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#1528954
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Mando EP3: A New Path (A Book of Boba Fett Edit) [RELEASED]
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JamalGS said:

Hi Smudger, I watched the trilogy this past week and it has been a blast. The amount of content of these TV series makes it hard to enjoy the whole story in a short time. Having the option now to “binge” in a matter of days instead of weeks really serves the audience who wants to revisit the overall story. Thank you for your contributions. You have done a masterful job, and I’m glad that you have fun doing this.

I have scanned over the original post and comments and didn’t see any mention of the “T” missing scene frames that occur often in Episode 3, so just wanted to mention just in case you somehow weren’t aware.

Thanks for the feedback. I hadn’t noticed the missed frames. Looks like I’ve accidentally deleted the letterbox effect file! 😬. I’ve replaced them and will re-render and upload it.

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#1528076
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Mando EP4: Return to Mandalore 4K [RELEASED]
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PsyGemini said:

Shouldn’t we have at least them at Nevarro talking about what happened to Cara? I feel like that’s kinda important after spending so much time with her on the first two seasons.

It’s a massive impact on the running time to include that whole sequence just to explain where a secondary character is. Plus if the sequence isn’t included it doesn’t need explaining.

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#1527998
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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honestabe said:

I almost forgot to leave a review of this.

While the other Andor edits vastly improve an already good show, I feel this one was as close to perfection as you can get.

The editor effectively and smoothly cut out everything I felt that really dragged the show down. More specifically, this comprised of cutting out nearly all the petty family squabbles. From the removal of Cyril’s mother, Senator Mothma’s bickering with her daughter and husband, and the removal of the [forgot name] imperial officer acting aggressively towards his son on Aldhani - these were all necessary to have the show move at a faster pace and also treat these characters with more respect. The family feuds diminished their characters and felt out of place for a Star Wars show as opposed to a soap opera.

My favorite part of this edit was the climactic ending. Closing with the meteor shower followed by the exhange between Lutyens and Mothma about whether he went too far was a really nice touch.

I am looking forward to episode 2 whenever it is released.

Thanks for the kind words. Episode 2 is nearing its second cut.

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#1527823
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Mando EP4: Return to Mandalore 4K [RELEASED]
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Warhorn said:

As always, I am speechless with your work and I love how you know how to see what is important in each episode to rescue the necessary information. That being said, I do agree with WitchDR that seeing Grogu and Din reunite for the first time with the purrgil scene doesn’t quite work for me either.

In that sense, I think that the way Grogu appears on the ship in the mandalorian’s ritual scene could work as a “revelation”, or you could still mix the purrgil scene with the final of TBOBF, which I think linked very well with Grogu’s decision in the third film. Maybe make some way that when the N1 goes into turbo mode at Grogu’s request it jumps into hyperspace and spins with the purrgil scene?

Otherwise I find it great! The first episode was almost a reminder of everything that came before with the strange addition of the IG-11 plot, it seems very appropriate to jump to the second almost directly.

Thanks for the feedback. I agree that the ritual scene makes for a better Grogu reveal, but ideally I’d like to cut the monster scene. Maybe a compromise would be a the reveal on Tatooine to Pelli. I’ll see how that works.

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#1527768
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Mando EP4: Return to Mandalore 4K [RELEASED]
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Here is my edit of the Mandalorian Season 3.
After much debating I decided to leave the Grogu/Luke scenes in Episode 3, so this edit contains just the Mandalorian Season 3 material.

My goals are:
To recreate the classical Star Wars movie experience.
Full continuity with my previous three movies - some changes will now be made to those edits to line everything up.
To focus on the Mandalore plot with Din being the lead character.
To remove the large amount of filler in this series.
Improve the pacing of the finale.
Provide an emotionally satisfying ending.

