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The Luke Scene I like the edition of it very well. I do think the music seems abrupt. My initial thought it would to have the music from Lukes scene continue into Leia’s scene. Maybe tinker with the original music from Leias scene correspondence with the sudden stop from light speed. Something on those lines.

Fathier Chase - Any changes is good to me. If there is a way to manipulate the shot with Rose to keep looking at the fathiers and then smirk … I think it would transition to the teacup scene VERY nicely.

No Kids - It was edited well with a good wipe … but having the falcon ending the movie like that still looks “off” to me.

Hal 9000 said:

Here’s a revised option B with a final “Hello?” at the end. I’m not sure it works better, though. Looking forward to your thoughts about which option B is the best option B.

https://vimeo.com/263147287
password: fanedit

That does it for me. It cuts out the cheese and stays true to their character. Winner to me!

You did a fantastic job on that!

DominicCobb said:

MalàStrana said:

DominicCobb said:

the tone of the film

A movie where Luke dies has the tone of a comedy ? Not sure about the “tone” angle here.

I mean, if you want to cut out all the humor throughout the movie and make it into a very dreary and heavy film, that’s one thing. But if you’re leaving in much of the humor throughout, then it’s important to establish upfront that, while these are very dramatic circumstances with some big powerful moments, this is still a fun Star Wars movie with moments of levity here and there. A film’s tone doesn’t have to be monotonous.

Totally agree. Star Wars should have this mix. I think of the humor like salt … needs the right balance, but is noticeable if there is too little or too much.

pleasehello said:

Nice edits. I did a similar one for the fathier escape (smash-cutting to the teacup), but did it a bit earlier when Rose looks like she’s hatching a plan, so as to remove the children.

I think a lot of people will be using the teacup to shorten the fathier chase.

I would be curios to see your clip.

For this one, which I commented on another thread, there needs to be the addition of the kid looking up and smirking at the Fathier to THEN go to the teacup. From the sounds of it the music/sound timing is the issue … but someone with some skill could probably do that.

DominicCobb said:

I’d say it’s important to keep some humor there, it’s necessary to establish the tone of the film upfront (that is, assuming you don’t cut out all the comedy throughout). Either way, it emphasizes that this is a harebrained “heroic” scheme on Poe’s part, which, combined with the lightheartedness that contrasts with the ultimately rather tragic end of the sequence, establishes Poe’s arc for the film.

All of which is to say, the second clip you posted.

I lean toward this as well.

The latest edit for the Poe/Hux scene is an improvement from your prior one. I think there are really 2 schools of thought on this. 1.) Trim the humor down on it, especially if it makes knocks Hux down too much. or 2.) remove it all. Natedeug made a good edit which removes the whole conversation which Ridley linked to.

I do lean on the first one, more for the character portrayals between Hux and Poe. Hux is all about grand standing and using tech power and showy displays instead of sound military strategies. That is why he is all about the “grand” speeches and flexing muscles. That later is shown on why Hux did not want to have the TIE fighters out to escort the Dreadnaught … he wanted to show off it’s power.

Poe’s character is capable, but cocky. So by keeping some of his humor it stays true to his character, but it also shows his strategy.

Clearly the scene needs trimming, but I do think those elements have an importance.

Watched your edits:

Poe’s Intro - The idea of having NO conversation between Poe and Hux, this can work, with Hux being puzzled by a lone light fighter and NOT firing on it right away since the X-wing boost happens right away. I would also like to see an edit that trims the conversation as opposed to eliminating it all the way. However, this does stand on itself very well.

Maz Convo - Any reduction to this scene is a plus. Nicely done!

Fathier Escape - Same view with the Maz Convo. I would have to watch it again, but man, if there was a quick scene of the kid looking up to the Fathier and smirk … then it cuts to the tea cup rattling … that would be great.

Ending with Post-Credit scene - I REALLY like the idea of a post credit scene with the kid. I am not sure if the actually ending works right … it doesn’t seem right to me since it seems rushed.

Just finished watching it, Hal. It’s very polished and I still like your cuts/edits. Very good sir!

I watched it again, and though I appreciate the toning down … now I do think its a bit too toned down. Mostly too since Poe clearly says “general Hugs” … then the monologue and then the x-wing is fully charged and goes. By drawing it out slightly, maybe like DZ-330 idea/suggestion, it can help it play out a little better without the drawn out bad humor.

That was executed VERY well Hal. As funny as parts of it was, it was too dragged on and just made Hux too dim. I like what you’ve done!

Make a Star Killer Base Emoji. Done! 😉

He lives!

Adywan has a lot of pages to read…

I think MOST edits will be implementing the Luke Has a Moment scene. Not sure why that was not included in theo movie … instead we got a milking a beach cow scene. 😉

I would be curious to see this as well! The DVD quality would be fine for me personally since I use that quality for my Plex server … the playback is too choppy for my home setup. I like a lot of the choices you have going on!

I just watched it again and I gotta say it works perfect!

That did give me chills, not going to lie!

How about 2 beers?

I like that as well. It’s those small details that go a long way!

It works! I watched over a few sections throughout the movie and it all syncs up. I will eventually do a full sit down to confirm!

Hal and crew, FANTASTIC job as usual!

Extracting now …

ChiefWamsutta said:

darthrush said:

Canto Bight First Scene

https://vimeo.com/260454749

-Finn asks Rose if she knows of Canto Bight and she says “only in stories”. After this we cut right to Canto Bight. It’s a nice and streamlined transition with no talk of how the city sucks.
-After they are reported for parking on the beach, we cut to them dashing into the casino, see the codebreaker and then get caught. This shows them in a more desperate rush to help the resistance, removes all animal cruelty elements, capitalism messages, and such. Now we get the core elements of what is needed from Canto Bight.

Feel free to comment on the editing of the clip. I am considering cutting right from “And they just went off towards the casino” to them running in the casino, since the establishing wide shot is a little short.

The jump from the rich folks clinking glasses to the transport on the waterfall is rather sudden. Going from “only in stories” to Canto Bight’s rich folks was seamless. Loved that one. But transitioning to the next scene of the waterfall transport was unexpected for me.

I would remove “They just went off towards the Casino”. The wide shot of Canto Bight between the guy snitching and Finn running in the casino was so short that I didn’t even notice it on the first viewing.

I think this has A LOT of potential, but just lengthen a couple scenes because we transition to multiple places very fast in 47 seconds.

Same feelings here on that, I still agree there is good potential with some more dabbling!

^^ The last part of you comment is something I would like too … keep the shoulder dust off!

INVAR said:

ChainsawAsh said:

INVAR said:

ChainsawAsh said:

I still think it’d be nice to add a bit of the Imperial March to the scene when Vader arrives on the Tantive, though that would mean replacing a small bit of original music.

I already created a brief edit to show what that might look and sound like. It’s minimalist, but it works.

https://player.vimeo.com/video/225892219

That’s exactly how it played out in my head. Very happy you tried this out and that it worked so well. Thanks for sharing!

Thanks. Hopefully Adywan got a glimpse of it. I think it works, but he may not.

I think that works really well for that scene … not over powering the scene.

Ah thanks guys, I think I will wait for all of them to be available to begin the downloads!