Grand Admiral Thrawn

If that was the case why did he scream when Vader threw him down the shaft in VI?

Here is the clip from Poppasketti’s drive:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1NYT-nY7EtXb-FL32fRLnJe7gCNUTe7sD/view?usp=drivesdk

mikereese971 said:

Not to mention the thematic resonance that would add, given that this is the conclusion of the entire Skywalker Saga. As the Saga ends, so too does the Skywalker lightsaber.

Agreed. One thing I hate most about this movie is it does very little to try and end things. Take some risks! Kill some characters! Do something! Breaking the two Skywalker lightsabers takes a risk.

If it could somehow be shown that Luke and Leia’s sabers are broken after the Palpatine fight, that would make burying them and her making her own make much more sense. Maybe in the shots of Rey holding and dropping the lightsabers on the ground some sparks could be added coming out of the sabers, like Palpatine’s lightening fried them or something like that? Or even some smoke? Something to hint that they are broken.

It would be harder to do but maybe have them still ignited when she holds them and they both sizzle out on the ground?

That would be hard to do as half of their banter is involving broken BB-8

Don’t forget Luke’s haircut!

Do you have the most recent version of the edit? Because those are in it.

DominicCobb said:

I believe I suggested the idea as well awhile back. I can’t watch that scene without thinking of that missed opportunity. I’d love to see it if some wizard could possibly whip it up.

All credit to you if you posted it first lol. Either way I like the way ya think!

That was me that suggested the idea haha. Love the mockup 😃

JakeRyan17 said:

Here’s an attempt using that reading of “a”:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xQZgJAc1umsYUKpgjEEc8DcrBCXnZsrg/view?usp=sharing

Would this be considered for V2?

Replacing Rey’s line:
“And I… I’m all the Jedi”
with
“And I… I’m a Jedi”

That would be a good addition for this edit to have.

Could Finn’s “you gotta boyfriend? a cute boyfriend?” be removed? A Rey/Finn romance is never established in the ST and it feels out of place. Plus it always felt kinda odd for Finn to be concerned about that during that moment.

Not sure how old you are but college worked best for me. Kinda hard given the world today though.

What if she just responded to “I AM ALL THE SITH!” with “I am a Jedi.” She’s finally accepting her role and place in the story, and it’s a nice callback to the “I am a Jedi, like my father…” from ROTJ

Or add Rose somewhere? Any way to tie this trilogy more together is a win.

Would it be possible to maybe add Holdo to the briefing on D’Qar?

StarkillerAG said:
Yes, that’s a great idea! Not only did that line make Luke look like a hypocrite for not even reading his most sacred texts, but it blatantly contradicts the next movie. It needs to go.

That always bothered me ever since I saw the film. If Luke cares so much about the texts and Jedi and even tries to run into a burning tree to save them. Why would he not have read them?! It just makes Luke seem childish and foolish for the sake of making a joke work. Now if the joke were between Luke and Rey or even Rey and Yoda it would work. Overconfident new Jedi Rey defending texts she’s never read vs. Jedi Master Luke not even bothering to read texts he spent 30 years tracking down. It NEEDS to go.

One thing that has ALWAYS bugged me about TLJ was Poe not knowing who Holdo is. We all know she should have been in TFA, but it’s like a solider not knowing who the Vice President is. Cut Poe not knowing who she is.

I second the “time remaining” removal.

Would it be possible to have Luke not ignite his green lightsaber on Kylo? I have seen some impressive edits of this on YouTube where the green glow is removed from Kylo and his eyes. Kylo wakes up, sees Luke hovering with his lightsaber out and looking distraught, and then Ben “turns on him” and Luke defends. I think this will help greatly to “re-characterize” Luke in the film and make Ben’s decision more his own. The whole “pulling a weapon on my unarmed nephew” is still something a lot of fans struggle with.

Since Snoke=Palpatine, is it possible to remove his mention of bridging their minds? If Palpatine was controlling Snoke then why would their connection be a surprise?! Removing Snoke inconsistences is key to making a more cohesive trilogy

I would still love to see the “slow-mo” shots removed from Kylo vs Luke like in Hal’s most recent TLJ update.

Maybe more could be added to Palpatine’s radio contact so it is a little clearer what is happening. I watched the most recent version with a TLJ first timer and they were confused. “My boy, Snoke was just the beginning, find me.”

JEDIT:
THE SACRED JEDI TEXTS!!! I think the lines between Yoda/Luke, “ahh, read them have you? Page turners they were not!” Needs to go. It makes Luke seem like he didn’t even read/study the books, but then in TROS we find out Luke did study them and annotated them. I suggest, “Luke: The Sacred Jedi Texts! Yoda: Yes, yes. Wisdom they held…”

Somehow… Jonh returned. Get them hair clippers out hahah

I believe Jonh said he will be out for a few. Poppa, please be our savior and work your magic.

Take 2! 😃

War is beginning to spread across the galaxy.

New battlefields are rapidly emerging as the armies of the Republic and Separatists fight for control.

Taking a direct role in this conflict, Senator BAIL ORGANA has began providing relief and supplies to numerous clone squadrons on the front lines.

Anakin Skywalker has achieved the rank of JEDI KNIGHT. In honor of this achievement, Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi has put in a request to teach his skills to a new padawan learner.

Meanwhile, the pair have tracked Count Dooku’s vicious assassin, ASAJJ VENTRESS, to the planet of Christophsis.

But Ventress is far more cunning than she appears…

Can I suggest some alternate text for the beginning? Writing alternate crawls is an odd Star Wars hobby of mine!

NEW OPENING CRAWL:

War is spreading across the galaxy.

New battlefields are rapidly emerging as the armies of the Republic and Separatists fight for control.

Taking a direct role in this conflict, Senator BAIL ORGANA has began providing relief and supplies to numerous clone squadrons on the front lines.

Anakin Skywalker has achieved the rank of JEDI KNIGHT. In honor of this achievement, his master Obi-Wan Kenobi has put in a request for Anakin to teach his skills to a new padawan.

Meanwhile, the pair have tracked Count Dooku’s vicious Sith assassin, ASAJJ VENTRESS, to the planet of Christophsis.
But Ventress is far more cunning than she appears…

And here I am trolling back with Sheev quotes lol

The makeup department is a pathway to many characters that some consider to look… unnatural.

That might be perfect when Rey is looking at the stars and we hear the voices. Luke is rallying the troops to fight Papa Palps.