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Not sure how old you are but college worked best for me. Kinda hard given the world today though.

What if she just responded to “I AM ALL THE SITH!” with “I am a Jedi.” She’s finally accepting her role and place in the story, and it’s a nice callback to the “I am a Jedi, like my father…” from ROTJ

Or add Rose somewhere? Any way to tie this trilogy more together is a win.

Would it be possible to maybe add Holdo to the briefing on D’Qar?

StarkillerAG said:
Yes, that’s a great idea! Not only did that line make Luke look like a hypocrite for not even reading his most sacred texts, but it blatantly contradicts the next movie. It needs to go.

That always bothered me ever since I saw the film. If Luke cares so much about the texts and Jedi and even tries to run into a burning tree to save them. Why would he not have read them?! It just makes Luke seem childish and foolish for the sake of making a joke work. Now if the joke were between Luke and Rey or even Rey and Yoda it would work. Overconfident new Jedi Rey defending texts she’s never read vs. Jedi Master Luke not even bothering to read texts he spent 30 years tracking down. It NEEDS to go.

One thing that has ALWAYS bugged me about TLJ was Poe not knowing who Holdo is. We all know she should have been in TFA, but it’s like a solider not knowing who the Vice President is. Cut Poe not knowing who she is.

I second the “time remaining” removal.

Would it be possible to have Luke not ignite his green lightsaber on Kylo? I have seen some impressive edits of this on YouTube where the green glow is removed from Kylo and his eyes. Kylo wakes up, sees Luke hovering with his lightsaber out and looking distraught, and then Ben “turns on him” and Luke defends. I think this will help greatly to “re-characterize” Luke in the film and make Ben’s decision more his own. The whole “pulling a weapon on my unarmed nephew” is still something a lot of fans struggle with.

Since Snoke=Palpatine, is it possible to remove his mention of bridging their minds? If Palpatine was controlling Snoke then why would their connection be a surprise?! Removing Snoke inconsistences is key to making a more cohesive trilogy

I would still love to see the “slow-mo” shots removed from Kylo vs Luke like in Hal’s most recent TLJ update.

Maybe more could be added to Palpatine’s radio contact so it is a little clearer what is happening. I watched the most recent version with a TLJ first timer and they were confused. “My boy, Snoke was just the beginning, find me.”

JEDIT:
THE SACRED JEDI TEXTS!!! I think the lines between Yoda/Luke, “ahh, read them have you? Page turners they were not!” Needs to go. It makes Luke seem like he didn’t even read/study the books, but then in TROS we find out Luke did study them and annotated them. I suggest, “Luke: The Sacred Jedi Texts! Yoda: Yes, yes. Wisdom they held…”

Somehow… Jonh returned. Get them hair clippers out hahah

I believe Jonh said he will be out for a few. Poppa, please be our savior and work your magic.

Take 2! 😃

War is beginning to spread across the galaxy.

New battlefields are rapidly emerging as the armies of the Republic and Separatists fight for control.

Taking a direct role in this conflict, Senator BAIL ORGANA has began providing relief and supplies to numerous clone squadrons on the front lines.

Anakin Skywalker has achieved the rank of JEDI KNIGHT. In honor of this achievement, Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi has put in a request to teach his skills to a new padawan learner.

Meanwhile, the pair have tracked Count Dooku’s vicious assassin, ASAJJ VENTRESS, to the planet of Christophsis.

But Ventress is far more cunning than she appears…

Can I suggest some alternate text for the beginning? Writing alternate crawls is an odd Star Wars hobby of mine!

NEW OPENING CRAWL:

War is spreading across the galaxy.

New battlefields are rapidly emerging as the armies of the Republic and Separatists fight for control.

Taking a direct role in this conflict, Senator BAIL ORGANA has began providing relief and supplies to numerous clone squadrons on the front lines.

Anakin Skywalker has achieved the rank of JEDI KNIGHT. In honor of this achievement, his master Obi-Wan Kenobi has put in a request for Anakin to teach his skills to a new padawan.

Meanwhile, the pair have tracked Count Dooku’s vicious Sith assassin, ASAJJ VENTRESS, to the planet of Christophsis.
But Ventress is far more cunning than she appears…

And here I am trolling back with Sheev quotes lol

The makeup department is a pathway to many characters that some consider to look… unnatural.

That might be perfect when Rey is looking at the stars and we hear the voices. Luke is rallying the troops to fight Papa Palps.

I thought not. It’s not a story the filmmakers would tell you…

I think showing a shot of the place they are staying at sunset after the kiss to let the music fade and then do a wipe to Kamino.

I remember a report from earlier this year saying they were both attached to star in a show but it wasn’t confirmed. I’ll have to find it.

The Master returns. Amazing work poppa

I still have my electronic R2 toy from the Hut lol

Nevsrmind! Got them! Thanks again as always 😃

Any chance you can move the alternative versions into their own folders instead of just one? Drive is being a pain and the whole folder won’t zip.

Btw, Merry Christmas!

I don’t mind Burning Homestead. TROS:A now makes a musical callback to this moment. Rey accepts the lightsaber. Then in TROS the true purpose is revealed.

Jonh’s version is the best as is. We have Obi-Wan and Yoda from the OT, Anakin from the PT, and Luke from the ST. All characters important to LUKE, and to viewers of the OT. Adding any more would just feel like overkill and something we would see in a George Lucas special edition. The Phantom Four feels like something that would have originally been in the film.

What a mess. Hahahahaha. Jonh, you have nothing to be ashamed of yours is 10000 times better.

Let me rephrase better. Talk to them and assure them you are there, but make it clear they can’t rely on you for help and that you NEED to take steps to help yourself and reach out to a professional.

I’ve been in this situation on both sides. A mental health therapist told me, just don’t reply or lead them on. By actively engaging in the messaging, you are enabling them to continue going to you for support instead of them doing it themselves.