DuTwan

INT. SUB COCKPIT - UNDERWATER

JAR JAR in the co-pilots seat, QUI GON guides the craft.

JAR JAR : This is useless.

OBI-WAN : Master, why do you keep dragging these pathetic life forms along
with us?

JAR JAR : Hey? Which was you getting there?

QUI-GON : You're the navigator.

JAR JAR : Not a very good one.

QUI-GON : Just relax, the Force will
guide us...

JAR JAR : Ooooh, I've heard of "The Force"...Nothing can be grander than the Elders.

OBI-WAN : Why were you banished, Jar Jar?

JAR JAR : It's a long story but to shorten it down it was because I fell onto Boss Nass' wife .

OBI-WAN : They banished you because you're clumsy?

As the little sub glides into the planet core, a large dark shape begins to
follow.

JAR JAR :Also I caused maybe one or two extra little accidents...used to be his chauffeur, until I crash the Bosses Bongo...then banished.

Suddenly there is a loud CRASH, and the little craft lurches to one side.
QUI-GON looks around and sees a huge, lumimnous OPEE SEA KILLER has hooked
them with its long gooey tongue.

QUI-GON : Full speed ahead.

JAR JAR: Oh no!

As the sub zooms away they see a larger set of jaws, munching on the hapless
KILLER. The jaws belong to the incredible SANDO AQUA MONSTER. The lights on
the tiny sub begin to flicker as they cruise deeper into the gloom.

QUI-GON : There's always a bigger fish.

*

Thats all for now guys. dont wanna fill the board with pages of script lmao

Alrite guys just gonna rewrite all of Jar Jar's lines in key scenes he is in. Second lot of rewriting i will do is when Jar Jar meets Qui Gon and Obi Wan for the first time.

Sorry its so damn long!

EXT. NABOO SWAMP - TWILIGHT

QUI-GON runs through the strange landscape, glancing back to see the
monstrous troop transports, emerging from the mist. Animals begin to run
past him in a panic.
An odd, frog-like Gungan, JAR JAR INKS, squats holding a clam he has
retrieved from the murky swamp. The shell pops open. JAR JAR's greta tongue
snaps out and grabs the clam, swallowing it in one gulp.
JAR JAR looks up and sees QUI-GON and the other creatures running like the
wind toward him. One of the huge MTT's bears down on the JEDI like a
charging locomotive. JAR JAR stands transfixed, still holding the clam shell
in one hand.

JAR JAR : What the...!
JAR JAR drops the shell and grabs onto QUI-GON as he passes. The JEDI is
caught by surprise.

JAR JAR : (Cont'd) Hey, help me! Help me!!
QUI-GON : Let go!

The machine is about tp crush them as QUI-GON drags JAR JAR behind him. Just
as the transport is about to hit them, QUI-GON drops, and JAR JAR goes splat
into the mud with him. The transport races overhead.
QUI-GON and JAR JAR pull themselves out of the mud. They stand watching the
war machine dissapear into the mist.

JAR JAR : I'm alive, what...was...that!

QUI-GON : Are you brainless? You almost got us killed!

JAR JAR : I can speak!

QUI-GON : The ability to speak does not make you intelligent. Now get outta
here!

QUI-GON starts to move off, and JAR JAR follows.

JAR JAR : No...no! I will stay. I'm your humble servant.

QUI-GON : That wont be necessary.

JAR JAR : Oh but it is! It was decided by the Gods. A live debt, it is. I am Jar Jar Binks.

In the distance, two STAPS burst out of the mist at high speed, chasing
OBI-WAN.

QUI-GON : We have no time for this now...

JAR JAR : Say what?

The two STAPS barrell down on OBI-WAN.

JAR JAR : (cont'd) Oh, nooooo! More of them.....
QUI-GON throws JAR JAR into the mud.

QUI-GON : Stay down!

His head pops up.

JAR JAR : ...argh!

The two troops fire laser bolts at OBI-WAN. QUI-GON deflects the bolts back,
and the STAPS blow up. One-two. OBI-WAN is exhausted and tries to catch his
breath.

