on a relevant factor from his own experience that mirrors Reyâs closely enough. Luke didnât shut himself away due to fearing his raw power, but he did fear Benâs. And perhaps that (but not only that) is enough to extend this question to her to relate and begin to pull her out of her slump.
PM sent
I donât see a need to use AI voices for this project, especially since it ended up achieving its goals entirely without any. This project is complete, but Iâm happy if anyone wishes to build on it wholly or in part.
Wow, what a flurry of activity in the last day and a half!
At least what I can tell over phone speaker, those sound pretty good,
JJB. For the flashback, Luke speaks at about the right pace, though he sort of rushes through âchose compassion over hatred.â
Couple quick thoughts to respond to holdups!
I donât feel a need to tinker with âit was fear that kept me hereâ as itâs a natural lead-in to the point Luke wants to make. Even if we quibble about TLJ, itâs not untrue that fear was part of the equation for him.
I do not think it works to shoehorn in dialogue during the X-wing scene, so Iâm not interested in pursuing that.
As far as âfinal lessonâ⊠could we perhaps try a few variations on it, to see if it can fit in seamlessly? Itâs tricker now that weâre keeping more of the conversation. Maybe âMy final lesson, Rey:â?
And once we can get things right, Iâd be happy to assemble an entire Ach-To sequence to present.
Thanks so much for all the effort and discussion. As has been the case for this project from the beginning, it would have been dead in the water if it werenât for you. I canât dedicate meaningful time to these projects any longer, but want to
make V5 worthy of its finality.
Also, JJB, can you send me the line âWhatâs troubling you, Reyâ for Leia? I like it but I only have your test clip and not the line on its own.
Okay, I finally found some time to dig into this project a little. Here is the state of the flashback sequence.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VBFPUHnRAGrGfMWsUy5pnSo31u54SY0m/view?usp=drive_link
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kDmXzsVWWzbfOoC8DKCLNvfSex2wV3-I/view?usp=sharing
The delivery of âLeia sensed it as she trained youâ could be better, and possibly the wording. Rey responds with, âShe still trained me,â which sounds a little redundant.
I hate to lose the reference to Padme, but I think it flows better (and lets us get away with the alteration a little more cleanly) without it. đ
Clever, and a good way to include a little of the mono mix, assuming thatâs the source for the cleaner sound.
Not hurrying to do so, but yes. Letting it breathe, and intending for it to be branded as final. If you skim back through the thread youâll find a list of whatâs done and whatâs not yet.
Not happening here, is the practical answer.
That is pretty cool! I already removed that whole scene though. IMHO the Death Star doesnât need to be in the prequels at all, and I prefer to leave it purely as a product of the Empire, as though only they would even think to design such a thing.
Weâve got jackets. Sending you a PM.
For one thing, the scene wouldnât involve any mention of Kijimi in the way I envision it being cut. It would just be about how Palpatine is threatening the galaxy with a generic threat of destruction if they donât stand down and Poe is acting general. But then the problem would be how it may be too short of a scene.
What makes you think the AI line wouldnât work there? Just not enough space?
Oh, like theyâre just hearing more Palpatine ranting over the radio? Not sure but I can take a look later and see about it. I donât think itâs super necessary though.
The only relevant bit is about two seconds for a character to say, âLeia made you acting general.â I really do not want to re-include the scene because Ascendant has been better not to have had it.
I wish there was more room to maneuver but I wonder about an AI line for Poe as he starts to speak with the deceased Leia. ââActing general?â I gotta tell you, I donât really know how to do thisâŠâ
That almost certainly wouldnât work effectively. But you do raise a good plot-related concern. If it can be alleviated another way Iâm open to that, but not to reinstating the Kijimi sequence.
I still donât see the point of reinstating that scene. At present weâre able to have a small stretch of the movie that is not too bombastic, focusing in on some character sequences.
Wild idea. The holograms in ANH were done by filming the footage displayed on a TV. Would⊠would that look good if you tried it that way?
new clip, cool idea? or should it be left out?
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LtisXHOaCNtUP6GF5UMT2AXSU_C-Wy_Q/view?usp=sharing
audio is still a wip
Always seemed like a solid idea, but I think this is the best execution thatâs been done.
That scene was removed because Kijimi isnât destroyed. I donât see how that part could be kept without this.
And as far as a line, Iâm not sure.
I agree that Iâd have liked to see Luke haunt Kylo Ren in Ep9. But it doesnât feel right to wedge in a sentence or two over voiceover. Luke is clearly introduced to us on Ach-To and by then thereâs no Kylo Ren to haunt. I just donât think it works.
And that scene sounds real good, JJB. Would it be too cheesy to use âloveâ instead of compassion? Itâs a little more tied into the friendship theme of this movie, and more of a direct lift from the DOTF script.
That all sounds great. And yes, I already have folded in the âcome homeâ line. đ
Any other opinions? Leia is implied to have discovered Reyâs lineage, and not being told how is a wash compared to the theatrical anyway. And we get to link Reyâs resolution to hold to compassion to Leia. Now Ach-To feels cohesive again. Thank you, JJB!
That new spy line is perfect, JJB! Itâs actually really funny, and helps the following line about his âfirst laser battleâ too.
Here is everything that remains incomplete or undecided about V5:
We need a line for Luke to serve as something like, âLeia sensed it during your trainingâ to impy Leia learned about Reyâs lineage somehow between films.
Undetermined about a potential line for Kylo to suggest that the dagger ârevealedâ to Rey her parentsâ fate at the hands of Ochi, to support our change for the dagger to be a mystical revelatory device rather than Rey sensing âhorrible thingsâ it has done.
Thatâs it, as far as I have kept track! Itâs a very short list. Iâm not in a rush, but whenever V5 can be complete, and itâll take a while most likely for me to recompile everything, then it can happily sit there and wait for the âRey Nobodyâ components.
That sounds great!