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GLogus said:

Episode 4 was so good, including its pacing, that it imo it doesn’t any significant trims. All the other episodes, however, have felt needlessly slow.

It was definitely the best episode yet. But I would say the opposite. All of the search for Ahsoka and Purgil scenes were badly paced and need to be heavily trimmed. This episode could easily be cut down to about 35ish minutes as oppose to 49 minutes. The Purgil scene especially dragged on way too long. And all of the Ahsoka and Anakin scenes should be merged together with almost no jumping back to Hera constantly telling everybody to keep searching.

I got to say, after Ep5, I think this show is in dire need of a single movie edit. I really don’t think the first 4-5 episodes will make a good single movie for a two movie edit. Episode 5’s ending feels like the perfect spot for mid-way through one movie. The new Galaxy portion of the show serving as the finale of the movie.

But getting all 5 episodes cut down to only about an hour to an hour and a half would be extremely daunting. We will have to see how long these final 3 episodes are. But as of right now, I think this show would be best served as a 2h30m movie.

Man, I just decided to watch through these movies again recently and it made me remember about this post from years ago! I hope one day you revive this project G&G. Your Return of Godzilla and Godzilla vs. Biollante hybrid was something I was so hyped about!

smudger9 said:

I’ve watched it back a few times and it now feels like Sabine has more of an emotional collapse as she sees help arriving. Shin still clearly wins the duel, so that plot point is retained.
It seems to work and I’ll edit out references to the lightsaber injury in the medical bay.

When you put it that way, I think that is a satisfactory work around. You did good on removing all the references. But there’s still the shot right before she collapses, where you can see Sabine has a hole on her back from where the saber went straight through her.

I tried masking out the wound and sent you the clip via PM if you want to use it.

She obviously appears more wounded than she should be, but it may be the best that can be done. You’d also need to remove the hole in her shirt on her back.

I think it’s a far better solution than leaving the stab in though.

vranir said:

Random fan-edity idea: What if the attack on the Republic ship came after the map and Corellia stuff? Morgan Elsbeth isn’t actually involved in any of it very much, so breaking her out of jail could be reordered as a later step in their plot.

This honestly may be a great idea to radically edit the show. The only problem you run into is you can’t use the scene of Huyang talking about Baylan and Shins lightsabers to Ahsoka. So we’d need some other reason for Ahsoka to walk to another room, so Sabine can have the opportunity to take the map to progress the plot.

I definitely hope we can end up cutting more. I’ve went through all three episodes countless times in Vegas, just trying to find ways to remove large chunks out of it, but just keep coming up short. Only really being able to trim scenes, instead of completely removing them.

I think these 3 episodes only really have about 45 minutes worth of good content in total, but it’d require some absolute radical editing and ideas to get it there.

Here’s some of the stupid things that could hopefully be tackled:

• The New Republic captain allowing Baylan and Shin to enter the ship, knowing they are lying about being Jedi

Maybe we could start this scene in the middle of the fight instead? Skip the whole boarding part all together. We could try something like this: https://vimeo.com/manage/videos/859635415
I feel like adding the alarm sound just helps bridge the scenes together. We would have to recolor the cock pit in the ship establishing shot, since it isn’t lit up red.

• Sabine taking the map to her place, just so the bad guys can easily get the map

Probably can’t be fixed.

• Sabine being stabbed by Shin, only to be completely fine in the next episode like it never happened

Probably can’t be fixed.

• One of the assassin droids staying behind at Sabine’s just so they have a new clue to where they need to go

What if we made the droid Sabine beat, the one they take the head off of instead?

• Shin and the other pilots shooting at Ahsoka on the wing instead of just shooting her downed ship

Like you said, the whole Clone Wars-esque Ahsoka space walk scene can’t be removed.

And I agree with you on the awful pacing of scenes. I think almost every single scene needs some level of trimming. So many scenes drag on far too long. Too many shots of characters just standing and staring at each other, or showing us each character walking to every spot they need to be at in the following scene.

I really would love if the community could brainstorm some radical ideas for this, cause I think there’s something really great here unlike most of the live action shows. But it just needs a lot of work to get there.

Anjohan said:

I’m not going to watch a single episode before someone in here, who despise Disney Star Wars as much as me, give it tremendous amount of praise. I’m eagerly awaiting, and hopeful!

