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Here’s what I’ve done so far for the edit TROS: Resurgence

Changelist:

1. New opening crawl (written, but still needs to be done) to make the Knights of Ren feel more dangerous, remove mention of Palpatine, and set up the destruction of Corellia.
2. First scene after the Tie fighters is now reforging Ren’s mask but with clear shots of the monkey elf’s face removed (scenes involving Palpatine are moved to later).
3. Second scene is now Ren and his Knights walking down the hallway; cut the stormtrooper banter “the Knights of Ren…”
4. Third scene is now Ren’s meeting with the First Order leaders. Kept the force choke but cut the ceiling levitation of the guy asking questions. Cut Ren’s reference to hunting the scavenger, instead he ends his speech with “Prepare to crush any worlds that defy us.”
5. This sequences directly into the fourth scene which is now the Star Destroyer arriving at Kijimi and lowering its super cannon. But now this has been changed to be the planet, Corellia. Added brief footage of the Planet Corellia from the film, Solo.
6. Cut to Rey levitating stones while meditating. Cut her groaning and saying “they’re not with me.”
7. Trimmed Leia just standing there watching Rey, so her clunky insertion looks less awkward.
8. Cut Rey’s line about talking to the Jedi that came before.
9. While Rey runs the training course, Corelia is destroyed.
10. Poe, Rey, and Chewy’s scene where they play the game on the Falcon is moved to just after Rey returns the lightsaber and says “Yes, Master” to Leia.
11. Cut Poe turning off the game.
12. Cut Klaud (the weird alien tree monster) from the Falcon and from existence.
13. Trimmed much of Boolio so we see and hear just a little from him.
14. Cut Finn being sassy as he’s bumped around in the Falcon’s gunner seat.
15. Cut Finn’s sassy-pants agreement about “bouldering” the Tie fighters.
16. Cut Finn’s badly delivered line, “WHAT ARE YOU DOING?” Now Poe just simply states he’s lightspeed skipping.
17. Since Klaud doesn’t exist anymore he doesn’t scream during the final lightspeed skip.
18. Cut Poe’s line about the final lightspeed skip. Now he just says “hold on.”
19. Moved Rey reading Luke’s notes on the jungle moon of Ajan Kloss and Falcon arriving there to just after the last lightspeed skip.
20. Trimmed Rey greeting Finn in order to remove his sassy-pants line “always” referring to Poe being in a bad mood.
21. Trimmed Finn’s eye rolling as Rey and Poe bicker.
22. Cut Finn’s useless line “It’s true.”
23. Trimmed and completely rearranged the Resistance briefing scene to remove Poe and others’ references to Palpatine. Exegol is still described by C3PO as a Sith world and this is what scares/surprises everyone. Moved the line “secrets only the Sith knew” to be spoken as Rey is picking up her book. Baby Ackbar is cut completely!
24. Cut Rey’s line to Leia “find the Emperor.”
25. Cut Leia’s V.O. line to Rey as she’s hugging her goodbye.
26. The Falcon’s flight from the jungle moon to Pasaana is now one continuous sequence.

MORE TO FOLLOW.

Edit has begun see change list above in the main description.

Here’s Poe’s intel briefing scene to the Resistance without any direct mentions of Palpatine:

https://youtu.be/jnOmf4amDLQ

DominicCobb said:

Here’s my opening, showing my new crawl and my version of an idea that’s been tossed around here a bit (using the TLJ deleted star destroyer bridge shots):
https://vimeo.com/403066614

Nicely done!

idir_hh I watched your footage and was thinking the behind the scenes with Luke and Leia fighting could be used if you cover the moving camera with a training remote tracking them.

Hal 9000 said:

Ben looks like the studio put him there, not a fan, even if he does look a touch weird. If you’d presented this to me in the context of the movie I wouldn’t have questioned it.

I’m not sure how to take the wording of this comment? Are you saying that it looks really good or looks like the studio put it there?

Rian didn’t have the puppet anymore from ESB so they had to make a new one after the original model except either it was a little different or the camera angle was not ideal because our little green friend got visibly chunkier.

Too many hamburgers in Jedi Heaven??? A comparison of OT Yoda vs ST Yoda.

https://i.ytimg.com/vi/E7hyzu8JGn8/maxresdefault.jpg

DominicCobb said:

Maybe we could try being constructive instead of calling Kylo a “fat cartoon” over and over.

For example, instead of saying “fat” you could say his face is a little too big for his head. I think the “weird, unnatural face” isn’t that weird, I’d actually say the problem is the face and the head nod combo that looks off - I think if you went with one or the other it might work better.