JAR JAR pulls himself out of the mud.

JAR JAR : You saved me again

OBI-WAN : What's this?

QUI-GON : A local. Let's go, before more of those droids show up.

JAR JAR : More? More did you say?

OBI-WAN and QUI-GON start to run. JAR JAR tries to keep up.

JAR JAR : (cont'd) ermm excuse me, but the most safe place would be
Otoh Gunga. It's where I grew up...it is hidden city.

They all stop.

QUI-GON : A city! (JAR JAR nods his head) Can you take us there?

JAR JAR : Ahhh, me take you? Not really no.

QUI-GON : No??!

JAR JAR : Its embarrissing, but... I'm afraid I was banished. I
forgot Boss Nass would do terrible things to me. Terrible things if I go
back there.

A PULSATING SOUND is heard in the distance.

QUI-GON : You hear that?

JAR JAR: Yes....
QUI-GON : (cont'd) That's the sound of a thousand terrible things heading
this way...
OBI-WAN : When they find us, they will crush us, grind us into little
pieces, then blast us into oblivion!
JAR JAR : Oh! Thousand? This way! Hurry!

JAR JAR turns and runs into the swamp.

EXT. NABOO SWAMP LAKE - TWILIGHT

QUI-GON, OBI-WAN and JAR JAR run into a murky lake and stop as JAR JAR tries
to catch his breath. The TRANSPORTS ARE HEARD in the distance.

QUI-GON : Much farther?
JAR JAR : The city is underwater, okay?

QUI-GON and OBI-WAN pull out small capsule from their utility belts that
turn into breathing masks.

JAR JAR : (cont'd) I'm warning you. Gungans hate outlaunders. Don't
expect a warm welcome.

OBI-WAN : Don't worry, this has not been our day for warm welcomes.

JAR JAR jumps, does a double somersault with a twist, and dives into the
water.
Breath masks on, QUI-GON and OBI-WAN wade in after him.

As i think Darth venal said about the hut scene. How would Luke of hidden his lightsaber within r2? I do like the idea of the hut scene, i would still rather see Luke appear at Jabba's palace first. Just makes his entrance epic, then he catches the lightsaber and then its like hell yea!

Well from what ive been readin of the elders they were apparently a lizard type of race, this could be tweaked to make them neimodians. Just workin on the script of the underwater city.

INT. OTOH GUNGA - HIGH TOWER BOARD ROOM

The Bosses' Board Room has bubble walls, with small lighted fish swimming
around outside like moving stars. A long circular judge's bench filled with
GUNGAN OFFICIALS dominates the room. OBI-WAN and QUI-GON stand facing BOSS
NASS, who sits on a bench higher than the others.

BOSS NASS : What do you want outlanders! Why are you human bothering us! Our gods have returned to us and now you arrive.

QUI-GON : That droid army is about to attack the Naboo. We must warn them.

BOSS NASS : We hate the Naboo, they stole everything from us, they took our land and treasures, we owe them nothing but destruction.

OBI-WAN : After those droids take control of the surface, they will come
here and take control of you.

BOSS NASS : We are safe from the shiny creatures down here, they have come for the human not us Gungans.                                                                                                                                                        

OBI-WAN : You and the Naboo form a symbiont circle. What happens to one of
you will affect the other. You must understand this.

BOSS NASS : The Gods have sent these shiny creatures to destroy the Naboo, not us and to help us restore our lost land.

QUI-GON : (waves his hand) Then speed us on our way.

BOSS NASS : You are free to leave and don't return.                                                                                  

QUI-GON : We need a transport.

BOSS NASS : You may take the Bongo!

QUI-GON : Thank you for your help. We go in peace.

QUI-GON and OBI-WAN turn to leave.

OBI-WAN : Master, whats a bongo?

QUI-GON : A transport, I hope.

The JEDI notice JAR JAR in chains to one side, waiting to hear his verdict.
QUI-GON stops. JAR JAR gives him a forlorn look.