Headlines:
2h 46min runtime
Classical Opening Logos, Opening Crawl and Iris-out to End Credits.
Dr Pershing, Plazir-15 and Foundling Rescue plots have all been removed.
Removal of many of the creature attacks.
The 2-part finale has been heavily edited and restructured to improve pacing, including removal of R5.
All audio transitions have been carefully edited including re-scoring and audio rebuilding as needed.




Detailed Changes:

Chapter 17

Custom credits using Disney Era flashing characters over Fox Fanfare followed by ALTAIAGFFA
Custom Crawl and right screen pan to N1 exiting hyperspace
Opening scene is Mando travelling to Bo Katan’s Castle which establishes his motivations.
Edited to trim his long walk to and away from Bo’s throne.
Hard Cut to the armourer at the forge. Initiation ceremony takes place but the creature attack is removed. Scene ends with “this is the way” with a re-used shot of the armourer used as the exit shot.
Cut to Din arriving on Navarro.
Removed transition wipe as Mando enters the town.
Trimmed Mando and Grogu walking through the town.
Remove transition wipe to Grogu spinning in the chair.
Cut Garga’s lines about the belters and money to be made on Navarro.
Trimmed the encounter with the pirates. Cut Vane “that explains why she wouldn’t let me inside”. Cut references to the pirate king. Cut Vane “now bring me a drink”. Cut Vane “you hear that boys, his school” and “you paid us for murder and mayhem inside these doors”.
Trim the standoff between Karga and Vane.
Cut scene where Mando tries to rebuild IG-11, instead he takes him straight to the Anzellans. Remove transition wipe.
Cut Mando “this one is my friend”. Cut Anzellan “Not friend anymore”.
Cut Karga “he says you should get a new one”.
Remove Encounter with pirate ships.
Edit cuts from Mando leaving Nevarro to Teva discovering the wrecked Republic shuttle from chapter 21.
Cut Teva “I knew it, he never made it to trial”.
Cut to Mando travelling through hyperspace with Purgill.

Chapter 18

Cut to Pelli on Tatooine.
Cut the Jawa/Pelli parts scam scene.
Cut Pelli “you know how Mos Eisley gets during Boonta week”.
Cut Mando leaving Tatooine. End scene with Pelli Offering R5 to Mando. Reuse head shot of Mando to extend scene and line up scene transition with music.
Cut to Imperial Shadow Council Scene from Chapter 23.
Cut the multiple “yes” responses.
Cut mention of an assassination attempt.
Cut “Yes I see”.
Cut to Mando exiting hyperspace above Mandalore.
Cut Mando “from the surface we won’t be able to communicate with anyone, so we have to be careful”.
Cut R5 stopping and Mando telling him to stop being a baby.
Cut whole scene of R5 dissapearing and Mando heading into the cave to rescue him. The edit has R5 heading into the rocks and then transmitting information that the atmosphere is breathable. Then a wipe transition to Mando and Grogu walking towards the cave.
Shortened Mando and Grogu’s journey to the mines.
Cut creature attacking Grogu as he leaves the cave to fetch help.
Small edit to remove continuity error of Grogu jumping from his hoverchair and into the cockpit. R5 bleeps used to replace sounds.
Remove Transition wipe to Bo’s Castle scene
Remove Gauntlet taking off from Bo’s Castle, replaced by hard cut to captured Mando having his blood extracted.
Cut to Gauntlet arriving on Mandalore.
Trim Gauntlet travelling through atmosphere
Cut Bo “It didn’t always look like this.”
Cut Bo asking Grogu to guide her.
Massively Trim Bo’s journey to Din including removal of R5 scream and the creature attack.
Cut back to repeated shot of Mando losing his blood and then to Bo arriving to rescue him.
Cut Bo “Din I cant hear you, are you trying to say something”.
Cut Bo “he’s quite the navigator”.
Trim Bo talking to Din about her father.

