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#1482141
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
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NeverarGreat said:

I do! It’s a good reminder not to lose sight of the basics like the First Order’s villainy. Though I wonder if there could be a way to work in their menace without having them outright attack the Republic, as well as offering this peace. In the film Poe looks astonished at the hangar which could mean that they are so reclusive that almost nobody in the Republic knows about them.

I will think on this further.

How about this?

Episode VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

Luke Skywalker has vanished!
In his absence, the peaceful
New Republic is afraid,
countless threats have been
made by a mysterious
Imperial remnant known as
the FIRST ORDER.

In a surprising move, these
sinister agents have promised
to end the conflict on
the condition that the
Jedi Order is finally
declared extinct.

General Leia Organa, skeptical
of this offering, has secretly
organized a RESISTANCE to
investigate this threat, and
to find her brother amidst
the darking stars…

Post
#1482132
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

That’s an interesting take! Because I’m obsessed with crawl-writing, I took a stab at your new idea, although somewhat different. I think it is good to establish the First Order as a threat off the bat, especially given the Jakku village scene that kicks off the film.

Hopefully you like it 🤷‍♂️

Episode VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

Luke Skywalker has vanished!
In his absence, the peaceful
New Republic is in chaos,
countless attacks have been
made by an Imperial remnant
known as the FIRST ORDER.

In a surprising move, these
sinister agents have promised
to end the fighting on the
condition that the Jedi
are finally declared extinct.

General Leia Organa, skeptical
of this offering, has secretly
organized a RESISTANCE to
investigate this threat, and
to find her brother amidst
the darking stars…

Post
#1482072
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

How about this one?

79 words:

It is a time of despair.
Luke Skywalker, striving
to restore the legendary
Jedi Knights, has vanished.

In his absence, warriors, raised
under the cruelty of exiled
Imperial remnants, have emerged from
their fearsome hidden fortress as
the sinister FIRST ORDER, terrorizing
star systems throughout the galaxy.

With the New Republic falling into
endless chaos and division, a
few brave senators have secretly
organized a daring RESISTANCE to
find the last Jedi, and restore peace
to the darkening stars…

Post
#1481892
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

If you can’t tell, I love writing Star Wars crawls. I made a few adjustments to yours:

It is a time of despair.
Luke Skywalker, striving
to restore the legendary
Jedi Knights, has vanished.

In his absence, malevolent forces,
raised on a hidden Imperial fortress,
have established the sinister
FIRST ORDER, terrorizing star systems
throughout the peaceful New Republic.

With the New Republic falling into
endless chaos and division, a
few brave senators have secretly
called upon a daring RESISTANCE to
find the last Jedi, and restore peace
to the darkening stars…

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#1479376
Topic
STAR WARS: EP VI -RETURN OF THE JEDI &quot;REVISITED EDITION&quot;<strong>ADYWAN</strong> - ** PRODUCTION HAS NOW RESTARTED **
Time

adywan said:

The Skywalker saga is 9 films, like it or not. I like the sequel trilogy so if i want to connect anything to that, then i will.

Just a few suggestions if you are open to them:

  • Boba Fett, depending on how it goes, potentially use Hal9000’s alternate jetpack scream and “death” audio with Temuera Morrison. It sounds a lot less cartoony than the original '83 version.
  • Add the Ghost from Rebels to the space battle
  • Edit in the door for Palpatine’s vault in the throne room, the one Rey goes in to get the Wayfinder in Episode IX
  • Remove the shockwave from Death Star II (not sure if already planned) and alter the explosion so it appears that Death Star II is intact enough to be what is in Episode IX
  • Smooth the original jump cut for where the celebration scenes were inserted in '97
Post
#1473771
Topic
The Force Awakens: Starlight (V1.1 Released!)
Time

Building on that, here’s my take…

Luke Skywalker has vanished.
In his absence, a new sinister
power has risen to threaten the
galaxy. Descending into endless
divide, the New Republic has failed
to address this growing threat.

In the wake of this failure,
Leia Organa has organized a
daring RESISTANCE to find the lost
Jedi, and restore a light of hope
to the waning stars.

The evil FIRST ORDER, emerging
from a hidden fortress of the
fallen Empire, hastens toward
the haggard wastelands of Jakku,
where a clue to Luke’s whereabouts
has been discovered…

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#1471683
Topic
The Last Jedi: Legendary (Released)
Time

Here is a take on CaptainFaraday’s using some of the other ideas posted, and just removing Snoke entirely (like TLJ does):

Chaos reigns! The New Republic
has been decimated. In the wake of
this terrible disaster, the treacherous
FIRST ORDER races to seize control
of the galaxy’s central star systems.

General Leia Organa’s RESISTANCE is
desperate for the return of Jedi Master
Luke Skywalker, certain that he can quell
the rising threat and restore a spark of
hope to their fight.

But the Resistance has been exposed.
As the First Order speeds toward
the rebel base, the brave heroes
mount a desperate escape…

Post
#1471627
Topic
The Last Jedi: Legendary (Released)
Time

Made a quick edit of Hal’s:

Having decimated the New Republic capital, Supreme Leader Snoke presses his advantage to seize military control of the galaxy’s central star systems.

Failing to prevent the devastating Starkiller atrocity, General Leia Organa’s RESISTANCE fears that only the return of Jedi Master Luke Skywalker can restore a spark of hope to the fight.

But the Resistance has been exposed. As the First Order speeds toward the rebel base, the brave heroes mount a desperate escape…

Post
#1471581
Topic
The Last Jedi: Legendary (Released)
Time

Maybe something more like this for the crawl:

The galaxy is in chaos. With the Republic decimated, Supreme Leader Snoke deploys his remaining troopers to seize military control of the galaxy.

Struggling for help in this void, General Leia Organa has sent Rey to find Jedi Master Luke Skywalker, certain that he will return and restore a spark of hope to the fight.

As the FIRST ORDER speeds toward the rebel base, the brave heroes mount a desperate escape, determined to restore order to the galaxy…