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#1206509
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

Taking into consideration Ash’s critique, I’ve toned down the mysterious nature of the disappearances. Now it’s framed as an epidemic of injustice and slavery exacerbated by the lack of a new Jedi Order. I’ve also reverted the first line to the original, since it’s actually quite good.

Luke Skywalker has vanished.
In his absence, the power
of the Jedi Knights has
faded into legend.

Slavery and injustice now
stalk the galaxy, fueling
a new Imperial regime.
With the ability to realize
its grandest designs, this
FIRST ORDER moves
to destroy the allies of
the Jedi wherever they
are found.

While the Republic strives
for a diplomatic solution,
a few bold senators fund a
covert RESISTANCE to
counter these attacks and
find their guardian of
peace and justice amid
the endless stars…

I also realized that there was an easier way to clarify the Republic’s role: Simply have it fight on a different battlefield. The fact that there are no diplomatic solutions don’t completely negate the value of its attempts.

LATE JEDIT: One of the reasons I’m having such trouble writing this crawl is that I don’t want to make it sound like the First Order was a recent occurrence. In the original crawl, it sounds like the First Order arose after Luke vanished, only a few years before the start of the movie. Here’s an attempt at uncoupling the First Order from Luke’s recent activities:

The Jedi Order has fallen.
Betrayed by his students,
the famed Luke Skywalker
has vanished into exile.

Vowing to destroy their
master once and for all,
these evil warriors have
allied with the sinister
FIRST ORDER, a regime
born from the fallen
Empire and concealing
a weapon of devastating
power.

Fearing to take action
that would lead to war,
a few brave senators in
the new Republic fund
a covert RESISTANCE
to find their guardian of
peace and justice amid
the endless stars…

Post
#1205814
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

ChainsawAsh said:

Interesting idea, but I think it sets the audience up to expect that to be a focus of the movie when it ends up being minor subtext at best.

I wouldn’t say it’s a minor subtext, since the theme is shared across all of the main characters and the search for a missing person is the main plot of the movie. But I agree that any mention should be subtle so as to shift the focus of the theme without setting up a specific thematic payoff that doesn’t arrive.

Although, Rey’s main weakness is her desire for a parental figure which can never be truly fulfilled. If the audience also expected a tearful reunion of Rey and Finn with their respective parents, it would be that much more dramatic when it is revealed that such a reunion was never to be.

Post
#1205807
Topic
Star Wars: Firestorm (The Last Jedi Fan Edit) (* unfinished project *)
Time

They’re actually hovering over a fixed point of the planet, which means that the bombs would fall down towards the nearest source of gravity. Everything falls in space.

Or the bombs could have been magnetically impelled down the rails.

Or the topmost bomb in each line could have been pushed mechanically to move the entire line.

Or they could have been drawn to the more massive Dreadnought.

Or they could have been self-propelled like Maul’s probe droids from Episode 1.

There’s five potential explanations with a minute of thought.

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#1205640
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

So I was thinking about other ways to explain the First Order’s massive power, and I got to thinking about how a small Imperial remnant would have the ability to raise a massive army and man their huge base and fleet. The explanation from the movie was that their soldiers were taken from their families at birth and trained for their roles. This is an interesting idea, and something truly different than the clones and willing recruits of the last two trilogies.

I assume that most of the armies of the First Order are sourced from the worlds still under Imperial control, but presumably some are not. Imagining that there was some low-scale epidemic of kidnapping throughout the galaxy for years is a pretty dark reading of the movie, but one that I don’t think is unwarranted. After all, this is a recurring theme in the movie, with Snoke basically turning Klyo and a bunch of Jedi children from under Luke’s nose. With that in mind, here’s an idea of what a crawl would look like:

The galaxy is in turmoil.
Citizens from worlds across
the New Republic have
mysteriously disappeared.

Among those missing is
Luke Skywalker, last of
the Jedi Knights, and in his
absence has arisen a sinister
Imperial order. Armed with
a weapon of unspeakable
power, this FIRST ORDER
moves to destroy the allies
of the Jedi once and for all.

Desperate to avoid another
deadly civil war, the New
Republic funds a covert
RESISTANCE to counter
these attacks and find
their guardian of peace
and justice amid the
countless stars…

This reading also deepens the theme shared between Rey, Finn, and Kylo, which is abandonment by parental figures, and spills over into The Last Jedi to link into the Canto Bight plot.

Post
#1205523
Topic
Politics 2: Electric Boogaloo
Time

chyron8472 said:

CatBus said:

Just in case you didn’t know: whataboutism is a real thing, it just hasn’t been a signature feature of American politics until recently.

To be honest, that was one thing I also didn’t like about Hillary’s campaign during the general election. She didn’t seem to be running so much for herself as she was running against Donald Trump. I liked her much better when she would talk about what she was for rather than when she talked about why Trump couldn’t be allowed access to nuclear codes.

To be honest, that was one thing I also didn’t like about Trump’s campaign during the general election. He didn’t seem to be running so much for himself as he was running against Hillary Clinton. I liked him much better when he would talk about what he was for rather than when he talked about why Hillary couldn’t be allowed access to the nuclear codes.

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#1205063
Topic
Religion
Time

The idea that the soul is a scientifically measurable higher dimensional super thing is a comforting idea on first blush but becomes deeply troubling on further thought. Consider: if the soul is the only aspect of ‘you’ that survives death, and this soul is itself just a measurable thing which exists somewhere like the black box from an airplane, then there’s the possibility that it too could be destroyed, if only by a being of even greater and higher dimensions. It’s quite nightmarish to think that your essence could be in a vat somewhere being poked and prodded by godlike super-scientists.

As I’ve said before, the only way for the soul to be truly eternal and indestructible is for it to be defined as nothingness.