Glad to see someone is agreeing something about this looks off. And sorry if my wording didn’t seem constructive. I realize how much effort this took, and technically it’s quite good.

Also, maybe if someone had told Rian Johnson that Yoda looked pretty fucking fat (in a nice way), then he would have made him look less fat before releasing TJL. Or maybe Jedi heaven has lots of hamburgers idk. In any case I applaud the effort put forth so far on this. In addition I would make Kylo taller than Luke which might also help a bit.

StarkillerAG said:

…I think it’s better to just remove the Rey Palpatine twist completely.

Yep very true. Also TFA and TLJ were better than TROS-- so retconning them to fit TROS instead of just fixing TROS is silly. Unless it excites you so much that Sheev fucks that you can’t bear to lose Rey Palpatine and Kylo’s terrible line “you’re a Palpatine.” How many alternate lines to you think Adam Driver recorded?

You’re a…

“Sith goddess”
“Kenobi-- complete with a British accent”
“Skywalker-- because Luke fucks”
“Product of Luke and Leia’s one night stand before they knew they were related”
“Lamp named Mary Sue”

Hal 9000 said:

As… weird as Luke and Leia seem to me there, Ben seems to blend in.

Leia looks a bit weird/bad-- let’s admit that too. So if someone has the talent and capability to fix this whole scene without adding more to the weirdness, e.g., “fat cartoonish Kylo” and even replacing Leia, all the better. But just because Leia looks weird/bad and Luke looks mediocre, it doesn’t mean it’s ok for Kylo to look weird too. Unless that’s what you’re going for in a joke edit.

idkartist3d said:

Heya! I’m the guy that made that~
Thanks for posting, I tried throwing it up on Reddit but it just got shit on so I deleted it ahah. Glad people here are enjoying it somewhat!

It took talent to get something to look this good, technically. While everyone seems very excited about this, someone has to come in with an alternate opinion to push for something better. The bottom line is with the footage used, Kylo looks fat, extra goofy, and is making a weird, kind of unnatural face. While Anakin looks somewhat wooden, Kylo looks like a cartoon. I know you wanted Kylo smiling, but if this is the best result possible with smiling, then maybe consider not smiling an option. For me, Anakin is not necessary at all.

Don’t let the reddit trolls get you down.

If you could make the dagger have a blinking eye and say “find me” in the Emperor’s voice, then I’d like it.

When I recently used FCPX it had an audio export glitch for some reason where it added faint but shitty pops and clicks even to unedited material. Hope others don’t have that same experience. Seems some models of macbook and the OS version can cause conflicts with FCPX.

I wish I had done a test export before I had gotten in too deep. Now it’s Adobe Premiere all the way but it can have its own issues as well especially with 5.1 channel fidelity under certain circumstances. Sorry FCP7 is not working out anymore.

Version 1 is released. See above for details and change list.

Ewoks die… Palpatine laughs.
Kylo dies… Palpatine laughs.
The Final Order fleet crashes and burns… Palpatine laughs.

Hal 9000 said:

I still don’t have a problem with the scene in the first place. Nothing wrong with showing him finding it real quick; the movies don’t usually rely on the crawl too much anyway.

There is a problem with this scene because it’s the first episode of SW to open with a montage. It feels waaaay off. The opening scenes always use space and spaceships to lead us to a real scene. So the scene itself is usable (cool yet awkward as it is) but not so much for an opening.

No. It would be a pretty cool set up for a continued story where the Dark Phoenix has taken control of the earth and enslaved its population to punish Charles for pretending to love humanity so much while at the same time ruining Jean’s life.

Don’t worry the X-School isn’t that close to Manhattan and they could have survived. 😃

It’s not deleted scenes but it’s something:

https://vimeo.com/398677816

Here is a clip of a new ending for Dark Phoenix: Reborn where Jean declares war on humanity after being betrayed by her father and Charles.

https://youtu.be/gWwyqQxLdbM

This edit has new music scoring, sound fx, and scenes to give a proper tragic ending.

Thanks for going through all the hoops to get it rendered. I’m looking forward to the update. 10 solid days of just rendering is a bit much.

Hal 9000 said:

I’d support that idea and use it if it can be done.

I think that as Kylo is yelling that he’ll find the scavenger, the poor fella is visible squirming up on the ceiling. Also I think it’s a bit dumb how he calls her the scavenger, parroting Snoke like a tool.

Don’t worry, I’ll do that for you.

