Finishing a watch of movie 3 (Narkina 5 prison), I’ve had a couple of ideas I could do with an opinion on.
Obviously the main mission statement of this edit is that I don’t want to remove a thing. I’m sticking to that. And I want to adhere as closely as possible to the original intent, which so far has also meant I haven’t reordered scenes which are part of individual plotlines.
However, there might be a value add in doing a little story reordering- if you guys don’t think it’s sacrilegious.
I have three examples: First,there’s a thread about the Public Order Resentencing Directive which I feel could be focused on to add just a little more value. If we were to see the Empire announce it, then Mon debate it in the sebate, then people discuss it at Mon’s party, then the prisoners suffer under it, that could be a little more powerful.
Secondly, Mon’s senate debate leads into Vel’s arrival, and the discussions with Vel’s darker activities could lead nicely into Mon suspecting Luthen, and both together could lead well into Mon telling Tay Kolma how deep she’s going.
(As an aside, front loading the Mon content that way would mean I’d need to shift Syril’s content to the later half, which might help imply more time in prison for Cassian, plus draw out parallels about their imprisonment nicely.)
Thirdly, having Cassian try to recruit Kino to escape a little earlier might help sell his desperation when he’s scratching away at the pipe alone, and give us a bit more value when Kino finally commits.
As before, no plans to cut anything, but I’ll try these if you guys don’t think them too radical.