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Well, it’s been a while, hasn’t it?

I can’t necessarily say that my edit is back on track…but I have started messing around with footage again. I’m currently using the free version of Davinci Resolve. The nodes in Fusion are still throwing me for a loop…but I’ve learned a bit. 😄

It’s really the color grading tab that got me interested in taking another whack at this edit. There’s a lot you can do within it.

I’m still playing around with this scene but as you’ll see, the main idea was to remove Obi-wan’s dialogue that spells everything out for the audience…as well as his pisssed off-ness towards Anakin.

The music is temporary also…but it does add a little tension/uncertainty which is welcome.

Aaand a focus pull shot by snooker! (this was done…like a year or two ago)

I was trying to edit this in 5.1 (and indeed this clip is in 5.1…although you won’t be able to tell cuz youtube) but man…with all the changes I have planned I think it’ll be too much of a headache.

https://youtu.be/DZnxu_QrUT4

P.S. I’ve reuploaded quite a few of my videos…still gettin’ around to the rest of 'em.

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Attack of the Clones | Alternate Timeline Edit
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My OLD Return of the Jedi thread. Be gentle.
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I’m back with another clip, folks!

This time I’m tackling the kiss scene. This will give all of you a better idea of how drastic I want to “adjust” this movie. So, a few things going on in this clip:

  • I take advantage every time Anakins mouth is obscured by something or someone to add and/or change his dialogue.

  • removed “across the stars” music and replaced it with a lighter “anakins theme” from TPM which fits the mood better imo

  • I thought it might be fun but also wise to add R2 into this scene. Just to maybe reduce the question of ‘why are they NOW safe from bounty hunters?’. Without explicitly saying it, one could now reason that R2 is continuing to use his scanners for any sort of activity. And now, there’s a fun little bit where he turns away as they kiss. These shots of R2 are not yet finished. In fact, if anyone can think of a better shot of R2 to use, please let me know! This shot is not ideal because it’s so short.

  • I’ve repurposed Padme’s dialogue from TPM and placed it here to tease Anakin

  • the kiss itself is reworked to have a bit more passion from both characters…as if they’ve both wanted to do this for quite a while

  • there’s no abrupt ending to the kiss. no “I shouldn’t have done that” from Padme. They both enjoyed it, both feeling slightly awkward afterwards, Anakin cracks a joke to lighten the tension.

At this point, I’m slowly moving forward with my edit. This is the most “complete” scene so far but I would definitely appreciate feedback. Is there anything that isn’t working? Anything throw you off?

https://youtu.be/guDYpbRw1R0

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Hello again peoples
Wanted to drop another video here and see about getting some feedback particularly with the dialogue. Again, I’m using my voice only temporarily, so, aside from not liking my vocal performance, does the dialogue itself work?

https://youtu.be/1yTsM0-mRHQ

Main things I’ve done with this clip:
Altered the music to change the atmosphere of the scene. I’m not completely sold on the soundtracks I’m using BUT it gives the “feeling” I want to convey. I don’t think any of the pieces I’m using are in the same key and I just don’t know enough about music to know if it’s really a problem or not.

Created a shot of Padme not knowing how to respond to what Dorme says. Padmes “then my jedi protector will have to prove how good he is” isn’t particularly bad imo but I couldn’t find another way to cut around the little Obi/Anakin exchange without removing this line.

Cut Obi-Wans berating Anakin about doing anything without consulting him or the council. In this edit, Obi does teach Anakin…but less Master/Student and more like an older wiser guy showing a younger guy the ropes, if you will.

Anakin hears a noise and looks up thinking it could be trouble. I’d like feedback on this too. I’ve liked this idea for a long time but hadn’t implemented it until now. I’d like to know if you think it works…if it adds anything to the scene.

This is where it gets a bit iffy:
-“what are you thinking about?”
-“this is my first assignment on my own…thought you should know.”
Does this exchange work? or what if I cut Padmes line altogether? they walk along in silence for a few seconds then Anakin just blurts out his lines?

-“did you hear what they said about us?”
-“yeah”
-both laugh
Did this exchange make sense? Did you find yourself following along?
I could revert his dialogue back to “don’t worry, we have R2 with us” and that would work well with the new R2 shot I’ve added.

You guys are my Brian Trust. What do ya think?

