vranir

smudger9 said:

vranir said:

While we’re on the topic, there any way that we can change Ashoka’s question to Elsbeth? She should know generally where Thrawn is, and Elsbeth doesn’t actually know anything more than she does about it. Instead, could we have an AI voice ask where the map/orb/it is? That (either chronologically or by inference if used as a flashback) is what leads Ahsoka to the ruin where she finds the artifact.

I don’t think the question needs to be changed does it? We don’t see the answer so it’s perfectly believable that Morgan would say that he’s in another galaxy and you need a map to locate it.

But why would she be asking Elsbeth and not someone easier to find who knows the same thing, like Hera or Sabine? It’s weird to go on a quest to hunt an enemy in order to ask a question that your friends already know the answer to.

Even slightly different wording would help: “Where was Thrawn taken?” This would imply that she knows more. “Where is Thrawn?” sounds like he’s hiding or coming, not trapped somewhere.

While we’re on the topic, there any way that we can change Ashoka’s question to Elsbeth? She should know generally where Thrawn is, and Elsbeth doesn’t actually know anything more than she does about it. Instead, could we have an AI voice ask where the map/orb/it is? That (either chronologically or by inference if used as a flashback) is what leads Ahsoka to the ruin where she finds the artifact.

Could “New Republic Starfleet” change to “New Republic Fleet” or “New Republic star fleet”?

The capitalized one-word Starfleet to me is too closely associated with Star Trek, and seeing it in the crawl seems off brand, technically correct as it may be.

Critique from episode 6. If Baylan has trained (maybe even raised Shin), why has he never told her his plans etc prior to this? Why is she asking him if he misses the temple and the Jedi; shouldn’t she know. It would have worked better for her to observe “You still miss the temple” instead of asking him.

Other than that, honestly I’m a fan of the creativity and direction here. I’d have liked a bit more legendary planet/origin and mysterious power talk in the early episodes to set all this up (maybe in place of just talking up the threat of Thrawn and his one potentially returning ISD).

If this really gets wrapped up in a movie, maybe we should be looking at a trilogy (two parts based on this series, followed by an edit of the eventual film).

I think someone in this thread (or in another) also proposed keeping the modern Boba Fett stuff intact but moving it to a spot in between the first and second halves of Mando s3. That also seems to have potential in my view. It would slow down the return to Mandalore and also involve contacting the various groups/types of Mandalorians to “unite the tribes.”

I’ve realized that the biggest issue I have with this show is the lack of reason to fear Thrawn. I know him from the books. Some fans know him a bit from Rebels. But in this show we have been given no information or evidence of his clout beyond his rank. Even from Rebels we know that he has with him one Imperial class Star Destroyer - what difference does that make? I’m sure there were plenty after Endor that had to be dealt with.

I’m loving the prospect of seeing a new region of space in Star Wars, and I want to see Thrawn in live action, but the threat just isn’t something I feel.

It might be even more involved than the Grogu erasure, but I’d love to see Boba Fett help in the retaking of Mandalore, even just from the air using Slave 1.

What you gain by putting Boba Fett in book 6 is that you draw out the whole thing about contacting and building alliances with other Mandalorians. In the vanilla version it’s far too quick and simple. While hanging out with Fett who doesn’t go to Mandalore isn’t actually accomplishing anything, it can give the illusion of connection to the main plot.

I very much like the book 6 outline.

My own goal is to eventually re-edit the show as a series (maybe six parts per season instead of eight) and use many of the cuts/restructured elements from this and other film edits to smooth and enhance the content.

The ideas you have here and their overall execution continue to be brilliant.

I skimmed through and really liked what you’ve done. Like the poster above, however, the pirates at Tatooine seemed off. Particularly how they were able to identify Mando in orbit of a different planet when he had just gotten a brand new off-record ship.

Random fan-edity idea: What if the attack on the Republic ship came after the map and Corellia stuff? Morgan Elsbeth isn’t actually involved in any of it very much, so breaking her out of jail could be reordered as a later step in their plot.

