Jar Jar Bricks

Idk what you guys are saying v5 is leagues better than v4 lol

NeverarGreat said:

All of these attempts feel almost but not quite there. I think that it has to do with how he says the word ‘end’ as if it’s the final word of the sentence. The word needs a bit more attack and depth here in the middle of the sentence.

Yup. I will say this sounds closer to me than v4, but that might just be because I don’t have headphones rn.

Damn I wish they’d just had it so that Palps wants Rey brought to him by Kylo. Would have simplified so many things.

Almost all of that is top notch work. Well done everyone. Truly amazing stuff.

My one reservation is “Captain Hux”. Still sounds a little too spliced together for my liking. I’m curious to hear how others feel about it, though.

sherlockpotter said:

You know when Merry says “We need some Holdo maneuvers,” and Finn has an ADR line about “That shot is one in a million”? Personally, I don’t hate that line; but I know that it’s been met with some criticism elsewhere. My headcanon explanation as to why the hyperspace ram was a one-off has been that you need a really big vessel to make it impactful, and the Rebellion and the Resistance are always scraping by with what they have. (I’ve seen “Why don’t they just launch hyperspace torpedos at the Death Star” as a complaint against TLJ; but I mean…would a bullet cause just as much destruction as a rocket launcher, even if they’re going at the same speed?) That would also explain why none of the tiny civilian crafts are able to do a ram on Exegol, but another ship was able to do it elsewhere.

My thought was to change Finn’s line from “That shot is one in a million” to “Our ships aren’t big enough.” Anyone have any idea where I could pull dialogue for that line though?

I like that idea. In my head canon, that’s one of the factors as to why it worked - both the Supremacy and the Resistance cruiser were big enough to make the odds of collision much more likely.

NeverarGreat said:

The implication here could be that Rey might have left it specifically for Finn before being taken by Leia rather than Leia having the other one from the outset. Either way, it’s just a fun thing for sharp eyes to notice for the two seconds it’s in frame.

Or it’s just hers and she set it down on the table while saying goodbye to him.

sidshady12 said:

sherlockpotter said:

New attempt. Lots of clean up done, but it may still need some work, of course.

https://streamable.com/t22rsz

Random fan editor here, had to look up what the original scene was but if you don’t know it’s edited it’s impossible to tell it was, after all, movies do this kind of ADR/audio manipulation in post all the time and we probably don’t even know because we don’t know where to look for spliced audio. I’d say this is good enough to work

I definitely wouldn’t go that far, sid. Try some headphones. It’s pretty close, though.

It’s getting very close imo. We’ll have to see how Hal feels though.

I wonder if it would be possible to slice off the “forty” in “forty-two” when 3PO says that the celebration only occurs every 42 years. That way it would only be every 2 years, which is slightly more believable.

Yeah, I know it’s meant to be the difference between 2019 and 1977 (release year of Star Wars), but honestly that’s a really strange easter egg considering the fact that it no longer has any meaning in 2020+.

DZ-330 said:

I think if it was included it should be when Vader first appears:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RQ3h20LYzBA

I would miss the Battle of Hoth version of the march during the extended Death Star battle though if it was being removed.

Ok, now this is perfect. Definitely should be included in any “special edition” of this film.

EddieDean said:

I’m in favour of the inclusion of the Imperial March. This project has often called itself ‘what the special editions should have been’. They’ve never been particularly purist; they’ve been about bringing up the originals to a lovely, more modern standard. Vader in ANH was a lesser villain, yes, but his character was more striking than Lucas anticipated on ANH’s release, so much so that the saga from that point grew around him. Whether or not Lucas/Williams paired Vader with the Imperial March on his first appearance, the two are now paired. It’s entirely appropriate that a project that seeks to polish the original trilogy pair the two in ANH retroactively.

My thoughts exactly.

Tbh, I don’t like the idea of impressions, either. I really only like the actual voices of the actors coming from separate sources.

Here’s my edit of DJ’s talk with Finn. Yet again, another concept that would have worked well with Finn but I feel it wasn’t described enough to make sense:

“Help the…you can’t…look,” DJ began, then he stopped to put his thoughts in order.

“At the end of the day, only the corrupt win from war. Good guys, bad guys, them’s made-up words to keep everyone at each other’s throats. Keeps the money spinning around. Distracts from the bigger enemy. That’s who I really enjoy stealing from…A-ha!”

DJ grinned at something he found on the console, then thumbed a key. A schematic of a TIE fighter appeared, followed by diagrams of a scout walker, TIE bomber, and a TIE interceptor.

“This guy’s an arms dealer,” DJ said. “Bought this beauty selling ships to the bad guys.”

But the next diagram that appeared was a New Republic T-70 X-wing. Then a RZ-2 A-wing interceptor popped up. Finn had a sinking feeling the list went on even further.

“And the good,” DJ said, eyes twinkling. “Canto Bight is known for selling the most weapons and ships to both sides of the war.”