Chapter 19 (intercut with scenes from Chapter 21)

Cut to Nevarro Pirate invasion scene from Chapter 21.
Cut to Din and Bo at the edge of the waters.
WIpe transition from Gauntlet taking off from Mandalore surface to external shot of Adelphi Base.
Alelphi base scene from Chapter 21.
Cut to shot of Gauntlet returning to Kalevala.
Cut R5’s screeching and Bo “Don’t worry I grew up flying these cliffs” and “of course its been a while”.
Cut Din and Bo talking about ship damage at the end of the initial dogfight.
Cut to Chapter 21 scene of Karga and the citizens at their makeshift camp. The scene starts with Karga looking at the town through binoculars - the “walking" is cut because it makes it obvious that there aren’t enough extras in the scene and the group also make a strange turn due to the limitations of the volume set.
Wipe transition to Teva exiting hyperspace above Coruscant from Chapter 21.
Wipe transition to Mando and Bo exiting hyperspace en route to Mando’s old covert.
Cut Din “its a secret location and you are my guest”
Trim posturing and walking as Bo and Din land and walk into the Clan’s cave.
After Armourer welcomes Bo to the Clan I added armourer dialogue from Chapter 1 to add “a pauldron would be in order”, “I shall craft it”.
The whole Coruscant plot line has been removed.

Chapter 20

Wipe transition to wide shot of the Covert Planet
Cut to Armourer making Bo a new Pauldron.
Everything else form this Chapter has been cut - the training sequence, the creature stealing the foundling and the Grogu-Armourer scene including Grogu’s flashback. These scenes have no relevance to the main plot of the season and provide no payoff at the end. The only continuity issue was Bo losing her Pauldron in the rescue, but this has been explained by the Armourer offering her a new pauldron after welcoming her to the clan.

Chapter 21

The first half of this episode has been used to intercut with Chapter 19 scenes.
Cut to Teva arriving at the Clan’s location.
Cut Din “this man cut me a break once and now I’m returning the favour” - at the moment this line doesn’t fit with my preceding edits…. This may well change when I got back to episodes 2 and 3.
Cut Lines from Paz about Din saving his son (this has been cut).
Cut the entire pointer sequence where Bo explains (in length!) the plan to defeat the pirates.
Cut to the Pirates on Nevarro and the battle then play out.
Cut Pirate king “Its the Mandalorian” - he would not know because their earlier encounter has been cut.
Battle scene trimmed and unnecessary “Marvel” dialogue has been removed.
Cut droid correcting Karga about his title.
Trim Bo and Armourer talking about the forge.

Chapter 22

The Gideon/Kane scene from Chapter 21 has been placed here to provide a spacer scene. I have cut Gideon “and make it quick because I’m short on time”. The scene ends as he walks past the clones because the shadow council scene has been moved to the start of the movie.
Opening scene of Axe’s Mandalorians and the Quarren as been cut.
We cut to Din and Bo arriving on Plazir-15. Losing control of the ship has been cut, so they now land on the planet of their own free will.
Cut Din “I knew they looked familiar"
Wipe transition from the Gauntlet landing to Bo and Din walking to the Mandalorian camp.
Trimmed some of the standing and staring.
Cut Bo “certainly as much as any of us”.
Cut Bo “no matter how well intended”.
Cut Din repeating “would it not belong to her”.
All other scenes have been cut including the entirety of the Droid plt.

