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hinventon

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#1557171
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Spence's PT Edits Round 3 (V1 Released)
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I thought it was really great, the edits were smooth and I didn’t really notice anything missing. The train and coloring really help the cgi to blend better too. Here are some things I would maybe change:

  • I think a new crawl with the preserved title would be a good change, the current one is bogged down by taxes and trade routes for two paragraphs instead of establishing the Galaxy.

  • I’d maybe remove the big boss nass blubber, the little one he does before it seems like enough

  • The midichlorian scene could probably be removed completely, I was kind of confused on what qui gon was doing to Anakin. Did he get burnt or something?

  • Personally I’d like to see the whole chosen one prophecy removed, I think the three trilogies mesh better without it. Not sure how you’d do it with qui gon and Yoda at the end though.

  • This may just be my speakers, but I felt like I had to turn the volume up for dialogue and down for the action heavy stuff. Maybe take a look at the mixing?

That’s all I can think of right now, I’ll go back through it and see if anything else sticks out. Can’t wait for AOTC.

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#1553345
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The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
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I’m probably in the minority but I like the theatrical line for the Leia flashback better than it is right now. It implies that Leia is fully a Jedi when she dies, and gives her an actual reason to stop rather than just because. It also mirrors Revenge of the Sith with how Anakin experienced visions of Padme dying, and chose to go to the dark side to prevent it. Here, Leia wants to prevent it at first, but chooses to fully embrace the light at the end, completing her training. And when Ben dies at the end, it fulfills the prophecy, but in a way we didn’t expect. I don’t think it really spoils the ending rather than foreshadows it, and the way in which Ben dies is still a surprise.

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#1540948
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The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
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I think adding a line to Jannah implying that Finn was a known figure amongst the stormtroopers and was at least partly why they were inspired to rebel would be a nice way to suggest the stormtrooper rebellion plotline. Having Jannah know who Finn is makes her more willing to trust him and have him lead the squad into battle later. Something like:

FINN: I never knew there were more.

JANNAH: Deserters. We all heard your story.

Not sure if there’s enough material from Jannah to get a good reading, though.