JAR JAR : I hope you suceed in your task. 

QUI-GON : Thank you, my friend.

JAR JAR : Ahhh...any help here would be hot.

JAR JAR's soulful look is counterpointed by a sheepish grin.

OBI-WAN : We are short of time, Master.

QUI-GON : We'll need a navigator to get us through the planet's core. This
Gungan my be of help.

QUI-GON walks bact to BOSS NASS.

QUI-GON : (cont'd) What is to become of Jar Jar Binks here?

BOSS NASS : He was banished, but he returned and now he will be punished.

QUI-GON : He has been a great help to us. I hope the punishment will not be
too severe.

BOSS NASS : He will be judged and the Gods will decide.

JAR JAR : (grimacing) Oooooh...

OBI-WAN looks concerned. QUI-GON is thinking.

QUI-GON : I have saved Jar Jar Binks' life. He owes me what you call a "life debt."

BOSS NASS : This human 'saved' you?!

JAR JAR nods and joins the JEDI. QUI-GON waves his hand.

QUI-GON : Your gods demand that his life belongs to me now.

BOSS NASS : Then take him, I never want to see his face agen!

JAR JAR : Thank god im out of here, what am i saying, I'm headed through the planet core!

Bingowings said:

To be honest I think adding pattening to Jar-Jar is so complicated you might as well start from scratch.

Recolouring him is time consuming but possible if someone has the time and patience to do it but to add more pattern in a convincing way would require having the code for the actual digital model and altering it (unless he is chameleon like and the patterns would move across the surface of his body but even then it's a massive animating task).

Removing or altering his teeth is also time consuming but doable because he only opens his stupid mouth wide enough to see them in key scenes so going in and pulling them or the tongue may be achievable.

As for the mockups themselves, they don't seem to show what you say you are trying to do, they look like he has been hit by a bag of soot or has been singed in a fire. Keep experimenting and you may find something that takes you breath away and will wow us all in a similar fashion (try to take notes on what you do while you have fun playing around so you can replicate the process, you may accidentally create the most amazing transformation only to find you can't do it again, which would be a real pain) Tarpals comes off the best because you have applied the effect to a clearly defined area but perfoming this in motion would be almost impossible (but not entirely).

To alter skin patterns the few one step processes you can use are selectively adjusting sharpness or replacing or adjusting key colours once again this is time consuming (you can't do it as a batch process you'd have to apply it to every shot he is in and replace the original with your altered guy) but it could be done if you had the time and patience.

 Thanx for the advice Bingowings, replacing the whole skin patterns would be extremely time consuming lol. If i had like 5 seconds of Jar Jar i mite try it but im totally a nood when it comes to convertin data too video files.

by the ways guy!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FyBlOe2cT1Y

Hey guys, i cant remember if the whole Naboo crystal thing had been mentioned earlier, someone was sayin what about the crystal that was given to Bass Nass at the end of TPM. Well i was just reading up on the Gungans and found out that the statues around the ruins and fields on Naboo are remains of an ancient civilisation called the Elders, they later became gods in Gungans eyes. Now I would love the idea that maybe the Neimodians could have been the elders here to reclaim the crystal/planet and the humans refuse but the Gungans see this as a miracle or somekind of religious thing until they are drove from there homes themselves. Just an idea really lol.

Darth Solo said:

Sorry DuTwan, it wasnt directed at you, more so the pattern of the way of thinking this thread is taking, if you get my meaning. The word troll has stuck in my mind recently. That was an over-reacted term i used there. Appologies my friend.

I dont ever mean to knock any constructive efforts here at all, like EVER.

Really got to re-install CS3 urgently though!

 You better watch yourself, I have the death sentence of 12 systems!

But on a serious note not worries my friend, so what does everyone think of the new green and patterned jar jar?

