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- TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released)
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I like Han tossing the guy. Kinda has an Indiana Jones vibe
I like Han tossing the guy. Kinda has an Indiana Jones vibe
Yeah, upon a few more watches. V2 is less distracting without the repeated shot.
4D V3 for the win!
4D is perfect!
Have you given any thought to ending the movie on the Falcon group shot? I think that would be awesome as it could help alleviate all the ST films ending with the same theme and have a more upbeat and quick ending. Maybe broom boi could be recycled as an ending for IX.
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Wait, what?!
Look closely for Chopper in Echo Base 😉
Ending on the Millennium Falcon in hyperspace searching for a new home is a perfect way to end the movie.
I’ve always hated broom boi so I would be down for this. And I think the Canto Bight scene can stay as it helps build the world or revert to the V1 version. Swap the shots of the Falcon in hyperspace and group shot and circle out with the group shot in the Falcon. I did a sample of this before. If I find the link I will attach below.
https://vimeo.com/266600925
Pw: fanedit
One more nitpick on the radio scene. Are you able to extend the last shot of the radio slightly longer to finish out the music? It gives the audience a little longer to figure out what is going on and the music helps to play into the mystery. By the time we hear the Falcon it will be quiet and a little more somber.
Another Palpatine hint could be adding one in towards the beginning of the movie when Rey is training with Luke, the “you went straight to the dark scene” a subtle quiet laugh could be added before Luke screams “Rey!”
Where is this dialog from? If it’s from the previous films I would recommend using the dialog from FortNit by the Emperor. It’s spoken by Ian McDermit and it’s referring to the message of Revenge sent out to the whole Galaxy before TROS.
The problem with using that is it hurts the timeline of the films and will hurt the opening of ROS. A year is supposed to pass between films. The Emperor’s goal at this point of the story would be for Kylo to seek him out. Only Kylo is only supposed to get a hint of what is out there.
The Fortnite message would play a lot better in ROS. The common idea around here seems to be the removal of Palpatine from the crawl of IX and have his return happen in movie. We would actualy hear the broadcast at the beginning of the movie when the Star Destroyers raise up from the ice.
Also, even ROS copies direct Palpatine dialog from the prequels so reusing lines is something even the original filmmakers are doing. 😃
Also, DZ-330, I made another try at swapping the shots, same link as above. I cut to the closeup of his eyes on the word “Destiny” which feels better and more purposeful than what I did before. Also, the same link as above (so two options currently; with and without swapped shots).
I like this version a lot more. Don’t know why but it just feels more natural. The eyes at the end just make the last shot of Kylo in the movie too rushed the more I think if it.
Here’s another update, same link:
https://vimeo.com/382154087
PW: faneditThis version, I adjusted timing slightly (hopefully an improvement), tweaked the effects on the voice, and added in just a little bit of the Emperor’s theme.
Perfection 😊
Gave it a second watch and the audio sounds great. I would suggest flipping the 2nd and 3rd reactions shots from Kylo.
That ways it goes as follows:
Radio static starts
Kylo looks up
Radio plays message
Zoom on Kylo’s eyes as message plays
Radio ends
Kylo stares
Radio static shot
Next scene
Building off DZ-330’s edit and Ash’s note on balance, here’s a next pass.
https://vimeo.com/382154087
PW: fanedit(Sirnoob1126, PM sent!)
I would make Palpatine’s laugh a little quieter, I also added a radio effect over his voice just to blend it better. Otherwise 👍👍👍
Also, from what we know from IX, as soon as Palps realizes Luke is gone, he jumps at Kylo.
I don’t know, it’s impressive work, but I just don’t feel it belongs in this movie. It feels too much like a teaser or in-film marketing for the next movie, which is something I associate with Marvel and not Star Wars.
I agree with your point, but I think one of TLJ’s main issues is that the ending doesn’t really build up to anything in IX in a satisfying way. Hopefully by adding some hint of what is to come it will help make the trilogy feel more well-thought-out
Unfortunately my video editor that I use is trash, and anything I make won’t be nearly as good of quality and there are framerate issues and audio problems. I had a hard enough time getting that video out.
I am thinking cropped 4K shots to hide the repeats and I think we might have something good. I can help with the structuring of the scenes and possibly an audio track, but as far as messing with the video, I think I already hit the max my PC will let me!
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Full Palpatine Scene
https://vimeo.com/382129856
PW: fanedit
My garage video editor messed up the frames when exporting but the idea is still the same haha
JEDIT: Updated link with corrected video
we don’t lose it, uploading a full version shortly
Here’s my take, the scene would stay AS IS until Kylo is on his knees.
Then, this kicks in:
Link
PW: fanedit
Can you send me a PM pf your Palpatine audio? It sounds a lot clearer than mine. I’m currently working on something based off of your idea.
I like it, but I would try to add a little more of a radio effect to Palpatine’s voice
Here is another potential crawl:
Episode IX
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER
Luke Skywalker has ignited
a resurgence of hope in
the galaxy. Countless worlds
have risen up against the
diabolical FIRST ORDER.
REY, the last hope of the
Jedi, continues her training
under General Leia Organa,
hopeful that she will find
a way to commune with
Jedi of the past.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader
KYLO REN seeks out the source
of his former master’s power,
determined to destroy any
threat to his rule. . . .
Would you consider an alternate ending where Ben lives?
It seems the scene was edited in reshoots and this YouTuber seems to have pieced together the original scene. Link
I’m just not sure how to encorporate Ben in the Finale. Maybe remove the Rey Skywalker scene and add Ben in the last scene with Rey.