Personally, I like the kid’s movie feel, and it makes it a little easier to forgive shortcomings, but I get that that’s not what you’re going for.
The ships look fake. I think it’s because they don’t have any moving parts or particle trails. You’re getting there, though.
End with “Shut that door.” It’s Mark Hamill saying it after all. Of course, do that only after showing the infamous conclusion of that scene from TLJ.
While it is pretty abrupt, I wouldn’t remove the dialog.
I like it. I don’t know if you’re aware already, but you can still see the edge of the wall above Obi-Wan’s head when he’s talking to Anakin.
It fails as a prediction as well. Like I said, if Lucasfilm did want to kill Leia before IX, they would’ve done it in VIII. They could’ve easily had her not float back to the ship from the vaccum of space, and the plot wouldn’t suffer. All my other critisisms are also things I don’t think they’ll do.
You couldn’t do that without changing large amounts of the story. They would have to rethink it and reshoot most of the Raddus and Crait scenes and it would have pushed the movie back a year at least.
I think they could just recut the rest using shots where she wasn’t present, but I suppose that could maybe delay the movie another six months.
The difference is that there were no major changes beyond replacing CPY.
What is CPY?
It stands for Creepy Puppet Yoda.
The Last Jedi feels like it’s a delibirate “screw you” to The Force Awakens, in the way that it handles the big mysteries it set up, and the fact that it’s not even remotely derivative of TESB. I say go see it. It’s a very different experience.
To that I say screw them. We never got to see the original three reunite, after all.
The difference is that there were no major changes beyond replacing CPY.
Anyway, the ideas proposed in your crawl are just an utter mess.
How about you suggest some ideas and possibilities for his crawl instead of that?
We’re a community that helps each other with stuff like this - not rags on them.
It’s not like I’m explaining the problems with this crawl. Besides, if this is supposed to be a realistic prediction, I don’t think we have enough to go off of yet.
It fails as a prediction as well. Like I said, if Lucasfilm did want to kill Leia before IX, they would’ve done it in VIII. They could’ve easily had her not float back to the ship from the vaccum of space, and the plot wouldn’t suffer. All my other critisisms are also things I don’t think they’ll do.
The BIG twist was finding out she’s just some girl that came from no one noteworthy.
I saw that one coming. For me, the real twist was Snoke dying.
I interpretted it as the rebellion is reborn in spirit. It’s still technically the Resistance. It’s like how the track “The Starkiller” is a sort of play on words, since the base is called Starkiller Base, not the Starkiller.
You’re gonna need a source for that claim that Leia won’t be in Episode IX. AFAIK, all they said was that they wouldn’t reconstruct her with CGI. I’m expecting them to repurpose footage from Episode VIII. If they weren’t gonna feature her at all in the next one, they would’ve had her die in VIII.
Anyway, the ideas proposed in your crawl are just an utter mess.
- Move the throne room sequence to after The Resistance lands on Crait.
I think that’s a great idea, as that whole scene felt like the climax, even though the movie still had a half-hour left. That said, you’d have to move Holdo’s sacrifice, and come skip Phasma’s scenes entirely to allow Finn and Rose to escape before being caught, as they only survived due to Holdo’s sacrifice. This also would result in cutting out DJ’s betrayal, but if you cut out Canto Blight, you could out his character entirely.
But didn’t Holdo’s sacrifice pretty much destroyed Snoke’s ship? So wouldn’t it be weird if the throne room scene occurred with half of the ship blown up and he’s just there doing nothing and so are Ren and Rey?
Did you even read my post? I said that moving the throne room scene would require moving Holdo’s sacrifice as well, so that half the ship isn’t blown up yet.
Ikr? I’m just undecided as to whether it would be redundant if he’s introduced in TPM.
- Move the throne room sequence to after The Resistance lands on Crait.
I think that’s a great idea, as that whole scene felt like the climax, even though the movie still had a half-hour left. That said, you’d have to move Holdo’s sacrifice, and come skip Phasma’s scenes entirely to allow Finn and Rose to escape before being caught, as they only survived due to Holdo’s sacrifice. This also would result in cutting out DJ’s betrayal, but if you cut out Canto Blight, you could out his character entirely.
Disney should really have their directors shoot two versions of these films: one for the kids and one for adults. That would fix a lot of the problems.
I think what you mean to say is they should make two cuts of the film. No need to shoot the whole thing twice.
You’re pretty talented and/or perseverent with VFX. Could you…uh…checks personal edit changelist…finish the background in the scene of Jocasta explaining who Dooku is? Or do I even that now that I’m putting him in TPM? Uh…could you add Mas Amedda and Sly Moore by the Emperor’s side in RotJ? Yeah, that’s a change undoutedly want. I gues that would require a whole other level of VFX skills, unless you can find shots from the PT to composite with. You’re not offering your skills for anyone else, anyway, are you?
Why would they rename the Resistance the Second Rebel Alliance? That’s pointless and confusing. As much as I would love to see a new generation of Jedi, Lucasfilm clearly doesn’t care for that. Why would Leia be killed offscreen?
I’d call it The Ridiculous Jedi, but I don’t really mind either way.
Insert one of Return of the King’s endings between The zoom out of the Resistance and the final scene with the broom boy (you know, because it felt like it was gonna end but didn’t).
I just ripped my Blu-Rays and put my MKVs in that order on my hard drive.
Yes, I own all 6 seasons of TCW and the movie on Blu-Ray. Sue me, I love 80% of the show. (Not the movie though, I’m just a completist. And someday plan to do a TCW series edit that will include footage from it.)
Well the movie was original four episodes. Someone on here has managed to separate into three, but given all the deleted scenes, surely it would be possible to make four. Anyway, while I doubt anyone would care much for Castle of Deception, Castle of Doom, or Castle of Salvation, I’m sure many of us would be happy to have The New Padawan isolated.
That’s possible. The “No, they won’t.” bit is the only one I remember.
I believe the quote is “Rpeublic credits will do fine.” “No, they won’t.”
Anyways, what particular changes are you talking about?
I am intrigued - many years of Prequel Fan Edits (some of them very well done) had left me jaded as to more - yet yours and Snooker’s coming Dawn Of War both have me looking forward to watching these.
Nice one, and good luck.
Those are the two I’m following as well. They’re quite promising.