Here’s an updated vision sequence.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JYKveluSYkKQ--zSWQjxNZ-xgPyhI1pa/view?usp=share_link
Bruh… it’s so good.
BTW, by “the last one of those” do you mean the following?
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1N2OquiSEJMfhFk6U4JsQESBUvxT-PZrw/view?usp=sharing
When I put that one in, I wasn’t satisfied with it. Here are a lot more options (most of which are more emotive):
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1HJVzot6mTzlUYWbOqXKVzwsRvxk0UqrW?usp=drive_link
This one sounds the most like her, but it might not match her previous “No…”:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SAKKYXnJJeho9bApygYqt5DLu7Tg8RQl/view?usp=sharing
Here ya are, Hal:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SdvEsuG-4tUZwvxwG8mnCmYoaIXs1PXB/view?usp=sharing
EDIT: Also, so I don’t forget, I still need a replacement for “He’s too dangerous” but with a somewhat fast delivery.
I’ll get on this today.
I like the new vision sequence, but it does have a slight continuity error with Starlight. It uses a shot in which Rey has Sith eyes in Starlight. So I recommend either trying to use a different shot or just straight up using Starlight footage since it’s a vision anyway 😉
If we want him to not giveaway his plan to Rey, then it would be best to rewrite his statements as him transferring her his power in death. It’s another one of those sickly half-truths. Yeah, she gets his power, but also loses her autonomy.
Given what we know from our new intro line (my spirit will pass into you) we know he is lying about this, but it would still be tempting for Rey.
Good news: most of Palpatine’s voice is located in the central channel. I’m shooting it your way shortly, RL.
“I never wanted you dead. I only wanted the strongest to rule.”
“Only the strongest can take the throne.”
Idk, something like that.
Lol that’s such a Palpatine thing to say, too. Like, he’s telling the truth, but he seriously wouldn’t have given a damn if Rey died because of this showdown.
Seems like you put a lot of thought into all of it, but I dunno. I feel like it’s more compelling to have the two main antagonists at odds with each other (Kylo and Palpatine). Otherwise Kylo is right back to serving another master because they both want the same thing (Rey brought before Palpatine). It’s really just a rehash of Episodes 6 and 8.
Whereas the plan we currently have is extremely straightforward and can be summarized in a couple of sentences:
“Palpatine wants Rey dead because he wants to possess Kylo unimpeded, but Kylo anticipates this and wants Rey to join him so they can destroy Palpatine together. When Kylo turns back to the light, he sets his sights on Rey instead.”
I’d like to hear from all of you which of these Poe lines sound the best? Also, which ones might pair together well?
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/107YPYFjOXKBXthoIZl14wJ0OD0RyUjl7?usp=sharing
Please keep in mind that the background noise of some these is a little wonky, but ignore that. RL has the software that can make it clean.
In my opinion, #3 from each sound nicely when paired together.
I’d like to hear from all of you which of these Poe lines sound the best? Also, which ones might pair together well?
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/107YPYFjOXKBXthoIZl14wJ0OD0RyUjl7?usp=sharing
Please keep in mind that the background noise of some these is a little wonky, but ignore that. RL has the software that can make it clean.
Damn, that’s pretty good.
I agree that it isn’t a particularly shocking revelation, but it is highly relevant to Rey. Leia basically lost her entire political career because of the revelation, and yet she still managed to do a lot of good by making the Resistance.
Yup, remove that like all other versions of Ascendant.
To make it more clear, we could have him say: “Leia also struggled with family legacy.”
Here it is all laid out:
Luke: “What are you most afraid of?”
Rey: “Myself.”
Luke: “Because you’re a Palpatine? Leia also struggled with family legacy.”
Rey: “She didn’t tell me.”
Luke: “Rey, some things are stronger than blood…”
Or, to make it clearer still, it could be “Leia also struggled with infamous legacy.”
Luke: “What are you most afraid of?”
Rey: “Myself.”
