That would spoil his appearance at the end of the movie. It would need to be something before he dies but after the chain collision.
If we want to show that Palps really hates Rey for whatever reason this is a better take of that second line:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1IQ2yk3Al4MYFn7s1DnozT7Cby9Xi0BW_/view?usp=sharing
EDIT: Replaced it with a better take with the same concept.
I tried it without removing background noise because we kinda want the hologram effects and this is what I’ve come up with so far:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1v7tF8pPnr0AVDQbfdD81bVUFBLQlqk7N/view?usp=sharing
I think we could actually cut “Let her approach” because right after that he’d say “She will come. Her friends will follow.”
I think we’ll get solid results if we use only Palp’s lines from that hologram scene as input. Granted, I’m not sure there’s enough there to reach 30 seconds.
I shat out a bunch of Poe options here:
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/107YPYFjOXKBXthoIZl14wJ0OD0RyUjl7?usp=drive_link
It sounds like #3 and #4 of each voice line are the best. So some combination there.
Are there any other outstanding ideas we have? It sounds like Hal isn’t too keen on AI Palpatine.
Damn bruh. So good.
Chills. Lots of chills.
The “And you” version I just slapped together quickly because the reading came to me. I’m curious if people would prefer that line reading if I nailed it down, or like the v1 line reading. Again, not based on quality but just the line alone.
EDIT: Also, is the new shot okay?
What is this “new shot” you’re referring to? 😉 Don’t tell me or it’ll stand out all of a sudden.
I think it would work really well with that line, if perfected. I like the idea that it’s the Force which is bringing all of these defected stormtroopers together to help heal the galaxy.
I love that touch about Finn being an inspiration. However, she says “It wasn’t a decision, but like an instinct”. But her saying that Finn inspired them very clearly makes their mutiny a conscious decision, otherwise why mention it? I think it has the risk of becoming muddles between conscious decision and unconscious instinct.
I had this same thought when I was putting all this together. But I think the reason she calls it an instinct is because they did it completely in unison. As in, there were absolutely zero doubts on what they should do.
Whereas what you’re describing is more of a one-by-one laying down of the arms, which definitely is more of a decision.
Also, I take back what I said in my PM, RL. I think Finn’s line about the Resistance being where the stormtroopers belong is an excellent callback to TLJ, and it doesn’t take away from his talk about the Force itself whatsoever.
I do think that the first test is more seamless, though. “And you” would be a perfect line, but it doesn’t sound right.
Awesome! Thanks for that.
It’s frustratingly close at this point (please note I wasn’t able to fully remove her original first line in the background):
https://youtu.be/wXYFxgIqVdE?si=6_wRdXaOJ-b0hkwM
I think after a different generation of the first line we should be there. But here are the two raw lines:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/13dL8se4tcS2V0sKm5yIhWFxv4fMiMw1B/view?usp=sharing
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OgtDE-QQTyKL5fGzrVyBfj6gzcR8TB4C/view?usp=sharing
Also - so you don’t forget, Hal - remember to fix that sound overlap before Rey starts to heal Ben 😃
Changed Rey’s line to Leia as she turns over the lightsaber from “your brother’s saber” to “your family’s saber” to begin to plant a seed about eventually identifying herself with the Skywalker family (AI voice provided by Jar Jar Bricks)
In a callback to a line modified earlier, when Leia hands Leia the saber before she departs the base, she tells Rey, “You are family” (AI line provided by Jar Jar Bricks)
I had nothing to do with these two. RL did both of these 😉
I used the whole sample, but something tells me I could have gotten better results faster if I’d cut out the lines she says outside.
I’d be interested in generating both of these lines again. While the first line sounds good, I think it would sound even better with different emphasis on certain words. And the second one is definitely not fully there, yet. Shouldn’t be an issue though. I only spent a few minutes trying with each (for reference, I normally spend 10-20 minutes to get ones that we actually use).
- Jannah AI voice to make it clear her company views Finn as their inspiration for rebelling
So yeah, here’s this:
https://youtu.be/3DCC0abhlw8?si=Ldy4RsWbMnQocf-E
I think the first line sounds pretty good but the second one could be improved (or removed entirely). Really it’s only the first one that’s important.
Yeah, so his mouth his fairly invisible during the whole: “Send a ship to a world they know. Let it burn. The Final Order begins.” And this is ideally the dialog we would want to replace. Since it comes right before “She will come, her friends will follow”, we could start drafting what he could say about Rey. Perhaps something like, “My granddaughter will be my vessel in place of Kylo Ren. Do not disturb her approach.”
The trouble is that Palpatine’s voice is ingrained in all 5 channels in this scene. So… yeah. We’d need an audio wizard to patch this up.
One other fun thing I’d like to do is redub “Come to me on Exegol, General Pryde” with “Come to me on Exegol, Supreme Leader”. To make it clear that since Kylo Ren is gone he has inherited the 2nd in command below the Emperor.
Is his mouth fairly visible in that scene? I don’t remember.
I agree that the first line could be improved a significant amount, but I thought the second one was pretty convincing:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1wIpgh7G_RLGMj1Jzoa4qcJGrMx_CZqQC/view?usp=sharing
EDIT: I doubt the hologram scene would work well because of the hologram distortion.
I’m planning on following RL’s recommended Jannah lines because it matches up with when her face is off screen.
As for Palpatine, I think simplicity would work best here. “Long have I waited… for a worthy heir to the Sith. But Kylo Ren was weak. Empress Palpatine. You will take the throne.”
Here’s an extremely rough test of this idea (I suck at editing):
https://youtu.be/sFCtq0M8w4I?si=iF21LcwUelxgODyB
The lines sound really good to me though.
I really like that idea, RL. In canon, we literally have zero clue how Kylo figured out about the dyad. And it wouldn’t be hard to get a convincing AI Anakin voice through our new method.
It’s honestly mind-boggling that they didn’t take advantage of this opportunity in the script to begin with.
But even with this change, people can still make the argument that a pivotal moment in Finn’s arc shouldn’t have been relegated to expository dialog. Would have been cool to see a flashback similar to the one Luke gives Rey that shows what actually happened to Jannah and co.
I like the idea of Jannah attributing her company’s own awakening to Finn’s, like a ripple effect. Might just be a touch weird she does not react to him identifying himself or that she doesn’t recognize him on sight.
But she does react to him identifying himself. Watch it again. She exclaims: “You!?” But then it’s dropped and never mentioned again even though clearly the concept of FN-2187 is important to her.
That she wouldn’t recognize his face is completely understandable. The FO probably tried to keep his betrayal under wraps, and TFA makes it very clear that troops are supposed to keep their helmets on all the time (“Who gave you permission to remove your helmet?”)
I’m planning on following RL’s recommended Jannah lines because it matches up with when her face is off screen.
As for Palpatine, I think simplicity would work best here. “Long have I waited… for a worthy heir to the Sith. But Kylo Ren was weak. Empress Palpatine. You will take the throne.”
Ah, that’s fair enough.
So, here’s what I believe I still need to help with:
Am I missing anything else?