In the original, Jean put her father to sleep after weakly saying “It’s not me” to him when the walls of the house shook. Now she becomes the Dark Phoenix and kills her father, who abandoned her.

Here’s a clip:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1L52WC4Q8qC2CyFWBXgM8cFD8GE5VUbrB
or lower quality here:
https://youtu.be/2e2Q9XSY3kA

Dark Phoenix: Reborn

To inquire about this edit, email krausfadr at gmail dot com and include the word fanedit in the subject line.

March 9, 2021 V2.1 Color Correction (Previous versions were washed out HDR to SDR conversions. This has been fixed).

Special thanks to reddit u/Calhoun1389 for providing all the great suggestions for the much improved Version 2.

The film X-Men: Dark Phoenix was originally planned to be released by the studio in two parts. Unfortunately they tried to combine their ideas into just one film, resulting in Jean’s weak and uneven characterization.

Also, another film released at the same time used a very similar ending, so much of the final act was very quickly reshot, scored, and edited… and it shows.

This edit helps fix these problems (and more). It uses video and/or audio from the following films:
X-Men Dark Phoenix (2019)
X-Men Apocalypse (2016)
Knowing (2009)

Edit completed. PM me for link and by doing so you agree you own 1080p versions of the above three films.

Major changes:

• Jean goes fully dark from the beginning and kills her father. (UPDATE: Clip here: https://drive.google.com/open?id=1L52WC4Q8qC2CyFWBXgM8cFD8GE5VUbrB or here: https://youtu.be/2e2Q9XSY3kA)
• Xavier mind controlled Jean’s father to take her away and use her power.
• In the end Xavier thinks Jean sacrificed herself to save the world, but she actually declares war on humanity (UPDATE: clip here: https://youtu.be/gWwyqQxLdbM)
• Throughout the story Jean is more aggressive and less apologetic about becoming the Dark Phoenix.
• Reduced screen time of the poorly written expository character, Vuk (played by the talented Jessica Chastain).
• No more alien plot. The aliens are now instead humans “evolved” into a more advanced race by the Dark Phoenix power. By containing the power, Jean has delayed it from evolving the entire planet.
• Vuk no longer wants to control the Dark Phoenix power, she wants to free it from Jean and let it fulfill its purpose on Earth.
• Fight scenes tighter; fix badly edited and choreographed action.

Change list (Version 2 changes noted with V2):

