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#1234670
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THE CHOSEN ONE: A STAR WARS STORY (RELEASED!!!)
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SparkySywer said:

I feel a little bad for criticizing this, because it’s better than any work I’ve ever put out, but you asked for comments so here’s some stuff I noticed:

I personally and subjectively just don’t like the music used in the opening text, and I really don’t like the idea of force sensitivity, but those really feel like me things, so I don’t hold it against you or the fanedit in any way.

I really do like the way setting cards were used, adding the year was a good idea. Although it’s not obvious to everyone what BBY means. It limits accessibility a little bit.

Really like the way you cut out the podrace. Starting the movie where you did was effective. Additionally, cutting right from the Phantom Menace to Revenge of the Sith is also something that works pretty well.

The color correction in the Battle of Coruscant looks great. Love it! The lightsabers look a little washed out in the hangar scenes though. Color correction elsewhere also looks great. Especially in the scene where Anakin confronts Padme.

The dream effect doesn’t work so well in that one shot where Padme, Anakin, Owen and Beru are all in shot, because Padme and Beru are still visible, but awkwardly cut off. It’s like in a Pan and Scan if two characters were right next to each other in the original or in previous shots, but one was just off screen. Feels weird. There are a few more shots like this, but that’s the first thing I saw. Additionally, there being two different dream effects is a little weird, maybe (if you plan on making a second version) recreate the second dream using your effect? I’m pretty sure it’s possible using footage from later in the movie.

The last scene with Vader is a little tonally weird. Definitely less cringey than the original, and more accurate to Vader’s character, but it doesn’t fit very well in the otherwise kinda chill ending.

I love the voiceover in the last scene. It’s not the first time I’ve seen something like this in a prequel fanedit, but I fall for it every time.


I normally don’t think that you can make good prequel fanedits without straying far away from the Star Wars formula. This doesn’t really disprove that, because it does stray away from it, but it was surprisingly good and could act as a good replacement for Revenge of the Sith.

Thank you so much!!!
I don’t think I’ll make another version of this, but if I will, I’ll be sure to take note of your suggestions.
About the Tatooine dream scene I agree with you. I rewatched it some days ago and I don’t really like how it came out…

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#1226029
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THE CHOSEN ONE: A STAR WARS STORY (RELEASED!!!)
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EDIT RELEASED!!!

I finally managed to upload this on Mega (with Megasync software, which was a little bit faster).

Now… it is a huge file, over 8gb, but I hope it’s worth the time.

PM ME IF YOU ARE INTERESTED, and I will give you the link to download the 9 parts.
(When you have downloaded all of them you’ll simply need to right-click on the first one and click on “Extract here”).

I’d really really really really like to get reviews and comments.
Thank you 😉

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#1225817
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Anakin Starkiller said:

While I think the Prequels deserve to be their own full trilogy (and certainly work better as such than trying to cram all three movies into one, though it seems you have avoided that by anchoring the story to RotS and making the rest flashbacks), the novelty alone makes me interested in seeing this edit.

I agree. I don’t hate the prequels, even if they have many problems. I’ll say that I quite like them, cause the PT is the one that made me approach to SW.
My edit, of course, will cut maaaaaany plot points, but at least I hope it is a movie that can be watched alone, by itself, without giving the feel of something that is missing…

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#1225816
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In fact mine doesn’t start with that. As explained in the changelog, it starts with Darth Maul landing on Tatooine and then with Qui Gon “recruiting” young Anakin.
I kept a small part of Maul-Qui Gon duel during the first Anakin dream scene.

I hope to finish the upload in a few days. Otherwise I’ll have to end it during the first days of August, cause I’m starting my holidays next week.

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#1223135
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I’m deeply sorry for the lack of updates, but I had to study really hard for three university exams… and I had some familiar problems.
I changed some little things (musics, most of all).
I hope to get it released in a few days.

I’m pretty satisfied with the result. I think it’s the best I could have done with the tools I have.
Nice color correction, it sums up all PT important parts, and it fixes some continuity errors.
I would really really really like to have many reviews as soon as I upload it 😉

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#1215232
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Vladius said:

IlFanEditore said:

I would like to get some suggestions about the opening text.

Right now there is written:

"The GALACTIC REPUBLIC has guaranteed peace
in the galaxy for thousands of years.