Chapter 23

Cut Karga explaining to his droid about the cruiser being Mandalorian.
Cut Karga calling the droid IG-12.
Cut Karga asking Mando if he likes the droid.
Cut discussion about whether the droid is safe - the scene this references has been cut.
Cut Karga “I think he’s saying he’s old enough to operate it”.
Cut IG/Grogu messing around at the food stall.
Cut Bo talking about the poisoned surface of Mandalore and dormant creatures - most of these encounters have been cut.
Cut Din “Grogu as well”.
Cut 3 “I will go”.
Cut Bo “We will lose Comms shortly”.
Trim walking across Mandalore sequence.
Cut Bo “you were right, I was selfish and this is what it brought”.
Cut board game sequence.
Cut giant creature attacking the land ship. We cut from the Gauntlet returning to the cruiser to the Mandalorians entering the caves to the forge.
Cut Bo “no its too far”.
Cut Axe “I can make it, its our only chance of taking the planet back”. Now Axe’s move is more decisive.
Trim down battle sequence.
Cut Din telling Grogu to keep up.
Cut Bo “I’ll make sure of it”.
Cut Gideon “now surrender the darksaber and tell these people this planet is mine”.
Trim Paz v Mando Trooper fight to make the troopers look less like battle droids!

Chapter 24

Move the TIE squadron leaving the base to the opening scene so that it immediately precedes Bo telling Axe about the TIEs. This creates more tension a jeopardy for Axe’s subplot.
Cut Axe “I’m entering the upper atmosphere but I have my orders.
Remove wipe transition between Bo’s forces and Din.
Edit Din’s escape so that the Mando trooper no longer blasts him twice (Din gets hit by balsters far too many times over the seasons!)
Cut Din “thankyou for your help”
Cut scene of Gideon tracking Mando - it makes no sense.
Cut R5 completely - his presence really slows the pacing - this involved cropping scenes, cutting scenes, re-scoring and audio editing.
Move Axe arriving at the cruiser forward. Cut Axe “Bo Katan needs our help”
Move Bo Katan and her group arriving at the cave escape point backwards slightly. I’ve made a significant change at this point. As she tells Din that she’s under attack and getting the troops to safety the Armourer contacts her to tell her that her reinforcements have arrived. Added Bo “lets take back out planet” from a later scene (which I’ve cut). We then cut from the Mandos blasting out of the cave to them joining with the Mandalorians above from a later scene. I’ve used a few flipped and reversed shots to accommodate the additional dialogue. This allowed me to completely cut the “garden scene” which slowed down the plot and removed any sense of danger. Having the “lets take back out planet” at this point has more emotional weight.
Cut from Bo leading the Mandalorians into the Base back to Mando searching for Gideon. Here I’ve combined the two separate scenes into one, having moved the Fleet scene forwards. This took a lot of audio rebuilding and score manipulation with original score tracks and revurb to remove R5 and combine the scenes into a smooth single scene. It now plays out with much more urgency and threat. End the scene before Mando goes into the Clone room and cut to Bo and her forces. If the full scene of Din plays out it feels too long in this edited form.
After the Bo Forces scene cut to Mando in the Clone room.
Cut to Bo’s forces and then back to Mando facing off Gideon.
Gut Gideon “smother them before they could take their first breath” Giancarlo’s acting was a bit off here so I cut away from him and his sentence is cut off as Din appears and fires at him.
Cut straight from Moff Taking Din down to Grogu v Praetorian Guards as I’ve used the original spacer scene of Bo’s forces earlier in the edit.
Cut to Axe plunging towards Mandalore in the Cruiser - this scene has been moved forwards to create jeopardy and because there was too large a gap between Axe’s scenes in the original series.
Axe’s line about crashing into the base is transitioned to shot a shot of Bo.
Added Bo saying “Din” as we cut to a distant shot of Din v Gideon. The Gideon duel then plays out.
Trim Gideon firing at Din so that Bo intervenes much faster.
Added new exit soundtrack to classical iris out and Star Wars music.

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#1527766
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Mando EP3: A New Path (A Book of Boba Fett Edit) [RELEASED]
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STF78 said:

After watching todays episode it occurred to me that it might be better moving all the Mando/Grogu storyline specific content from TBOBF out of your edit and combining them with the first two episodes of this new season to make a third chapter in your Mandalorian story. That way the Boba Fett story could be its own thing (with a brief supporting appearance from Djarin) and the forthcoming six new Mandalorian episodes could form a chapter four. Just a thought.

