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- #600172
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- CWBorne’s Prequel Treatment Omnibus Thread (Current Work: Revisions & Edits)
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/600172/action/topic#600172
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You give yourself good constructive criticism. I do see what you mean. I was at first confused by an alien female Organa, expecting (of course) to see Leia's adoptive father we hear so much about in the OT. So making sure she is a consistent presence makes sense. It is a tough thing to do...you inspired me to open up by word doc, I have these two story lines of characters ostensibly on the same side, and very male heavy. Did that issue inspire you to go with the strong female Organa?
Your droid idea might just work after all, I look forward to seeing how else they crop up.
There were lines and moments where I thought, there's something familiar about this place, but I couldn't put my finger on it, so I thought you struck a pretty good balance there.
My first outline's finale went in the direction of a WWII-inspired night before the war, lovers in the city, then looking out over the view on Coruscant, the next day the big battle is won, but the implications of a start of war are bittersweet. The sentimentality (and visions of Lucasian love scenes) has demotivated that idea...but what I'm trying to say is that the bittersweet aspect resonates with me as it's the story of old and new ties strained.
Finishing it is a big deal!