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I’ve read numerous posts in regards to removing Boba Fett from Jabba’s Palace during Jedi. While I understand the reasoning for this, I think it would be more interesting if he was their waiting for Luke to attempt a rescue Han.

After Luke arrives, Boba Fett can inform Vader that Luke is at Jabba’s Palace. I would probably place this after Luke has killed the Rancor, but before him and Han are reunited:

INT. DEATHSTAR. VADERS CHAMBERS

VADER sits in his mediation chamber. BOBA FETT appears on the view screen.

VADER:
What is it, bounty hunter.

FETT:
Skywalker is here.

VADER:
See to it that he remains there.

Vader leaves the Death Star aboard his shuttle.

Then I would place this after the barge explosion and falcon/ x-wing leaving Tatooine:

Vader can then arrive and enter through the main gates of the palace (mirroring Lukes entrance), however he snaps the necks of the guards using the force, and finds the palace practically empty. This would be after the barge explodes and skiff zooms away…

To me ROTJ has always felt a like a film of two somewhat disconnected halves, I think this would go a long way to remedying that.

Another idea for ROTJ would be to have C-3PO inform Han that the Ewoks were already preparing an assault on the Imperial base, therefore their weapons and traps are justified (I know this is something that bothers a lot of people.)

Okay.

In regards to the “you served my father in the clone wars…” it’s too specific, it in no way implies “you served my father and a one hundred thousand other Senators during the clone wars” further more Obi-Wan served The Republic for thirty odd years before that.

I can’t even imagine why Lucas chose not to use Alderaan as a key planet in the prequels.

I always assumed that the Jedi and Clone Army would at some point come to aid of Aldeeraan, hence “you served my father during the clone wars…”

(I would have the opening battle in Revenge of the Sith take place in the skies above Alderaan. Palpatine could have be on a “diplomatic mission” to ensure Alderaans allegiance to Republic, when the planet is attacked by the Separatists and Palpatine kidnapped.

The contrast with the War Machines and the beautiful peaceful planet below would be much more striking and Coruscant features far to heavily throughout the films. The prequels are almost like a Bond film set entirely in London and MI6 headquarters.)

“Do you remember your mother, your real mother?” Again, pretty specific. Lucas himself has said that this line was included as “The Mother” was going to play an integral role in the prequel trilogy.

The character is just lying or misremembering?

That’s just making excuses for poorly thought out writing.

As for Tarkins’ line “you my friend are all that’s left of their religion…” Personally, and I know this is not how it was originally written (Vader was not intended to be Anakin at this point) I think it can be interpreted that Tarkin knows Vader was once a Jedi.

If Adywan intends to keep Padme and Anakins wedding I think it would resolve a lot of continuity errors it was shifted to Tatooine against the twin sunset at the Lars Homestead. That way we as an audience can assume that they spent some time there between AOTC and ROTS, became more familiar with the Lars family, and that Obi-Wan at some point sent for Anakin…

Just a few suggestions for PT:R.

EP1

When the Queens starship is running the blockade, show the reactions of some handmaidens and troops on the ship, if possible even the Queen herself. I have always found it strange that she is barely featured in this sequence.

Show Anakin losing a race to Sebulba who cheats.

After R2 repairs the shield generator, he drops back down the shoot, we then show the Queens starship making the jump to hyperspace. Whilst in hyper space, Captain Obvious notices the hyperdrive is leaking the ships sub light engine cuts out resulting in them ending up in the Tatooine system.

Maybe have a few abandoned starships in orbit. I never got the feeling of danger on Tatooine that I did in the OT.

If the Pod Race is going to be left in, I would suggest either replacing the pods with T-16’s or Landspeeders (though I highly doubt that this is feasible), in which case I thinking removing the colour schemes from the pods and making them rusting and beat up would suffice. Obviously I would also remove the commentators.

Show the Sith probe droid seeing the Queens cruiser. It does in the screenplay.

Hi there,

I’m currently experimenting with my own fan edit of The Phantom Menace, titled “The Cloak of Darkness”. My goal with this edit is to make the film feel closer to the 1930 serials that inspired Lucas, remove some of the scope and vastness (this is chapter 1 after all), tighten the editing and give the dialogue scenes a sense of energy/ urgency, and attempt to foreshadow events of the following films as if they were planned in advance.

This is the new opening, (Password) fanedit

https://vimeo.com/162163244

In this clip I have re-written the opening crawl to be more personal similar to that of TFA, while trying to maintain an impression of the politics without them being the focus. They should be the back drop for the adventure, not the other way around.

*The crawl is a first draft. It still needs some work. Constructive criticism welcome.

Naboo is not a democracy until Episode II.
Queen Amidala is obviously a child.
Her parents are both dead, which I think helps tie her and Anakin together more convincingly.

*I’m sure many of the cuts/changes have been made by other fan editors.

A few of my intended changes require effects that are well beyond my very limited skill set.

“Try to leave out the part that readers tend to skip.” -Elmore Leonard
“Never use the passive where you can use the active.” -George Orwell