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Hal has already stated before that he just wants to include only the “Phantom Four” (Luke, Anakin, Ben, Yoda)

One thing that’s always erked me was the over the top heavy breathing.

“I… heh. heh. heh… I’m a Jedi.”

I know it’s nitpicky but I think it would make she scene a little more serious if they weren’t as pronounced in the film as they are now.

I think if it was included it should be when Vader first appears:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RQ3h20LYzBA

I would miss the Battle of Hoth version of the march during the extended Death Star battle though if it was being removed.

I just made a quick edit of the line without any word modification and it sounds fine to my ears:

“Leia had told me that she had sensed the death of her son at the end of her Jedi path.”

Audio Link

I still think it needs a little work but would love to replace the existing dialogue either way.

Better yet, a track with “added” music and a track without.

Jar Jar Bricks said:

I suppose in regular English it would be: “Have you read them? They were not page-turners.” So his question doesn’t imply he hasn’t read them, it’s more of a “Hey, nothing lost.”

Thank you for making me no longer hate that moment. Here I was thinking Luke was a lazy ass Jedi Master who didn’t bother to read the manuals.

I guess I’m just trying to find an edit that removes the over-the-top dumb moments and makes the film more tolerable than the official version.

Is there an edit that “saves” this film for fans of the original? Something that takes an over-the-top ridiculous dumb comedy movie into a serious movie with some comedy that doesn’t treat everything as a joke or every male character as an idiot? I would love to give this movie a try but I don’t think I can bring myself to watch the original.

Anything to help show a passage of time would be great. Having Rey and Ben on their own for longer helps the story.

Burbin said:

Also @DZ-330 Hal has removed Finn’s line “He wanted her alive” to simplify Palp’s scheme.

Oh yeah! That’s right. Long day today 😕

I think part of why a restructure may help is that it helps with the flow of time more. Either way works though 🤷‍♂️

Just made a quick mock-up. Here is my order:

• Poe, Finn and Chewie Receive the News
• Kylo Ren’s Redemption
• Poe Talks to Leia & Lando
• Finn Talks to D-O
• Reunite & Artoo Restores Threepio’s Memory (trim out R2 reporting a signal)
• Finn & Poe Talk About Occhi
• Palpatine Informs Pryde (with Star Destroyer establishing shot)
• Rey & Luke’s Scene
• Resistance Track Rey

Link: https://vimeo.com/583203979
PW: fanedit

JEDIT: I think learning from D-O that Palp’s plan is for Rey being alive, and then the NEXT scene he talks to Pryde about Rey coming to him plays out extremely well. Then we cut to Rey deciding to go followed by the Resistance tracking her ship and following. In my opinion, it flows so much better. Hopefully y’all agree…

Chase Adams said:

I like the way you think DZ-330! However personally, my only concern with that order would be you lose the transition from Chewie howling to Kylo standing alone on the Death Star, which I would be really sad to see go. I just think it works quite well and was pretty impactful the first time I saw it in cinemas.

How about this way? I may try mocking something up.

Focus on Leia:

• Poe, Finn and Chewie Receive the News
• Kylo Ren’s Redemption
• Poe Talks to Leia & Lando
• Palpatine Informs Pryde

Droids:

• Finn Talks to D-O
• Reunite & Artoo Restores Threepio’s Memory

Rey:

• Finn & Poe Talk About Occhi
• Rey & Luke’s Scene
• Resistance Track Rey

May I propose a different order that seems to be a little more focused and hopefully allows less jumping around to other planets and topics:

Focus on Leia:

• Poe, Finn and Chewie Receive the News
• Poe Talks to Leia & Lando
• Kylo Ren’s Redemption
• Palpatine Informs Pryde

Droids:

• Finn Talks to D-O
• Reunite & Artoo Restores Threepio’s Memory

Rey:

• Finn & Poe Talk About Occhi
• Rey & Luke’s Scene
• Resistance Track Rey

oojason said:

Hopefully the posts, thoughts, and suggestions by members on here who took the time out to engage and illustrate that to you will also sink in.

I owe you a coffee my friend. Thank you for ending the nightmare 😂

TestingOutTheTest said:

Also

There is a way to provide meaningful criticism and debate an issue without doing it in a rude way.

Could you give me an example of how to do that when it comes to fan edits and how I respond to specific changes?

Instead of just complaining how it ruins the original film and how it is “wrong” to do, try explaining your points in a more logical way. Make your case without being rude to other people’s ideas. Change A could actually hurt the message of the original film for Reason A, Reason B and Reason C.

Part of fanediting is about changing the message of the film itself. Some changes may not just be to change the effect of a shot but part of the story, and you need to get better at respecting that faneditors do not care about the original message, they are trying to make their own message with the given material.

When you are making comments explaining to someone what a plot hole is, that’s degrading. Anyone on this site knows what that is, and by doing so, it makes you look like a dick.

TestingOutTheTest said:

Think of how a parent calls out their child for doing something wrong, or something similar with authorities and people who’re unintentionally breaking laws. I’m sure you guys have good intentions, but I’m just trying to let you see the bigger picture here.

This explains enough about your issue.

TestingOutTheTest said:

Again, so you guys’ll listen.

You need to understand that not everyone will agree with your criticisms and being rude won’t help your case at all.

@TestingOutTheTest

There is a way to provide meaningful criticism and debate an issue without doing it in a rude way.

You act like your ideas are better than anyone else’s and then turn into a defensive ass when anyone calls you out on how you are rudely criticizing something.

You are the definition of an internet troll and it amazes me that the moderators of this site have let you go on for so long.

TestingOutTheTest said:

a plot hole (you’re probably already aware of what it is, but when two plot points directly contradict each other).

Are the mods ever gonna do anything about this condescending prick? It’s really getting old seeing posts like this every time I try to enjoy this site.

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“Leia told me that she had sensed… PAUSE… she had sensed the end of her Jedi path”

Kinda makes Luke seem a little upset she didn’t finish her training. Whatever works!

sherlockpotter said:

Hal 9000 said:

Sentence mixing it in my head, it doesn’t seem like it’d sound natural. There ought to be emphasis somewhere in the sentence, like “Leia told me she sensed the end of her Jedi path.”

This was my go at it:

sherlockpotter said:

https://streamable.com/ehphfh

Sounds fine to me!