Luke: “Because you’re a Palpatine? Leia struggled with her bloodline too.”
Rey: “She didn’t tell me. She still trained me.”
Luke: “Because she saw your spirit, your heart. Rey, final lesson, some things are stronger than blood…”
What if it isn’t the “dark” that Leia struggled with, but her bloodline and relation to Vader (which is canon I may add)? I think it makes Luke’s final lesson hit a LOT harder too.
I would nix “She still trained me.”
Okay, that would be too much, I must admit now.
But DZ’s is REALLY good.
Nah, I think we could keep our current flashback dialog the same and just put in what I mentioned earlier to add another dimensional layer to it all.
Right, so it would go. “Because you’re a Palpatine. Leia struggled with the dark, too.” But then Rey’s responses to that would need to be cut because they don’t make much sense.
EDIT: NVM, both of Rey’s responses would make perfect sense. Because somebody who struggles with the dark was still willing to become a Jedi again and train her.
JEDIT: Plus, it makes Leia look like an even shittier mom knowing the darkness her son is struggling with and pawning him off on someone else.
Yup, that would be the characteristic “every old hero has to fail in the new trilogy” the sequels are so fond of.
It also explains 2 other things:
But, at the risk of ignoring my own opinion, I’ve been thinking of an opportunity to tie a few story threads together with an extra line or two in the training flashback sequence.
“She was quick to learn in our training. But as we sparred, a shadow would pass over her. In the end, Leia felt she could better serve the galaxy through diplomacy, as our mother once did. She surrendered her saber to me and said that one day, it would be picked up again, by someone who would finish her journey.”
In juxtaposition with the shot of Leia kicking her brother in the gut and throwing him to the ground, this could imply a struggle with her own pull to the darkness, and their shared concerned look afterward takes on that subtext. This would add another dimension to her wanting to help Rey work through her inner struggle. (Maybe she even regrets her own decision to shy away from the Jedi Path. She learns from her failure and passes it on to her student! Themes!)
Well, I for one actually really like this idea. The fact that Leia has a purple lightsaber now shows that she and Luke really did try to get her darkness under control (Va Paad). But perhaps it just felt too overbearing for her.
Which would also explain why she ships off Ben to Luke because she discovers that same shadow is inside of him. And after that fails, she realizes that Rey needs somebody who understands her struggles to help her, not somebody who would whip out his lightsaber when he senses how much potential evil you can cause.
I’m not sure because I haven’t tried creating the premium voice yet. It takes like 3 weeks for them to get back to you apparently and you have to give them like 3 hours of speech upfront.
Without having access to headphones at the moment, I agree that does sound pretty darn good. Thank you so much for taking the time to run that through so many permutations, man.
No problem. I accidently went for the 22 dollar plan before realizing that the premium voice cloning is basically useless because it requires authentication from the real person lol. So I’ve got an abundance of credits for this stuff.
Here it is in context (I should have done this first, sorry about that):
https://youtu.be/WQ-5Atg_LaQ?si=y0EEM2lD90_LqH3H
Google Drive derps like that on audio playback sometimes. It’s there, I recommend downloading it so it doesn’t start late.
I’m pretty satisfied with the new version of Luke’s line:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rNhtGhfcfRMi5czEbeP2MF1JviWbE2-7/view?usp=sharing
I generated it upwards of 100+ times so that’s probably the best we’re gonna get. Not unless I splice together some of the really excellent ones which derped out either at the beginning or end.
Eh, I personally think that’s a very minor issue. If you go to that scene in question you only see the bottom half of this page, so it’s hard to spot the similarities. Plus, it’s not like any of these writings are decipherable so it could merely be following the same formatting as previous pages.
But, as RL pointed out, the struggle for Rey isn’t necessarily concerning a family itself, but what name she should go by. Toward the end of the film, Palpatine even refers to the Resistance fleet as her “new family”.
I think the line would actually make Rey’s arc of self-confidence issues and worthiness much more apparent than the original.