Im not a troll, i was redesignin the over look for Gungans, trying to make them look more fish/amphibian like. Im not just darkening PT images, im trying to give some PT creatures more of an interesting look. A troll indeed! pft! Ive been on this thread many many months and this is the first time ever ive been called a troll.

haha so true. will try

vaderios said:

Burn Burn Burn baby! I mean Burn tool

 

I stay to overal color variations. it will be hell to animate all the face tattoos in motion

-Angel

Burn tool is correct my friend, just love that little tool.

Darth Solo said:

Okay im convinced now. Ganamaes post in the empire has broken that thread on IE7. Looks like the old bug strikes back.

Anyone getting the same problem with later post counts there?

 Unfortunately yes im having the same problem, it always drives me up the wall! lol.

here ya go bingowings, hope ya like :)

Will be havin a go at that picture Bingowings, at the moment im going Gungan crazy lmao. I really love the new Tarpals, looks so much more scary with the croc eyes.

Gave boss nass the same Jar Jar treatment.

Think i mite have made him too dark oops lol

This is my attempt, startin with your Bingowings, just added onto yours really lol. Added croc eyes and created a more fish like pattern to jar jar's skin.

Bingowings said:

To get the ball rolling how about a more toady/fishy Jar-Jar?

 I think that Jar Jar should have more croc eyes, of horizontal blinking. As a reptilian like creature whos home world is underwater and he swims there then maybe he has more fish eyes. I prefer croc eyes.

hey guys, just wondering if anyone has taken a look at this site, it has people submitting the ROTJ movie mistakes. Maybe we could have a look at all these all see whats true wots false and see what we can do, maybe 005 u could add these to the list too.

http://www.moviemistakes.com/film1067

Ganamae said:

Would it be cool if the "neck" of the antenna broke under the explosion and the "head" or the dish would break off and fall to the ground?

 

 

 I was thinkin about something like that to be honest, always liked the idea of the shield generator being deactivated, not blown up! Even a small explosion would be gd, maybe the dish could have lights that switch off or a faint laser that represents the shield shuttin down or something along those lines.

hey sorry guys, would of had pic smaller but started editing and cudnt shrink it afterwards with all the layers etc.

Here we go 005 another for the list

Reducing the size of the explosion of the shield generator explosion

SilverKey said:

- Cut as much of the fireplace scene as possible. There is a bit when Anakin is moving forward and Padme backs away. I was thinking that we add some whispered "Padme" to that shot, we could use that as Anakin thinking he can kiss Padme now, which would be kind of logical, since we built up their relationship a little better now.
Their first kiss should be in the arena, it's the right place for Padme to finally admit she has feelings for him.

 I hate the Arena kiss. I thought it was the most cheesiest line of the entire bloody saga. I, truly, deeply think so.

Bingowings said:

Tims Stuff did a great job on Jar-Jar recently.

 Was that the video of Jar Jar with more serious voice? if so i thought that was some great stuff

Bingowings said:

It takes a special talent to deliver some of the dialogue that Lucas comes up with in an engaging and believable fashion.

At no point do I stop believing in the characters in ANH and ESB and a lot of that came from very good casting (Lucas himself has admitted to not really being an actors director).

Even in ROTJ most of the time the original cast and Ian McDiarmid manage to pull it off even without help from the directors (Marquand and Lucas by most accounts).

By the PT even the most talented actors (besides Ian who only drops the ball when the Halloween mask is put on) seem a bit lost and Hayden and Jake (playing the most important character in the PT) don't seem to have a clue what they are doing.

Redubs could help as so much is conveyed with the voice.

 

 This is why i created a voice actors topic for these kind of situations but that kinda died few weeks ago. Shame really.

watchin ROTJ atm. you know when luke enters as the gamorrian pigs raise up there staffs in front of luke, i think it would be really cool if Ady cut the force choked guards completely and cut straight to luke walking down the steps, would make him seem more strong, we dont know what happened to the pigs. dunno just seems to make the scene better.

hey guys just fixed the image of luke in ROTJ, in the original the rail splits up the lightsaber blade so there are two sections which from the angle we are lookin at it doesnt look right.