NeverarGreat

DuracellEnergizer said:

LuckyGungan2001 said:

I feel that I was more mature as a thirteen/fourteen year old than I am now.

That’s not how maturity works!

Oh, you’re old?

Great to hear!

Here’s the V1 cutlist, updated to the best of my memory to include the new changes. Italicized changes are ones that I’m not sure are being included. Does everything look right?

New Crawl.

Added the Falcon jumping to Hyperspace after leaving Jakku, then being ripped from Hyperspace soon after.

Removed General Hux from the first scene with Snoke, where he suggests using the weapon to destroy the Republic. (FX by Jackpumpkinhead to paint out Hux walking offscreen during first shot)

After Rey flees Maz’s castle after her Force vision, replaced the Hosnian system being destroyed in the sky with a Star Destroyer.

(Color correction of Maz’s Castle battle to make it seem like it takes place at late afternoon)

New deleted scene of Leia discussing the Republic.

When Finn is introduced to Leia, removed mention of the Hosnian system’s destruction.

R2 now has a blinking light to indicate that he’s searching for the map.
(3PO walking away foley)

After Rey resists Kylo Ren’s mind probe, added the portion of the Snoke scene from earlier where General Hux suggests using the weapon to destroy the Republic. (FX by Jackpumpkinhead to overlay Kylo Ren’s face over where his mask was for one shot)

Moved General Hux’s impassioned speech to after Kylo Ren overreacts to Rey’s escape from her cell.

After the speech, the nearby Sun beings to be drained, as Hux and the troops gaze upon the stream being sucked into the planet. (Recolored to yellow-orange, and reversed so as to appear to be going down into the ground)

During the briefing scene at the Resistance base, changed and added dialogue to indicate that the Republic is still unresponsive to their messages.

Cleaned up the smoke and debris around the Starkiller weapon exhaust when X-wings approach.

During a brief cutaway to the Resistance base as Han and Chewie infiltrate the oscillator, removed Threepio’s line, “It would take a miracle to save us now.”

Immediately after Kylo Ren kills Han, the Starkiller fires and destroys the Hosnian system, as Leia senses it through the Force.

As Finn and Rey start to head outside the oscillator, cut to Snoke and Hux planning to destroy the Resistance.

As the Falcon flies away from the imploding planet, removed shots in which the fighter pilots appeared more joyful than the galaxy’s fresh loss would lead one to expect and re-scored and re-foleyed the entire sequence.

Extended the shot of R2 as he finishes searching his backup data.

(Chewie cropped out of shot at the Resistance Base)

Final shot stabilized.

JEDIT: BTW, is this still being called Restructured, or is it The Starkiller Edit?

DuracellEnergizer said:

ray_afraid said:

adywan said:

Then we have salacious crumb,

Aw, man. I really like him. Is he getting cut out?

He should get cut in half. A gruesome demise for that aggravating imp would be oh so satisfying.

The hate must flow, apparently.

I just noticed a potential issue in the escape from Jakku. After they go to hyperspace, Finn tells Rey that ‘we need to get out of this system’. Yet presumably they’ve already left the system, so Finn’s not making a lot of sense. I played around with some dialogue changes, but it’s probably better to just cut the line.

If people think it’s a problem, that is.

The wreckage line, despite my best attempts, simply doesn’t sound enough like something he would say, and unless someone else is able to salvage it, it won’t be getting any better.
When The Last Jedi arrives, we’ll have twice as much material for this sort of thing, so I bet we’ll be able to cobble something together. But he only says “The Republic” once that is usable, and more problematically he almost exclusively talks in the present or future tense.

TV’s Frink said:

DuracellEnergizer said:

Person Man

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sNT8SMlqLJA

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9u_v9H24PfY

There have been several such changes that have already made it in, I don’t see how this is anything but an improvement.

But Duracell, it’s FUN to have new creatures.

This is a much better version of the theme, count me in on wanting this as well!

I don’t think that the Gonk torture was intended to be humorous, but the scream sound effect is so silly that the whole thing feels absurd.

Very good!

https://mega.nz/#!OcNlzAwJ!RLYpT2YJMtM1hUlCup7REayPaYppXTLSsypIQz2OWv0

This is a previous version that is much less manipulated, but sounds a lot more piecemeal as a result. If you’d like to work your magic on it and make it editworthy, that would be wonderful. 😃

Using Audacity for pitch shifting isn’t so great, apparently. Do you think you could try pitching it like that with your tools? You’ve got a better sound setup than I do anyway 😃

https://mega.nz/#!GcM3XbYA!OL9N2iEvkuLwylcdbVLsVlcK9Ul2slH4WkwTVgEGdT4

‘they found us’, pitched to more closely match the rest of the dialogue.

On the ‘supreme leader’ issue, it does provide a nice buffer into the scene, and it doesn’t preclude a previous conversation about the Republic; people sometimes call out to their interlocutor in the midst of conversation as a way of regaining their attention, and this is basically what the scene is trying to do with the audience.

dahmage said:

NeverarGreat said:

dahmage said:

• the gall of writing the line “A good question. For another time” for Maz Kanata

This line makes more sense in the context of TFA: Restructured.

Does it? I haven’t watched that yet.

I think so, since in that version they know the First Order’s coming and they’re short on time. But that’s neither here nor there.

…

Lady Bird: Less of a comedy and more of a documentary, since I know two parents who are exactly like this. Pretty good watch if you’re in the mood for a more indie experience.

The text of that link makes me anxious.

It’s the characters, our feelings for them are strong.

dahmage said:

• the gall of writing the line “A good question. For another time” for Maz Kanata

This line makes more sense in the context of TFA: Restructured.

I use frame blend on all of the slowed shots, since the Optical Flow produces really poor results in Premiere, at least for me.

Although I’d prefer some acknowledgement from Hux about the Republic, I totally understand if it doesn’t make the cut. Onward!

It really is a lack of footage more than anything, I had to pull a shot from the deleted scenes just to cover the time. I am not sure that there’s another applicable shot in the deleted scenes to use.

The reason for the Hux line is that destroying the Republic seems to be his driving motivation, at least judging from his impassioned speech earlier. It seems very strange for him to have just achieved this goal and let it pass unmarked. Also, destroying the seat of the galactic government is a footnote in the original version, and this edit can barely elevate the Republic to the status of subplot, so I’m trying to take every opportunity to make it so. 😉

Here’s a tweaked version of Hux’s line with ‘Supreme Leader’:

https://mega.nz/#!OR0W0BDQ!ARaLnvIKChLer0F6Jq_cOC9ynDaJ629Az_Feh5YPJ5o

With some reverb:

https://mega.nz/#!OJFkmSYD!68S_uIPRCsIqhbN22em_AaFu5m4U7-mKADCzAAkX7Hk

And yes, the Hux ‘Fire!’ should be filtered in some way.

Nice to see it coming together!

Some notes:

• I can still hear a bit of the old theme during Han’s Death.
• Poe’s look at the weapon firing could use a lot more red color correction.
• It would be good if the sound of the exploding planet could be extended to fade into the shot of Leia.
• Hux’s first line could definitely use a ‘Supreme Leader’ before it, perhaps beginning from the previous shot of the Oscillator.
• I’m sure the final shot of Hux won’t be so small going forward 😉

Star Wars: Silent Serial Edition

Glad to see my idea for the final scene in action.

That’s one hell of a fanart!