PsyGemini said:
Is it feasible to divide this second episode into two parts? The first half (Fighter Flight) is… quite mediocre, to say the least, but the second half (Out of Darkness) is… quite alright IMHO; so it would be nice to not have to go through fifteen minutes of boredom on rewatches.
Also, taking out the part where Zeb and Ezra DO try and fix the ship (just didn’t notice the fuel thing) made things seem… awkward in here, like they were just lazing around and blatantly lied to Hera about having fixed the ship they knew she would be taking down to the planet in a few moments; it’s like they didn’t care she’d potentially die on a defective vessel or something lmao.
Thanks for the feedback! 😃
Originally they were two separate episodes in my edit but both were too short after cuts and thematically share a sense of trust building between crew members. (I’ve thought about cutting them together a bit but Zeb and Ezra need to be on good terms before the second part can begin)
In terms of not showing them fix the Phantom. I took it out because it feels too childish. The exchange I’ve kept with Ezra and Zeb fighting chopper feels enough. My thoughts for adding that scene back in… They still hide the lack of performing a diagnostic to Hera either way. And they still complete repairs either way and send Hera and Sabine off to potential doom. It’s also not the focus of that part of the episode, as once the Ezra and Zeb ark is complete, we switch focus onto Sabine and Hera.
I also feel there’s a sense of implied work, you can see Ezra with a tool but due to the dysfunction you can get a sense it wasn’t done properly. To me, the exchange in my edit doesn’t give a sense of blatant lying.
That being said, I am interested in further feedback on this episode! As it is, I feel it works.
