Interesting.
I really like how quickly it moves, but it may move a little too quickly. I think it worked without the scene of the droids being fitted with restraining bolts down in the dungeon.
I like having the idea of Chewie and Leia show up right on the heels of the droids, but it seemed a little forced to have Jabba trust 3PO to translate when he just got there himself. Maybe if you had a subtitle of Jabba saying something like "Protocol droid! Get up here and translate!" or something like that. 3PO replies with "Yes, I am here..." and the scene goes on.
You may want to think about restoring some of the reaction shots of when Leia reveals the thermal detonator. It doesn't seem to have the drama with out it.
The scenes from when the droids arrive to when Leia and Chewie arrive are very smoothly edited and flow nicely.
Good work!