So upon listening to the writer and director commentary for about the fourth time it seems fellowship of the rings structural problems stem from handing off Gandalfs prologue to galadriel or perhaps deciding how much Galadriel / Gandalf / Elrond should own which and what part of the history.
At a guess if we go with galadriel recounting the story of the rings bar the very start of her Elvish Mutterings.
When gandalf leaves for minas tirith essentially you could use the very begining of Galadriels prologue here telling of “the world is changed I feel it in the water…” and so on with environment visuals…this could co-incide with Baradur being rebuilt.
Now Gandalf is at Minas Tirith researching the ring a story only fire can tell.
Gandalf arrives back in the shire and this plays out as in the film.
We then go to a recap of where gandalf had been recounting his meeting with Gollum and learning the enemy knows of the shire and had learned Gollum was captured not only by Strider and kept in Mirkwood by Thranduil but also by Mordor previously. This part is in the film as it stands is made of 3 separate versions of the conversation. How much of it is Divulged is unkonwn in alternate versions.
Once Gandalf darts off to Orthanc to meet Saruman it is then we learn not only about the Maia spirits but that “the nine have left minas morgal” to hunt the ring I feel the Visuals og the nine on horseback should be here.
The shots of the Black riders asking and attacking Hobbits are dispersed later in the timeline raising tension whilst gandalf is trapped and not before this time…
In Moria When talking of Gollum Drodo line should be shortned to “He Escaped” and Gandalf Should have his “escaped or was cutloose…” removed.
Moving Sarumans monologue on Moria could be done later to bridge the jump from them deciding to take the path to Moria and actually arriving there not whilst they are in the decision making process as it were so it would cut from the Image of the Balrog in the book to the Dwarf Aqueduct ruin.
The next scene shuffling part is after Moria Legolass talks of the Beautey of the forest the absence of the Goblins attacking which is deleted should be re-instated. The script states that Haldir takes Frodo and sam up to a high point to look out across the Woods with Dol Guldor visible and Aragorn asks for their protection. Aragorn also talks of the Beutey of the elves also Upon reaching Lorien all shots should be graded as if it were night. Legolass in Lorien in his new costume is perhaps they do arrive in the day but they do not climb the tree stairs until nightfall so there must be some kind of sunset shot missing more than likely. and possibly Haldir saying “Come with us” is preceeding climbing the tree.
This is a guess and not anything concrete but an attempt to fix the inconsistency of the lorien part.
The last part that is a mess is the sarn gebir rapids which although we don’t require a fully fledged battle scene we could have done with a few potshots taken and a quick cgi speed off down the rapids taking us to nightfall and with Gollum following on the log. This then raises the tension for the point where the Urucks catch up at Amon Hen basically rather than intercutting between urucks and the boats a physical attack would have really tied that up even at a small scale and made us feel the chase much more. Never the Less the script does state that when the fellowship look about they were meant to be seing Sarumans crows circling above them but it is missing.
This is a re-strucure guess imagining and uttetance without actually putting it to the test of trying but I am atarting to feel a slight restructure could work and perhaps to the films benefit although I don’t mind how it is if you can make it work better then why not?