I think it’s kind of funny that this show is so women-centric by accident. Rebels had over 50% male characters (if you also count Chopper), but when the show closed, one was dead, one was lost, and the other would be pretty expensive/complicated in live action. Add in Ashoka herself to the survivors, and it just happens to be very female-heavy.

I’ve only watched clips from Rebels, but I have a general idea of the characters and plotlines.

For me, this show is slightly less fun than Mando s1 and s2 but a much better experience than Boba Fett or Mando s3. As far as I’m concerned, Andor is a whole different thing tonally and shouldn’t get compared.

I think Ahsoka will improve with editing, mainly to improve the pacing in places and make the rabbit-trails/roadblocks leas obnoxious and arbitrary. I’m thinking specifically of the amount of time devoted to the map puzzle and to “General” Hera trying to get people to do anything.

I’m enjoying the show but yes, I definitely think there can be a better/tighter version.

I would suggest “isolated” in place of “desolate.” It has accurate connotations both geographically and politically.

Yes. My Workprint can be available. It’s mostly just missing some VFX stuff I’m hoping to learn how to create and apply to enhance a few scenes and address some minor continuity/common sense issues.

The ending seems to be a universal struggle for this content. I “solved” it by cutting off the main story at the eruption, then letting the Stranger and Nori give a bit of a happier finale. I’m hoping that season 2 will provide some material to pad out the forging of the rings.

Any updates on the new version?

Any updates on this exciting project?

Good ideas. I still haven’t seen the official film though.

UPDATE TO INITIAL POST.

I’ve continued to work on my Trek projects behind the scenes, but I’ve also taken some time away from them to focus on other things like The Rings of Power.

Here is where my various edits currently stand:

DSC - I took a hiatus to focus on other projects and need to get back to this to finish Season 4. I have upgraded my footage and incorporated relevant deleted scenes into all of my edits.

PIC - I added another deleted scene to season 1 and polished the surrounding sequence. I also got most of the way through a v2.0 polish on season 2 when I realized that I ultimately want to swap the order of seasons 2 and 3. Because of this, I’m waiting on the season 3 BluRay to come out in September so that I can finish editing the entire series the way I want.

SNW - With season 2 now airing, I have a better handle on how I want season 1 to end. I’m hoping to get back on this project soon, but I am also aware that with so many plotlines going on this this show, I may be wise to see all of season 2 before getting into the weeds.

PRO - Just ahead of the sudden cancellation and removal of Prodigy, I managed to screen record all of season 1. I always wanted to edit this show to remove a little of the kid humor and on-the-nose dialogue. In solidarity with the fan attention this series is now getting, I may prioritize that effort. I’m not yet sure what format my version will take. I will probably aim for 9-episode “seasons” like my other efforts, but I’m not sure how many “seasons” I will make from this content or how long the episodes will be.

OTHER - I’ve had it in mind to revisit some of the 90s Trek series to give them a bit of a polish for pacing and tone. I’m also interested in adding some musical cues from some of the newer shows, in order to enhance overall cohesion (can you imagine some of the Dominion track from PIC season 3 getting heard at key points in DS9?). This effort is obviously on the back burner and will either require a lot of advanced remastering work on my part or the availability of remastered footage from another contributor. I currently have no plans to work on Lower Decks; while I have enjoyed that series, I don’t feel strongly enough about it to invest.

NOTE that all of my edits will eventually benefit from some more advanced VFX work, but I continue to budget for a more ideal computer and software that will be able to handle that. Specifically, I’m hoping to get a higher end screen and enough speed/RAM to work well with Topaz and the more advanced AI features of DaVinci Resolve.

And why did they recolor everything but not touch the very different face of Gollum in Fellowship?

As a fellow Picard editor, I’m interested in seeing your take.

My own eventual plans for season 3 are heading toward the ambitious idea trying to reverse its order with season 2, letting Jurati resurrect the Borg in a new form after their final defeat while Picard explores his childhood as part of adjusting to being a father.

I see that the file has been replaced but that the new one still has subtitles. Is it another final workprint?

Isn’t the term “superlaser” reserved for the planet-busting Death Star beam that you’re trying to distance this from?