After watching this movie on Netflix and giving my novel-length thoughts on it in the review thread, I got to thinking about how this film could be radically improved. It would require some substantive editing. In short, switch the first and second acts.
Begin with a crawl. Here’s something akin to what I’m thinking:
Rogue One
It is a time of oppression. The evil Galactic Empire is secretly building a superweapon which will allow it to crush any rebellion once and for all.
Desperate to halt this construction, the fledgling Rebel Alliance has sent a small team to capture the mastermind behind this terror weapon and destroy his facility.
Unbeknownst to the Rebellion, the daughter of this scientist is hidden in their ranks, and her love for her father may decide the fate of the galaxy…
Pan down to Eadu. The ship (whose only identifiable occupants are Jyn, Cassian, and K2SO) crashes on the planet and the two cloaked figures head out in the rain towards the facility. We see these cloaked figures ascend the ridge and survey the assembled scientists, but when Krennic’s ship flies overhead, one figure (Jyn) disappears. After a while, we see Jyn climbing to the platform. The scene plays out as it does in the movie, sans Bodhi and Baze and Chirrut, and with the dream on Coruscant perhaps interspersed with Jyn’s reunion. They escape on the stolen ship and head back to Yavin 4.
Cue first scene of the Death Star.
Back on Yavin, Alliance brass has learned of Jyn’s real name. They question her, realizing that they now have a potential in with Saw’s Rebels. The quest for Jedha remains largely unchanged. We now see her backstory where the dream was before, and her later imprisonment and rescue in bits and pieces. It is not clear that the Rebellion was the party that rescued her from prison. The hologram gains an added weight now that we know that Galen has just died. There is real tragedy this time.
After escaping the destruction of Jedha, the crew is ambivalent about what to do while Jyn wants to plead her case to the Alliance to head to Scarif. Chirrut mentions that Cassian has the air of a killer about him, which brings back the recriminations about Cassian’s true role in the botched ‘capture’. The scene ends with the same acrimony between Cassian and Jyn.
Tarkin and Krennic spar on the Death Star, but the scene ends without Krennic’s determination to go to Eadu. Instead, he departs to Vader to curry favor with the Emperor.
Meanwhile, on Yavin 4, the conference is the same as in the original. After the team departs for Scarif (sans the R2 and 3PO reference), Krennic meets with Vader.
The final act proceeds roughly the same as the original. It is not necessary to change anything from here on out, but I would shift sections of the battle so that it makes sense from a logistical perspective. For example, the fighting on the beach, up to and including Bodhi’s death, all happens before Jyn decides to transmit the plans using the dish. This way, there can be no rescue in the transport. Similarly, Bodhi’s successful transmission to the fleet is what compels them to ‘begin probing that shield’. The bombing runs on the shield gate and the Star Destroyer decapitation maneuver are both the result of this communication. Krennic is told of the data breach the moment after Cassian fails to use the right hand of the officer, and the waves of Stormtroopers are a result of Krennic’s direct orders.
The film cuts to black after the final shot of Vader staring at the departing Blockade Runner. In this version, with the removal of the R2 and 3PO shot earlier, there is ambiguity as to whether this is the Tantive IV or whether it later beams the plans to another Blockade Runner.