This is a consideration and I’ll see how the new season plays out. At the moment the plan is to move the Luke-Grogu scenes out of this edit and into episode 4 (I’ve just started a new thread). However, if there is an obvious time skip during season 3 and enough material for 1.5 movies I will certainly play around removing the Boba material.

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#1527368
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Mando EP3: A New Path (A Book of Boba Fett Edit) [RELEASED]
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WitchDR said:

I finally got around to checking out all 3 of your Mando movies, and I must say Smudger, these are fantastic! I really love what you accomplished with the BOBF content. Completely seamless with the Mando content.

After hearing Favreau’s comment about Grogu being with Luke for 2 years (I haven’t seen Favreau walk this back as a slip-up) I’m wondering if there may be a way to imply this better. Since you were able to seamlessly remove Grogu from the Tatoonie scenes and leave him only for the ending of your 3rd movie, I’m wondering if it may be better suited for the opening of the 4th movie. This way you could imply a 2 year timejump (or even any amount of timejump) in the crawl.

This would also help with how we see such drastic changes with characters and locations. Such as the Armorer being on that new planet instead of the “ring city” we saw her on in BOBF, also the massive change in Navaro.

Though this would require you to chop up your Luke and Grogu scenes. The first training scenes imply that Grogu hasn’t been training with Luke for very long. So leave the ones where he’s learning to jump and what not as the end of the 3rd movie. Then open the 4th movie with Din arriving on Luke’s planet, have it play out the same, but instead jump to the scene of Grogu jumping along the rocks. It shows that he’s had a level of progression since the end of your 3rd movie with his small jumps.

Grogu and Din being back together so soon has rubbed a lot of people the wrong way and even though explaining it in a crawl that time has passed is only a band-aid on this issue, it’s still at least a little better than what we have been given.

I’m not the best at explaining everything in text form, but hopefully some of that came across coherently lol. I haven’t even attempted to edit this idea into realty, so it may not be feasible. But I’m gonna try playing around with your 3rd movie edit and see if the idea even works.

Thanks WDR! It was always my intention to move the Luke/Grogu scenes to the start of the next Movie. Favreau’s comments have reinforced that position!

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#1525812
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Andor EP2: The Reckoning 4K [RELEASED]
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Coach Courbis said:

Hi, I find your project really interesting, it’s super cool. I just had a question do you think it’s possible to edit all of season one into a three hour movie?

Not quite, which is frustrating because a single 3-hour movie would have been amazing.

I tried a rough cut but ultimately there is just too much material to squeeze into 3 hours. The best I could manage was 3h20 and that involved some brutal cutting which definitely resulted in some of the important story beats being lost.

It’s a shame because there is a 3-act movie in there…… escape from ferrix, Aldhani heist and return to Ferrix. The whole prison storyline is lost, but I was quite happy to lose that.

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#1525668
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Andor EP2: The Reckoning 4K [RELEASED]
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So having completed the first cut I’m now working my way through the second cut.

I’ve completed the first 35 mins, which is probably the toughest part because I need to incorporate some scenes from episodes 4, 5, 6 and 7 that I left out of episode 1.

I’ve uploaded this segment to googledrive. If anyone is keen to watch and offer feedback send me a PM. It’s a second cut so some of the music transitions are incomplete.

What I’ve done with the first act is:

Open on Coruscant and intercut between Syril arriving on Coruscant, Kleya meeting Vel and Dedra briefing Yularen and the ISB… “everyone is looking for Andor”. I then cut straight from Syril looking at Andor’s hologram to Andor arriving on Narkina.

Syril’s mother has been cut from the edit to give Syril a stronger character.

Andor’s first shift on Narkina is intercut with Syril’s first day at the Bureau of Standards. This provides a much better juxtaposition than Mon Mothma’s social gathering.

