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majoras_wrath said:

krausfadr said:

Wow, that looks great. My only nitpick is that the crawls usually have certain words in all caps for EMPHASIS. I would recommend capping FIRST ORDER, REY, and KYLO REN. Maybe RESISTANCE and/or MUSTAFAR as well, but those might be too close to the other capped words.

Thanks, the site streamable.com re-encodes the file so it looks kinda crappy on there. I believe Sir Ridley is doing Hal’s crawl, but I can be a backup if needed (or can render crawls for other people’s edits). I can do a HQ lossless render into a mov or mp4.

Hal I was working on my crawl in Blender using jackpumpkinhead’s Custom Crawl Creator v2 and I also did a test of your crawl (tweaking the 2nd line slightly).

Here’s what your crawl looks like rendered in blender with custom kerning, chromatic aberration and all that good stuff…
https://streamable.com/n3jiom

The text:
Flames of rebellion burn across the galaxy. The tyrannical First Order has retaliated by attacking any planetary system suspected of supporting their enemy.

As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training, General Leia Organa sends her brave agents across the stars to unite the disparate worlds in the name of Resistance.

Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar, chasing whispers of a hidden power that would allow him to destroy any threat to his rule…

EDIT: I just corrected the star field in my template so now its perfect. If anyone would like a crawl rendered for their edit, let me know.

I’m not a fan of the Fornite broadcast. But Movies Remastered placed it pretty effectively at the end when the Resistance listens to the radio. If I were going to add this to an edit (which I’m definitely not) I’d cut Palpatine’s lines down a bit and use some of the one’s idir picked but place the broadcast in the spot MR did.

idir_hh said:

Yes, if you listen closely, my version of the broadcast kinda adds more context to the events of the ST in general.
“At last the work of generations is complete. The great error is corrected.Skywalker is Dead. The Republic has been destroyed. The day of victory is at hand. The day of Revenge. The days of the Sith”
https://vimeo.com/404134108

Wouldn’t this placement eliminate the briefing of the spy intel which is a needed scene to advise the Resistance they must find Exegol.

BenSlzak said:

Hi!
Can I get a link to your workprint? It sounds awesome!

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poppasketti said:

Gave Ochi’s ship one last shot!
https://vimeo.com/432503419
pw: fanedit

I moved Kylo over a bit, and I reversed the direction of the camera. This way, Kylo is moving out of frame and the focus is drawn towards the ship. I also adjusted the music timing to hit on the wipe.

Such amazing work.

Question: How was the fx processing so different for Kuruk #7? Was it submitted with some fx already applied. I do like the effect and maybe it would be good to make one of them sound more that way to help differentiate.

Hal 9000 said:

I think it looks pretty good. It’s about the first thing we see in the movie, anyway. Would just the shot of the TIEs in the forest be enough, though?

That TIE forest shot just feels comforting and nice. Like paintings with Star Wars stuff added. https://www.somethingawful.com/photoshop-phriday/star-wars-art/1/

The shot of the transports landing looks good. It does not look like jarring video game footage. Id just use it right after poppa’s ties with monit the other lava shots.

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Blind. I don’t want to know who is who.

I’m really excited to hear what people submitted!!! Thanks axlanian for doing this.

Workprint version B just uploaded.

dgraham414 said:

I can try to upload the Finn lines that I used if anybody wants them?

Not sure if I’m gonna mess with that scene any more. But your lines are all good. One of them I think was used shortly after though when downloading the message?

I am exporting a Workprint Ver B. It should be ready and posted within about 7 hours. Will send a link after it’s ready.

George burned the Prowse cut along with the original films. He sprinkles the ashes on his breakfast—- a gallon tub of neopolitan, rubs his belly and says, “I’m your father.”

poppasketti Kylo’s hair seems like it’s blowing in slow motion while the ship is moving at normal speed.

Hal 9000 said:

Has anyone whose removed the Finn secret thing found a good way to remove their talk while about to be executed? It happens right up and through the false shots.

I removed it as well very seamlessly. I’m exporting a Workprint ver B at the moment. But tomorrow I can post the clip.
EDIT: Nevermind. I cut at the same spot Movies Remastered did. And I see he already posted a clip. Unfortunately it is not feasible to keep any of the banter.

poppasketti said:

Here’s the two Klaud removal shots:
https://vimeo.com/431939234
pw: fanedit

Link is downloadable and it’s also in the “Master Clips” folder!