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Attack of the Clones | Alternate Timeline Edit
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My OLD Return of the Jedi thread. Be gentle.
https://originaltrilogy.com/topic/ROTJ-Fan-O-Matic-3-new-clips/id/7919

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SSWR!!! You’re back. Just now seeing!

Whatever you’re working on, I’m ready for it.

Like the new kiss scene. Works a lot better for sure.

The first assignment works.

The “did you hear what they said?” seems off a bit. Maybe because they look like they are 200 feet away.

When I’ve tinkered with that scene, I just cut it a bit after Kenobi and Typho’s dialogue, and then you see the ship take off.

Anyway, keep it up. You’re very gifted.

If you need a workprint viewer, PLEASE reach out to me!!

SomethingStarWarsRelated said:

Hello again peoples
Wanted to drop another video here and see about getting some feedback particularly with the dialogue. Again, I’m using my voice only temporarily, so, aside from not liking my vocal performance, does the dialogue itself work?

https://youtu.be/1yTsM0-mRHQ

Main things I’ve done with this clip:
Altered the music to change the atmosphere of the scene. I’m not completely sold on the soundtracks I’m using BUT it gives the “feeling” I want to convey. I don’t think any of the pieces I’m using are in the same key and I just don’t know enough about music to know if it’s really a problem or not.

Created a shot of Padme not knowing how to respond to what Dorme says. Padmes “then my jedi protector will have to prove how good he is” isn’t particularly bad imo but I couldn’t find another way to cut around the little Obi/Anakin exchange without removing this line.

Cut Obi-Wans berating Anakin about doing anything without consulting him or the council. In this edit, Obi does teach Anakin…but less Master/Student and more like an older wiser guy showing a younger guy the ropes, if you will.

Anakin hears a noise and looks up thinking it could be trouble. I’d like feedback on this too. I’ve liked this idea for a long time but hadn’t implemented it until now. I’d like to know if you think it works…if it adds anything to the scene.

This is where it gets a bit iffy:
-“what are you thinking about?”
-“this is my first assignment on my own…thought you should know.”
Does this exchange work? or what if I cut Padmes line altogether? they walk along in silence for a few seconds then Anakin just blurts out his lines?

-“did you hear what they said about us?”
-“yeah”
-both laugh
Did this exchange make sense? Did you find yourself following along?
I could revert his dialogue back to “don’t worry, we have R2 with us” and that would work well with the new R2 shot I’ve added.

You guys are my Brian Trust. What do ya think?

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Hey, thank you MisterBenja!

Your observation on the "did you hear what they said was right on. And something about it has just started feeling off to me.

Wait- the way you cut it sounds like the theatrical cut…or am i misunderstanding?

What I’m looking at doing now is to keep everything as i have it but revert the dialogue back to “don’t worry we have R2 with us”.

As far as a workprint: it’s funny- i originally didn’t want to release one mainly because i have a lot of ideas that (if i can pull them off) i don’t want them to get out there until it’s completed. However, because some of my ideas are a little “out there” and/or extremely hard to pull off, i think i will indeed release a workprint because i have a feeling I’ll need lots of feedback in order to get everything working! Lol Plus, if there’s enough interest in this edit, maybe i can get some help from others on some of my crazy ideas.

Hey, you know what would be awesome and extremely helpful? Is for those watching the workprint to record there reactions. Like a director at an early screening, ya know? Now, i can certainly understand if no one wants to put their face out there for all to see…but something to think about!😁

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Attack of the Clones | Alternate Timeline Edit
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https://originaltrilogy.com/topic/ROTJ-Fan-O-Matic-3-new-clips/id/7919

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Thanks, guys, for the interest in a workprint. When i have one ready, I’ll post an update for sure. But it’ll still be quite a while before one is ready!😆

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Testing the waters with an early deepfake. Full disclosure: I screwed up one of the steps and haven’t gone back to fix it…but still it’s not quite there anyways.

I chose this shot for a couple of reasons:

  1. I’ve always liked this line of Dooku’s but it’s in a deleted scene I don’t plan on using.
  2. In deepfakes current state, I can’t achieve a closeup. So further away from the camera is better.

For those interested, I just went step-by-step with this video:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iAFBgOUFLpA

P.S. It looks like I’m gonna have to break down and buy another pc. The one I’ve been using was already used and had several issues…and now I’ve got the blue screen of death and have tried everything to get it to boot up with no success. I’m waiting for some additional funds that should be on the way…then I can determine how much I’m gonna spend on a new pc. So it might be a hot second before I’m able to give another real update.