I then use the nighttime Narkina scene with the time skip to do 2 things.
Firstly to introduce the first of 2 flashback scenes of Cassian’s return to Ferrix shortly after the heist. These were cut from episode 1 because of the effect his return to Ferrix had on the pacing, but his scenes with Maarva are crucial to the plot going forwards and Cassian’s character development.
Secondly, to tie in Cyril’s job at the Bureau of Standards with the time skip, fitting in with Dedra’s lines about his search for Andor.

This puts me back onto the chronological timeline of the series from the midpoint of episode 8 apart from the first meeting of Mon Mothma and Tay, which will be moved to later in the edit.

I have edited Vel and Cinta’s first scene on Ferrix to remove reference to Vel leaving. In this edit Vel will remain on Ferrix. Her trip back to Coruscant and connection to Mon Mothma add nothing to the story.

The second Cassian-Maarva flashback scene is slotted into the scene where Cassian is awoken by the Narking Suicide. Maarva’s references to Cassian’s sister have been cut.

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#1524913
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Mando EP3: A New Path (A Book of Boba Fett Edit) [RELEASED]
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I’ve just uploaded a minor update. This version removes Mando’s mention of the Beskar spear being the gift of a Jedi. He now ignores the armourer’s question and talks about it being able to block a lightsaber. Not an amazing solution, but no worse than “a good question for another time” 😂.

Hopefully season 3 will provide some Mando or armourer lines to provide a better solution.

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#1524907
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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szopman said:

So, I finally finished watching the edit 😉 Great job!!

I think that in terms of having one coherent story, it was the easiest source material you got so far to work with 😉

I love what you did with it, I appreciate you polished the intro, it looks perfect now. I think it was a good decision to keep it 3h. Sometimes to make the story more coherent and have better pacing means to make it longer, let it breathe etc. There was just too much of really good stuff to keep, so it was a good decision to keep it. And of course, I like the reduced flashback (tho I’m one of those viewers that would just erase it completely 😄).

I just have one question - why didnt you use the classic ending credits style? You have always used it so far. Also, it was used in all cinematic Star Wars movies, so I was surprised when I didn’t see the blue letters on black background 😄

Overall, great job, as always. I’ll definitely include this in my every year SW marathons (I saw your TCW Episode I like 5 times already, Mando EP I two or three, the v1 one 😉 ). You changed a very good show into a damn good movie!

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it!

I didn’t think much about the end credits TBH. I just kept the same colour as the show. No drama to change them to blue.

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#1524537
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Andor EP2: The Reckoning 4K [RELEASED]
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honestabe said:

How much of Cyril’s mother do you plan to include in this portion of your edit?

I personally agree with his personal character development, but I felt his mother was easily the worst part of the show whose primary role appeared to diminish his character.

Funny you should say that. I’m currently trying to work out if I can cut her out completely!

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#1524510
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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Devils_Cabana_Boy said:

Really digged this edit, it flowed really well and had great pacing throughout… Any word on when Episode 2 might be potentially dropping? Would be good to see what you can do with all of the prison scene stuff…

Thanks 🙏.

I’ve done a very rough first cut of episode 2. The first 30mins will take some work to integrate Syril’s story and add in Andor’s trip to Ferrix as flashbacks. I anticipate working on it whilst Mando S3 is airing. Then I’ll move onto Mando Ep4.

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#1524104
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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yoshif8tures said:

smudger9 said:

yoshif8tures said:

I finished watching this and I must say that it is the best way to rewatch the series. Especially since these two acts especially slow paced.
I loved how that was dramatically increased whilst not sacrificing any of the story beats at all.
This will now be my go to version for when I want ti revisit this series.

Thanks Yoshif. It was really tempting to make deeper cuts to get the runtime down towards 2.5 hours, but I’m hoping I made the right decision to allow it to slide towards 3 hours.

Out of curiosity, what would you have cut out to get the runtime down that much?

