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Sluggo

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Save Star Wars Dot Com
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It is hard to say where I would trim.  I like and don't like the personal tone of the article.  If readers detected sarcasm, it might both rally the like-minded, but may turn off the reader that is on the fence of the issue.  Just my 2 cents.

And 1-3 examples of the audio errors is confusing.  You do list three things, but they are lumped together.  You ought to separate them more or just list them under 1.