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Attack of the Clones | Alternate Timeline Edit
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While in the midst of editing AOTC, I began to see some things here and there that I’d never seen before. Maybe you haven’t seen them either. 😉

https://youtu.be/_PfqtbtesIs

P.S. Oh yeah, this time you have to look at my face. I’m sorry in advance. 😛

JEDDIT: Oh and I got my pc worked on…and got a new hard drive. Working good as new!

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Are you going to redub Cleigg, Owen, and Beru so it seems like Anakin lived with them before becoming a Jedi? Maybe you could have a deepfake flashback of Anakin leaving with Obi Wan?

Everything after Empire Strikes Back is shit.

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Space Medievalist said:

Are you going to redub Cleigg, Owen, and Beru so it seems like Anakin lived with them before becoming a Jedi? Maybe you could have a deepfake flashback of Anakin leaving with Obi Wan?

That’s an interesting idea. I can tell you there will be no flashbacks in my edit. I’m not the biggest fan of those. Even when well done.

I’ve always enjoyed the performance from the actor playing Cleigg…especially his voice. But if there’s something else i can set up by doing this…hmm…I’ll have to ponder this.

Anyone got ideas on this scene and what should’ve been setup?

I haven’t given much thought about their introductions…other than it’s pretty lackluster. If i had a way to do it, I’d cut Beru entirely out of the film. She does nothing but bring unnecessary blue milk to the table.

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Attack of the Clones | Alternate Timeline Edit
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Happy Friday everyone!

Here’s another video from the upcoming edit. I share my comments on the Palpatine office scene, show you my edit, then comment some more on what I did to accomplish it.

Not only do I welcome feedback on the clip, I’d like to know if this format is something any of you enjoy.

BUT for those who don’t want to sit through my ramblings and just watch the clip, skip to around 6:44

https://youtu.be/P9gKcQgaj_4

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Attack of the Clones | Alternate Timeline Edit
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My OLD Return of the Jedi thread. Be gentle.
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Ahh! I love that!

Really subtle. I always wondered if Anakin would have been a stronger character if he just spoke LESS in AOTC, that shot pretty much nails that!

Really glad to see your stuff as always SSWR!

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Really cool stuff! The scene in Palpatine’s office is looking good as well. Music works well, and I love that Yoda now agrees with Palpatine. The cut after Mace says “we’re keepers of the peace, not soldiers” I found a tiny bit jarring for some reason. Maybe have the hologram noise start a sec before the cut? Just an idea.

“Always in motion is the future”

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Thank you for the kind words, everyone! I really truly appreciate it!

ben_danger said:

I always wondered if Anakin would have been a stronger character if he just spoke LESS in AOTC, that shot pretty much nails that!

Yeah, I would say he speaks quite a bit less in my version. There are just too many angry/hateful/whiney comments. Wherever I can, I’ve tried to rework the dialogue…but a lot of the time his face says “I’m pissed” so it has to be cut.

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The cut after Mace says “we’re keepers of the peace, not soldiers” I found a tiny bit jarring for some reason. Maybe have the hologram noise start a sec before the cut? Just an idea.

Thank you for this. I wondered about that instance myself. I tried out your suggestion and, yep, I think that did the trick! Thanks for the idea!

By the way, I’m working my way towards a VERY rough workprint. I believe EVERY scene in the film has been reworked to some degree. There will also be some half-baked ideas left in…incomplete scenes/visual fx/sound fx/music…scenes that are almost like an animatic. Why? Well, I’m hoping for specific feedback- … I don’t want to invest all my time and energy into some of these scenes if it’s not working properly. It’ll still be a hot second before it’s ready but it’s getting there! 😉
As long as everyone’s ok with it, I’m gonna include everyone who’s commented here in the thread in the credits.

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Attack of the Clones | Alternate Timeline Edit
https://originaltrilogy.com/topic/SSWRs-Attack-of-the-Clones-Alternate-Timeline-Edit/id/66888
My OLD Return of the Jedi thread. Be gentle.
https://originaltrilogy.com/topic/ROTJ-Fan-O-Matic-3-new-clips/id/7919

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I would definitely be down for a workprint! Haven’t really contributed much as of yet, but I’ve certainly been following this edit’s progress closely.

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