I was contemplating cutting:
The Morlana 1 scenes.
All the flashbacks.
The Pegland/Cassian scene.
The destruction of the Corpo shuttle.
Some of the Mon Mothma and ISB scenes.
A few more Aldhani camp scenes.

Thant would have pushed it down to 2:30.

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#1524036
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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yoshif8tures said:

I finished watching this and I must say that it is the best way to rewatch the series. Especially since these two acts especially slow paced.
I loved how that was dramatically increased whilst not sacrificing any of the story beats at all.
This will now be my go to version for when I want ti revisit this series.

Thanks Yoshif. It was really tempting to make deeper cuts to get the runtime down towards 2.5 hours, but I’m hoping I made the right decision to allow it to slide towards 3 hours.

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#1524035
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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NeverarGreat said:

It is a dark time for the galaxy.

The EMPIRE rules with an iron fist. But amid this tyranny, pockets of resistance have started to form.

Desperate for support, these REBEL groups have turned to a network of secret agents to supply them with stolen Imperial assets.

In possession of a valuable piece of Imperial technology, a young thief prepares to meet the man behind this shadow network…

Sounds great. However, I wanted to convey that the the network approached the rebel groups, rather than the other way around.

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#1523948
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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StarkillerAG said:

smudger9 said:

szopman said:

I still hasn’t finished watching (won’t be able to watch it all at once today) but I noticed one little thing that makes the opening text feel very off.

The first line is centered, while the other 3 paragraphs are to the left. Its a little detail maybe but it really “hit” my eyes and made it look very faneditish to me.

The written content itself and its pacing is great, not too long,not too short, more like “Solo”. But still, I really think the format has to be corrected 😉

Once I watch it all, I ll be able to share more insights 😉

Thanks for the feedback. I tried a number of different formats for the crawl - all centered, all left aligned, centred with left aligned. This is the one I thought looked the best. The idea is that the first line is a sort of subtitle to the film title. Then the following three paragraphs are the exposition. I guess I could just combine the first 2 lines and keep it all left aligned if it bothers more people.

I personally think the first line would look better left aligned, although I do like it being a separate paragraph for additional emphasis.

Also, there’s a typo in the text; the first line should say “it’s a dark time,” rather than “its”. Personally, though, I think it would look more Star Wars-y to get rid of the contraction completely: “It is a dark time for the galaxy.”

EDIT: There should also be a comma in the third sentence: “But as the oppression grows, pockets of resistance have started to form.”

Thanks for the input. Corrections made. I’ve gone for centred because the shorter line doesn’t look right with left allignment.

Now rendering new versions with this intro and the rogue frame removed.

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#1523883
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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szopman said:

I still hasn’t finished watching (won’t be able to watch it all at once today) but I noticed one little thing that makes the opening text feel very off.

The first line is centered, while the other 3 paragraphs are to the left. Its a little detail maybe but it really “hit” my eyes and made it look very faneditish to me.

The written content itself and its pacing is great, not too long,not too short, more like “Solo”. But still, I really think the format has to be corrected 😉

Once I watch it all, I ll be able to share more insights 😉

Thanks for the feedback. I tried a number of different formats for the crawl - all centered, all left aligned, centred with left aligned. This is the one I thought looked the best. The idea is that the first line is a sort of subtitle to the film title. Then the following three paragraphs are the exposition. I guess I could just combine the first 2 lines and keep it all left aligned if it bothers more people.

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#1523868
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Smudger9's Andor Movie Series [COMPLETE] [4K; 5.1 Audio]
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STF78 said:

Excellent edit of an excellent show. It flows really well and the edits are largely seemless. The only feedback I could give beyond the praise is that I think I caught a flash frame around the 40 min 37 secs mark- an image of a console screen flashes for a second in between the shots of the security police on the transport and the ship flying over Aldani

Ahh yes. Well spotted. Looks like a rogue 1080 frame left in when I was converting to 4K. I’ll clip that out and re-upload.