I absolutely despise Disney Star Wars, but I’ll say the show is just okay so far. One of my biggest issues is the god awful pacing, which hopefully a good fanedit can fix.

Another problem is that a bunch of stuff happened off screen between Ahsoka and Sabine that soured their relationship a tad. Makes it hard to connect with the characters when we saw none of this.

There’s some cool moments and some obvious headscratchers, but I don’t think it’s anywhere near as bad as Obi-Wan, Boba, or Mando S3. If you liked Rebels, give it shot. If not, wait for an edit or skip it all together.

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Thanks! What should I dial back? Blur? Contrast?

Some screenshots from WIP Episode 1 “Escape Room”:
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I’m only 45 mins in, and it’s wonderful so far Smudger. I did see one error though. You can see the line from the space background that the crawl transitions to, during the crawl itself. This is in the 1080p version.

https://imgur.com/a/2g20e0j

Hi ya’ll!

I love the new Beavis and Butt-Head seasons, but heavily dislike the digital look of them. So my goal for this edit is to give each episode a more rough aesthetic.

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I will be making “No Music Videos” and regular edits of every episode.

The “Your mother once thought as you do” line is definitely something that needs to be added!

Would love to check out Book 4!

I decided to throw a quick clip together to show the Scorpenek Droid error: https://vimeo.com/822212271

The rancor has already ripped off one of the blaster arms and destroyed the eye of the droid. Then when he throws it to the ground, it reverts back to having both it’s blaster arms and eye while it shuffles around on the floor. Only for it to again revert back to damaged once the Rancor rips the other blaster arm off.

Really excited to check out the new version when it’s available! I’ll try to go through and re-timestamp the scenes I was talking about with the error. It’s really not a huge issue like I said lol. I’d also love to check out Book 3!

I’d love to check this out!

I agree with your cuts Acbagel. I think S3 needs to be treated the same as BoBF, less is definitely more in this case. Also, awesome clip! Really love that you added even more connective tissue between both shows!

I’m gonna give Ashoka a chance because of Rebels, but it’s the last chance Disney is getting out of me.

I think everybody here wants to see Star Wars doing amazing. But until Lucasfilm cleans house, I doubt it will ever be something special again.

That finale was just… nothing. Honestly didn’t feel anything. It’s just going through the motions with mind-numbing dull action scenes. What an awful season as a whole.

Can anything save Star Wars at this point? While I liked Andor, it ain’t great enough to save it. Boba Fett was awful, Kenobi was awful, and now Mando is in the mud with them. If they continue their current track record, Ashoka isn’t going to be good either. The fact they aren’t completely course correcting and instead diving head first into more mud with a Rey movie… I got to say I think live action Star Wars is completely dead to me.

I think I’ll stick to the cartoons, since that’s the only stuff Disney knows how to make. I’d love for them to prove me wrong, but they tend to constantly prove me right.

What was the point of IG-12? I’m honestly baffled at how stupid that entire plot point ended up being.

Finale was meh. This season as a whole felt like BOBF-level quality. Some cool stuff, but mostly just meandering to out-right bad. Not even the finale could save it with that anti-climatic fight with Gideon.

I’m super excited to check out your cut Smudger. While I don’t think anything can really save the writing for this season, having it more bite-sized is the first step to it’s recovery.

I think that’s the best move honestly Smudger.

Though I think you may have more to work with in your first two movies once Ashoka comes out, considering we appear to be seeing Ashoka’s journey to finding Morgan Elsbeth. Once we have more on Elsbeth, her fight with Ashoka may feel more acceptable as a movie ending with all the build up to it. With a little rearranging you may also be able to push all the content forward a notch, allowing you to also end the following movie on Luke’s appearance.

We will have to see though!

Love the changes made Smudger! I agree the Pershing stuff is better left on the cutting room floor.

I think we can do without Grogu getting the armor. If we see it in the finale, like he gets hit or something and it protects him, we can just imply that they armored him up before they went to Mandalore.

But I do think you should keep the flashback though. What if you just implemented parts of it into this scene? Just trim it up.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NO_l-dI5CFY&ab_channel=DailyDisclosure

I’d love to check out your new books 1 and 2!