1. Added part of a deleted scene where Charles laments his mistakes.
2. Cut the word Houston from the trite line to NASA control, “Houston we have a problem.”
3. Changed some scoring and sound effects for the space rescue sequence to give it more impact.
4. When Kurt rescues the final astronaut, cut and rearranged the sequence so Kurt doesn’t look inexplicably confused.
5. Replaced Jean’s scream as she absorbs the energy.
6. Cut expository part of Charles’ line: “for anyone in the field.” Referring to Jean’s medical exam.
7. Added a light with energy sound effects in the woods and a light effect to suggest Margaret is transformed (into Vuk) by energy, not killed or body snatched by aliens.
8. Move scene with the creatures in the woods to after Margaret transforms— so now they are following her, not attacking her.
9. Trimmed most of the weird rave girl interlude during the teen mutant party; it was a rather jolting music video inserted into a sci-fi film.
10. Changed subtitled parking lot discussion to show that the creatures (now in human form) were transformed by the energy (no longer aliens).
11. Cut Vuk’s line “If we can control that power, it can resurrect our race. Begin again. Here.”
12. At the reunion of Jean and her father, cut flashback of conversation between Charles and Jean’s father.
13. Jean snaps her father’s spine instead of putting him to sleep.
14. Trimmed the amount of time the father’s body is shown on the floor because his head moved slightly.
15. Trimmed Charles’ opening lines for Raven’s eulogy as they were used in the added opening deleted scene.
16. Trimmed Jean’s hand motions when using telekinesis against different X-Men fighting her.
17. Cut the word stop from Raven’s line “Jean stop.” The acting was not stellar.
18. Cut Charles’ expository dialogue explaining why he stopped Hank from taking the shot.
19. Trimmed Jean’s line to Raven “When it comes…” Left the line “people get hurt” intact. Need less focus on something else making her do bad things.
20. Cut Jean running to help Raven, impaled. She instead just flies away.
21. Trimmed Hank’s reaction time before he starts running to Raven, critically injured.
22. Trimmed Jean crying in the rain. Now she seems to be upset but basking in it.
23. Cut Jean’s father from talking to Vuk since now he’s dead. Added a brief shot of his body to the crime scene.
24. Cut Jean and Erik sitting down with teacups.
25. Cut Erik’s lines to Jean, “Why don’t you start from the beginning.” and “What did you come here to ask me?”
26. Cut Jean’s whiny unsure lines to Erik: How did you stop, I don’t know what’s happening to me, I lose control, bad things happen, etc.
27. Cut recurring instances of Erik questioning the blood on Jean’s shirt.
28. Cut Erik’s line “We don’t get the news out here, Captain.”
29. Cut Jean’s line “It’s me” when she starts up the helicopter.
30. Cut the soldier just leaning away from the helicopter blades kind of like it was no big deal he was about to get decapitated.
31. Trimmed Jean’s hand motions when she telekinetically tosses away the soldier’s weapons so she appears less floundering, more capable.
32. At the compound, Erik moves faster when Jean hurls him into debris.
33. Recut the bar scene with Vuk and Jean so the subject is now about Jean being abandoned, not about being all powerful.
34. Changed subtitled dialogue of Vuk’s colleague to: “The great energy will evolve this species even if it kills her.”
35. When Vuk shows Jean the vision, cut portions which portray her as an alien.
36. Trimmed the mutant street fighting that looked really bad such as silly dodges, falls, bad aim, and other assorted B.S.
37. Cut Vuk telling Jean they’re going to kill you, feel the power inside you.
38. Cut Erik’s line when he confronts Jean, “I know whose blood that was.”
39. Cut Jean’s lines to Erik, “You cast me out now you come to kill me.”
40. The railing moves faster to impail Jean’s eye, still without success.
41. Cut a few bad 80’s synthesizer hits during the Erik/Jean confrontation.
42. Erik moves faster when Jean hurls him out the window.
43. Cut Vuk’s line “She’s not your little girl anymore.”
44. Charles’ memories reveal to Jean he manipulated and forced her father to give her up.
45. Reordered scenes so Vuk no longer watches from the rooftop as Jean is loaded into the ambulance. Given Vuk’s new capabilities she could have just taken her. V2: Recut the rooftop sequence so there is no longer a jarring jump cut of Vuk.
46. During the train ride, cut Erik’s question to Charles about what’s controlling Jean and the related conversation.
47. Charles admits he was wrong, but no longer says he shouldn’t have lied to Jean. His sins are now far greater.
48. Trimmed fighting on the train that looked really bad.
49. Cut bad sounding line from soldier, “What’s the status on those mutants?”
50. Trimmed the close-up of the blonde male attacker on the train. He just gets blasted.
51. When the X-Men unite on the train, reversed direction of a shot so they are moving forward instead of retreating.
52. Cut the female mind controlling mutant asking Hank out of the blue during a confrontation, “what are you doing?” It sounded really bad.
53. Trimmed Storm’s over the top rise from the train.
54. Cut a mutant being pulled from the train by surprise (by her head) since her reaction looked goofy.
55. Sped up Erik throwing an object to deflect an attacker.
56. Trimmed epic(ly bad) jump of Vuk onto the train— she was in high heels and business attire and it looked effing ridiculous.
57. Trimmed the conversation with young Jean forgiving Charles. Jean does not say she forgives him. She does not call the X-Men her family. V2: Made further cuts and added Jean saying “I break things” in response to Charles’ apology so it no longer seems like Jean accepts Charles and her X-Men family.
58. Trimmed the time spent showcasing the protective bubbles around the X-Men inside the train as it disintegrates.
59. At the crash site, trimmed the amount of time it takes for the generic henchmen to rush at Jean.
60. Cut Vuk’s standing still then rushing Jean.
61. V2: Cut Jean healing Scott’s hand, and cut her sad looks to the X-Men just before she flies Vuk into space.
62. Cut Vuk’s shoehorned line about emotions making you weak, and cut Jean’s responses.
63. Changed music and trimmed/recut Charles and Erik’s Paris cafe scene to make it more serious and dark. V2: Added flashback audio of Jean, angry with Charles to better set the tone.
64. Changed music and sound effects as the Phoenix flies over Paris and added the sounds of whispered prayers. This is setting up the Phoenix as a god on Earth.
65. Moved scene of Hank running the school to blend with the New York destruction sequence. V2: Reinstated part of Jean’s narration saying she evolved beyond this world and this is a new beginning-- just before she destroys Manhattan.
66. Moved Jean as the fully transformed Phoenix after New York is burned, reveling in the destruction.
67. Changed music for credits more appropriate for the new darker ending.