Finn’s face fell, and DJ saw the confusion on his face replaced by dismay.

“Finn, let me learn you something big,” he said. “It’s all a machine, partner. And the assembly line ain’t ever gonna stop churning out more wars for people to fight. Live free. Don’t join.”

Fair points, Burbin. I too hope that the line can be configured that way to sound natural.

The only AI I’ve heard that is convincing is the Ben Solo one. The rest just aren’t there yet.

Another thing worth mentioning about the whole “sensed the death of her son” thingy is that the film is built around it. Leia’s body doesn’t vanish until Ben’s does because that’s when she’s completed her “Jedi path”. Yes, it may be stupid, but it’s just the way they made the film.

Yeah that’s the one part that doesn’t quite fit my perspective. I think Luke’s line there is the only reason why people interpreted it as he never read them.

I wonder if it would be possible to remove just Luke’s line. Probably not, sadly.

I suppose in regular English it would be: “Have you even read them? They were not page-turners.” So his question doesn’t imply he hasn’t read them, it’s more of a “Hey, nothing lost.”

Ah I just never interpreted it that way I suppose. Just because they weren’t page turners doesn’t mean he hasn’t read them. School textbooks aren’t page turners but we still read them if we want to pass our classes lol.

Sorry if this is a stupid question, but when exactly does Luke say that he’s never read them? I’ve heard people say that before but I still to this day don’t know how people got that out of the Yoda scene.

The flow of the beginning of the movie never made much sense to me (even while seeing it the first time) so I’m glad we changed that. But the flow of the ending scenes never felt off to me at all. So I agree with Hal that we should keep it the way it is.

It’s the same as Poppa’s edit. A walker explodes Rose’s speeder, and a walker explodes Finn’s before he reaches his target. The fact that he walks out of it mostly unscathed while Rose is knocked out and injured is a subtle hint at his Force sensitivity (or just lazy writing, lol).

Here is my surprise modification to the ending:

Once he was sure Bargwill could no longer see him, Temiri called his broom to his hand - an ability his friends were jealous of - and returned to sweeping out the fathier stables. The beasts were racing, but soon they’d be led back in and need to be washed and groomed. There’d be a lot to do before they could bed down for the night, and maybe Oniho would be too tired to finish the story and tell him what had happened to the Jedi Master who’d fought an entire army all by himself.

The stable doors were open and the stars blazed in Cantonica’s night sky, above the racetrack. The strokes of his broom stopped when it collided with something that made a jingling noise - a bag overflowing with credits. Temiri could hardly believe his eyes as he heaved it up and inspected its contents.

Temiri counted enough in the bag for him and the rest of the children to never have to work another day for Bargwill ever again.

Movement in the corner of his eye caught his attention. There was a man by the stable door, from the casino based on his appearance. He wore a white tuxedo and a flowing cape. On his lapel was a pin of some sort of red flower. The man gave him a wide, mustachioed grin before walking off.

Temiri followed the man outside, but he had disappeared in the night. All he could see were the stars, which he could now feel calling out to him. The adventures he had always dreamed of having with Arashell were no longer out of reach.

As he stared up at the stars, the boy absentmindedly turned the broom in his hands until he held it at his side, like a lightsaber.

Interestingly enough, the original novelization provides no indication that he is Force sensitive, so I added that. As for the children being wage slaves instead of actual slaves, that is the canon answer, so no biggie there. And since Lando doesn’t show up on Crait, this scene is meant to be his redemption and turnaround moment.

Here are a bunch of things I’m considering for my v2:

• Add Luke’s severed hand to the paraphernalia on Exegol
• Lando doesn’t kill the stormtrooper. Instead, his crossbow bolt electrocutes him. This is necessary because later on he says he doesn’t want to kill stormtroopers, which is why he hasn’t been fighting.
• Finn jokes to Lando about him being the Master Codebreaker (a change in my other novelization)
• The red plom bloom is the last trinket Lando has of his daughter
• In the Palpy vision Rey gets at the end, mention that her father escaped Exegol with the lightsaber that came with Luke’s severed hand. This explains why the lightsaber called out to her at the castle, since it knew her father rescued it before. Presumably her father sells it from there and it ends up in Maz’s possession.
• Add DJ and his ship, the Libertine, to the civilian fleet. Adds some redemption to his character.
• Replace “I’m Rey Solo and this is Ben Solo” in the ending scene with “We’re Skywalkers”. Just makes a lot more sense, and I feel really stupid for not coming up with this before.

There are probably some other things I’m forgetting, but ah well. My TLJ project is nearing completion, so I’ll be working on these things and more when that’s done.

Gotcha sounds good Ady 👍

adywan said:

ESB:R -

Track 1 - New audio mix featuring Jason Wingreen’s original Boba Fett dub.

Track 2 - Same audio mix as above but with Temuera Morrison’s Boba Fett dub.

For some reason I’m not seeing a second audio track. Is this supposed to be made available with the higher bitrate version? Or is there something wrong on my end?