I think we should test both ways, I lean more towards having the chess scene after the Tatooine establishing shot, If not just for the background chatter heard when Rey get’s off the falcon.
Probably inconsequential but might aswell, here’s a petition I saw on reddit for the release of all deleted scenes:
http://chng.it/P96BssWjTF
This edit helps cement the idea that these people are a family now, instead of Rey being completely alone on a desert planet at the end. Her friends are there waiting for her : )
It also helps explain why BB-8 is there, he’s just a curious little friend : )
I think the establishing shot of Tatooine needs to be included somewhere, either before the chess seen or after.
This edit helps cement the idea that these people are a family now, instead of Rey being completely alone on a desert planet at the end. Her friends are there waiting for her : )
It also helps explain why BB-8 is there, he’s just a curious little friend : )
This and the Falcon leaving at the end are must haves for every edit!
I know many people have written crawls that describe Kylo Ren on a quest to discover the origin of his former master’s power, and I was trying to think of a way that could tie Snoke, Palpatine, Vader and Mustafar together.
Right now, I’m playing around with this idea of starting the movie with Kylo touching Vader’s helmet to sort of lead him the right way to the wayfinder on the planet surface. So he touches the helmet, then he would hear the voices of either Snoke and/or Vader, and get quick flashes of Vader’s castle, the Sith wayfinder, and the Exegol temple/the fleet. The idea being that this is Palpatine speaking through Vader’s helmet, trying to lead him the way to Exegol. I also would fit the “Find me” line somewhere in here. I’m still not exactly sure what to fit in the vision but maybe others would have some ideas about this. But I think it should set up Kylo’s “want” in the film, whatever that is.
But, I thought it would be interesting to have a shot of Snoke on Mustafar, standing in front of the Sith Wayfinder (either to use it to find Exegol, or to place it there as part of Palpatine’s plans). But I was thinking it could be a quick shot of something like this.
Snoke on Mustafar looks super creepy! It’s a very good illustration of the idea and would fit nicely in a version that delays Mustafar and the Palpatine reveal.
Although it’s looking to be unlikely, I hope Rian Johnson is the one helming the 2022 film.
Looking forward to it!
Just curious, when finished will you be releasing it in script format?
I read the first act and I enjoyed it very much, I’d rather read it in full when your completely done with it.
A compelling analysis of Rey’s character flaw in TROS and how it could have been fixed.
By:
A Closer Look
https://youtu.be/FVkIsr52Lxw
Anyone got idea’s on how to integrate some of the better aspects of TROS (mustafar) (the death star) (adventure with trio) into a majority TFA TLJ edit?
Peace is a lie there is only passion
Through passion we gain strength
Through strength we will fix this trilogy
Through fixing this trilogy our chains are broken
The fanedits shall free us.
Would be interesting if the ship from the flashback was replaced with a scrapped together clone wars era ship, perhaps a troop* carrier ship/ low altitude assault transport or something from the final battle of Jakku.
It’s quite likely that it’s tied to the high Republic era.
According to the trades, it’s a martial arts centred show with a female lead.
I think Rey killing her parents is still better than Rey Palpatine, but if I could make a version without some new revelation about her past, I would prefer it.
This. Focus on her future.
I mean, we could have both.
She could have visions of the past and future, her killing her parents and her possibly killing her friends, in fact her killing her parents creates a precedent, so the prospect of her killing her friends becomes all the more probable. Thus raising the stakes.
If Rey killed her parents, Kylo should’ve really revealed it in TLJ. God, imagine Rey’s reaction then. She probably would’ve joined him. So another parental reveal just feels sort of redundant. At this point I think it could be better to focus on her future, rather than her past.
I think the idea is that Palpatine revealed to Kylo Rey’s dark nature, her place in the Sith Dyad and her unfortunate past.
but I would like to see a version of that scene without her saying she’ll find and destroy Palpatine, since I think it would work better if Finn’s reply was solely a response to the fact that she killed her parents.
Lol I was just typing that.
Yeah but to the average viewer, they look identical from the back.
I think the cleanest way of removing that issue would be to change the model of the ship in her flashback, removing any connection between Ochi and Rey.
Consider me hyped.
Now that’s a good idea.
Edit: It would be difficult though to construct the lines for Kylo, all instances of him saying the word “grandfather” are with his mask on.
That brings me to the helmet.
What if Kylo had his helmet on for his scenes on Exogol? Since in the film he reconstructs it for no apparent reason, in this version having him reconstruct the helmet right before he leaves for Exogol would add some meaning behind it.
Yeah the scene where Kylo learns about the dyad was the oracle scene, which was cut from the final film, so the theatrical cut gives no explanation as to why or how he knows about that.
Maybe as he holds the Wayfinder in the opening scene, it could go on a dubbed extended expositional monologue.
In Vaders voice perhaps?
Also, having the wayfinder speak of 2 halfs of the dyad, while there being 2 wayfinders would be kinda poetic.
What was it that you meant to say?
I quoted my comment instead of editing it (:
I don’t think re-ordering the scenes like that can work, and that’s part of my point. Rey killing her parents is… an interesting idea and could have worked if they’d made the movie that way. But I’m vetting it as a realistic option to pursue in an edit desiring to feel totally theatrically viable in a parallel universe.
I see what you mean, the restructure would have been the ideal but I think the idea works well nonetheless, especially since you have Rey’s reaction in the falcon “I killed my mother and my father”.
shit … I couldn’t contain myself, fucking hair
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1ibJV4LFQlxx8fkjBmT71UDQh-PuPUT8r
only a test,
I have to improve it
That’s leaps better.
Hmm, I agree that the hangar scene needs to have something juicy, and it seems pretty “duh” for Kylo to tell her Palpatine wanted to squash any potentially powerful Force user.
Tangential: Would it make sense to change Palpatine’s line at the start to “Find the girl,” and have Kylo Ren apparently lie to Rey that he wants her dead?
If Palpatine is then portrayed as wanting to bring the two together, it seems even dumber for him to be surprised about the Force dyad fountain of youth. (Well, not youth, but of being alive and having all your fingers and pupils and stuff.)
Palpatine’s surprise about the dyad could be cut, setting it up in the opening and replacing it with “and now, your coming together will be your undoing.” or “stand together, die together” springing the trap immediately, his talk about “the power of 2 will restore the 1 true emperor” could be VO as he sucks the life out of Rey and Ben.
Hal 9000 said:
Having Rey kill her parents would fill the dramatic void left by her evil heritage, shown through visions and maybe even Rey saying to Finn “I killed my mother… and my father.” She tells Kylo Ren she knows what she must do when he reveals this, which I would think should lead into her self-exile rather than continuing the mission of trying to get to Palpatine.
Glad that you’ve come around to this.
Rey going into self exile after the reveal makes more sense in this narrative and would help the film of the film, problem is that I don’t see how we could make it work. First problem is that she arrives on Achto in Ren’s Tie, Second is that you’d have to cut the death star scene since she takes Ren’s Tie to Achto, and you can’t have the transition of her leaving the death star to her traveling to Exogol since she uses Luke’s X-Wing in the latter.