The Jedi Order serves the Galactic Senate,
led by the Supreme Chancellor.

While a group of systems fights for independence in the CLONE WARS,
the Sith, ancient enemies of the Jedi, return.

The Sith Lord Darth Sidious secretly takes control of
the Separatist Alliance to weaken the Jedi".

Is it good?
Or… how would you change it?

I like it. Maybe add something like,
the Sith, ancient enemies of the Jedi, return from the shadows.

Yes, perfect 😉 Thank you.

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#1215096
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I would like to get some suggestions about the opening text.

Right now there is written:

"The GALACTIC REPUBLIC has guaranteed peace
in the galaxy for thousands of years.

The Jedi Order serves the Galactic Senate,
led by the Supreme Chancellor.

While a group of systems fights for independence in the CLONE WARS,
the Sith, ancient enemies of the Jedi, return.

The Sith Lord Darth Sidious secretly takes control of
the Separatist Alliance to weaken the Jedi".

Is it good?
Or… how would you change it?

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#1214663
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About Maul I disagree.
This is a spinoff, so first of all it is meant to be watched after the OT.
Plus, I think it is nice to see someone (Maul) that you don’t know at the beginning, and to have the revelation after a few minutes, that he is a Sith Lord.
You can have some doubts about who he is, but when he uses his lightsaber you find out that he is a Sith. The scene is of course meant to set the threat.

But thank you for the suggestions about the opening titles. I’ll reduce caps words and rewrite something about the war, the separatist and the Sith to make it sound easier.

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#1214161
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I would really, REALLY like to have a feedback on this.

NEW OPENING.

Considering that spinoffs are not treated like normal saga movies, and that SOLO had some text, even though not the classic crawl, I thought I could add some introduction text to explain what’s happening with the Republic, the Jedi, the Sith, the Clone Wars. It also explains why Qui Gonn and Obi Wan are on Tatooine.

Don’t mind the error (“and ancient emey emerges”), but if you have any corrections on how to make it sound better in English, feel free to tell me.

Password: chosenone
https://vimeo.com/273178677

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#1212881
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NEW MUSIC CLIP.

Sorry for the lack of updates, but I’m Italian and I follow politics on daily basis, so maybe you know what’s happening here. Plus, I have three university exams, so…

But here I am.
Simple clip, with a new short music.
I want to show the ambiguous nature of Anakin. During the duel with Dooku we see that he is being seduced by the dark side and that he is afraid because of what happened to his mother.
But at the same time I want him to be an epic hero, and that he could be the best Jedi ever if he remains on the Light side.
I think the music fits pretty well.

Plus, you can see full color correction, and during the Obi Wan-Anakin chat I cut the “Are you coming, master?”, because, as you know, I want to make less obvious that the two are Master/Apprentice and more obvious that they are friends. We don’t know when Qui Gonn died, it could have happened two days earlier for what we know, so I think it fits better for them to be just friend. We subliminally know that Obi Wan is a fatherly figure to Anakin…

Password: chosenone
https://vimeo.com/272545984

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#1209158
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ANAKIN’S DREAM SCENE.

I’d really like to get a feedback on this.

As you can see, like in the previous edit, I cut out the first part of the balcony scene.
No Anakin and Padme telling how much they love each other and how blind they are.

We cut to the dream.
And I want the two dreams to have a purpose.

  1. Show Shmi’s death. We see her during the edit’s prologue, so we have to know what happened to her. Plus, it reminds us that Anakin already failed to save a person he loved. He does not want to be weak again.
  2. Show Qui Gonn’s death. Considering that we don’t see Obi Wan, this could have happened even a year before ROTS. So we can still believe that Qui Gonn has been Anakin’s master, at least for a time.
  3. Now here’s how I made it. The music is taken from the famous Clone Wars episode where Anakin sees the future, he sees that he will become Vader. I think the audio works quite fine. It gives that chaotic feel… Then I placed some cloudy effect, I zoomed and rotated the scenes a bit and placed a light effect to make it all more “dreamy”. But I kept Padme the same, different from other parts of the dream, because I want to imply that this is a fake, this is not a memory, it is something that Palpatine puts into Anakin’s mind.

Password: chosenone
https://vimeo.com/271352841