Shit. I didn’t even realize our buddy Klaud was lurking in that scene. Thank you very much poppasketti.

Hal 9000 said:

I’d be okay with removing the confession thing as long as it’s reference underneath the sand can be handled in a way that is not jarring. Cutting abruptly to Poe leading the way with the flashlight is.

You would have to cut from Poe in the rear to Poe up front. The change didn’t bother me. Just showed he hurried up. But you could always put another scene in the middle to show more passage of time.

Movies Remastered said:

Sounds like you’re gonna love my edit!

Glad you pointed out about Finn saying “so few wayfinders” I was going to look up the script to see if that’s what he actually said as he didn’t even know what a wayfinder was less than an hour ago.

The way I cut it was to use the 4 beat clean music clip from the opening segment over Finn’s line and overlay it with a cutaway to BB8 using the desert scene from TFA when he first meets Rey.

Yeah it was actually a little involved getting rid of that line and making everything else work. The problem is as he’s walking by he’s clearly moving his mouth as he says the line. I ended up having to foley in some more canister whooshing sounds and move one of Poe’s lines.

Movies Remastered said:

I felt the start was a little messy. How about simplifying your scenes and having Kajimii blow up as your opening scene in one?

Let me think about that one. Of course the easiest thing to do would be to cut the mask reforging scene completely. But not sure I want to do that.

Yeah I’ll work on that transition some more. 😃

Finn was way too sassy, especially in that scene. The “always” line is the one piece of sass I would have left in though-- but it went right into all his huffing and eye-rolls and it made him just way out of character. He was decisive and awesome in TLJ then suddenly a hesitant mother hen in TROS. The lightspeed skipping argument was just redundant and so over the top unnecessary. I made the following changes to try and Make Finn Great Again and would encourage other editors to improve Finn as well:

23. Cut sassy-pants Finn as he’s bumped around in the Falcon’s gunner seat.
24. Cut Finn’s sassy-pants agreement about “bouldering” the TIE fighters.
25. Cut Finn’s line to Poe in the Falcon, “Get us back to base” and cut his glance over just before he says it.
26. During the lightspeed skipping, cut Finn’s loud reaction and replaced his loud lines, “WHAT ARE YOU DOING?” And “HOW DO YOU KNOW HOW TO DO THAT?” He’s now calmer and maybe more in tune with the force.
27. Cut Rey greeting Finn and Rey’s extended argument with Poe over lightspeed skipping. This removes Finn’s sassy-pants line “always” referring to Poe being in a bad mood as well as Finn’s eye rolls, huffing, and acting like a sassy mother hen.
28. Cut Finn’s useless line, “It’s true” to Rey after Poe storms off.
29. Cut Finn’s useless line, “I’ve never seen so few Wayfinders” to depict him as more wise than wisecracking.
30. Cut Finn’s prolonged glancing at the rope before he throws it at the Stormtrooper speeder bike. This was overly showing us “hey look Finn’s getting an idea.”
31. As Finn is sinking into the sand, cut his line about telling Rey something.
32. Cut Rey and Finn’s conversation about the secret he had to tell her.
33. The final briefing ends with Poe speaking, cutting Finn’s lackluster line about taking the war to them.
34. Cut Finn’s lines, “Lando you did it. YOU DIIIIID IT!!!”
35. Trimmed Finn and Jannah running on top of Falcon mid-flight so they don’t ridiculously pause to sightsee the destruction around them.
36. Cut Finn’s line about everyone in the galaxy rising. Too little too late Finn.

Finishing up the changes for the new release. In this edit Rey killed her parents.

I removed the plotline where Rey’s parents sold her to Palpatine because something like that couldn’t possibly be explained well and just left open too many questions.

Now in their confrontation Rey goes ballistic when Ren says, “It was Palpatine. He was looking for you. You remember what you did.” Here’s the clip: https://streamable.com/fecuw8

Hal 9000 said:

Clips (but no chips) (but ships!):

https://vimeo.com/431236341
https://vimeo.com/431236376
https://vimeo.com/431236416

To better sell this concept consider removing the dagger as a vital McGuffin alltogether. Rey should no longer say that they NEED the dagger. She just hears it calling to her on the ship. Rough idea of how I’d try and cut it (just add Sith chants before she turns): https://streamable.com/7hsm53

EDIT: The only real way the dagger could remain a needed McGuffin with just Sith chants is to have it be visible as Rey searches on the Death Star.