NFBisms

Ocrop27 said:

NFBisms said:

Disney Ruined Star Wars said:

This was a quote I read from someone and I agree with it very much:

Sad that in the end people just throw their hands up and say "doesn’t work for you, works for me, oh well."
Good storytelling transcends subjective solipsism. The fact of the matter is that Luke’s actions in this film were not built up to in the previous films at all, and his character is a very severe departure from what he was. He also represents a bold new moral view of this universe, from the makers of this film, which is almost too sad to describe.
Art is an extension of worldview. It taps into what matters most to us. Lucas showed what matters most to him. And what was done to that worldview, and what worldview has replaced it, is chilly in the extreme. I certainly won’t be anxious to show this film to my children, when I have them. 1-6, sure. I do not agree with the values of this film, or the worldview it presents though. It seems cynical, poisonous and nihilistic, especially in light of what came before.
You may enjoy that if you like but there is no denying the shift that occurs. Anyone who denies that shift is very likely blind to the themes of these films.

I don’t want to be that guy, but I’m kind of tired of people overlooking my posts, and I do want to discuss this.

http://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1146676

I don’t believe TLJ is that cynical, and I liked it, and it makes me disappointed that there are seemingly only a few camps that we can exist in in terms of opinion.

I don’t think that the moral values of it are even really that different or worse from or than the OT when you think about it. I think everyone saying that the Jedi are actually evil or bad for the Galaxy because of their dogma are way off base with what the movie was trying to say.

In the end, there’s a hero in all of us. You’re not defined by your failures. Trying to be the hero doesn’t make it so. Forging your own legends is more selfish than it is heroic. Sometimes just doing the right thing is enough to make a difference. All of these, I’d be fine with my children (lol if I had any) learning. I think there’s a lot here that is more important to learn than what the OT can teach, if anything.

People say that he would never try to kill ben, and i agree, but the thing is that he actualy did’t. For a second he ignites he’s light saber and think about not letting a second vader exist, but then realised what he was doing. That doesn’t make him fail as a jedi, since we already seen this same scenario in ROTJ where luke choses to not strike his father. What i am saying is that Luke was never a one dimesional character and so isn’t old Luke. He is not perfect, he is no god or messiah, but in the end he goes to help his frieds, like he always did, only more grown and sure of what he is doing.

He did fail, though. That is failure. Especially after all we know about him and his ideals. He exiles himself because he thinks the galaxy is better off without him, that he will only let them down, and that him and the Jedi Order would only do more damage. But that’s the crux of his arc in the movie, learning that that failure doesn’t define him or his capability to do good, and that his exile in the end wasn’t some noble act of protection for the galaxy.

DrDre said:

NFBisms said:
I don’t even think it’s the same situation/plot. Maybe you disagree with the decision to have Luke cut himself off from the galaxy in the first place, but that alone is enough to be a different story with different themes. Maybe TFA set up a trajectory like the one you describe, but even Ben’s First Order is now motivated by burning down all the old institutions to begin a new world order, as opposed to the OT Empire just wishing to maintain its hold on the galaxy. It looks the same on a superficial level, I guess, but I do think it is a “different problem that the old solution can’t fix.”

I don’t really see where the FO is that different from the Empire presented in TESB after the destruction of the Death Star. They’re a military power controlling most of the galaxy. I’ve heard very little about a new world order, and how that system is supposed to be so different from the previous dictatorship that ruled the galaxy.

That’s fair, of what we’ve had so far, it has mirrored the Empire. I just think that “evil empire vs rebel group” is informed by different themes this time around, at least in TLJ where Ren has killed Snoke and the Resistance was more focused on survival rather than hitting back. I think it really all depends on where they take this in IX.

Obi-Wan and Yoda were hiding to watch over Luke until he was ready to begin his Jedi training. On the other hand, Old Luke at the start of TLJ has no intention of doing anything for the galaxy anymore. He doesn’t even know Han is dead or even what is happening in the galaxy. That it even needed his help.

I think the entire scenario surrounding Luke’s abandonment of his ideals and values are in part why this trilogy betrays the spirit of the earlier films. In order for the new hero to replace the old one, the old one has to take himself out of commission contrary to everything that character represented for four decades, a cheat of sorts. It sacrifices the old solution to the problem of a galaxy wide dictatorship, namely Luke and the New Republic for the new solution represented by Rey, and whatever might become of those few dozen rebels flying off in the Millenium Falcon at the end of TLJ.

I do think TLJ was more about Luke than it was about Rey. While he literally sacrifices himself at the end for the future of the good guys and the galaxy, I don’t think they gave anything up they could have explored with Luke to give Rey more to do, when maybe they should have.

I guess I just don’t think new additions to the franchise can ruin what came before it for me. The prequels didn’t ruin the original trilogy to me. And while I am welcoming of the ST’s new direction, I don’t even think it takes away from the OT. If anything, it’s just an expansion of it. Just another way to look at it. Doesn’t make what those movies have to say any less important.

I don’t know. If a creator writes a story with certain themes and messages, and then another creator claims to expand on, and eventually finish that story (it’s all supposed to be one nine part saga, no?), but actively undermines those themes and messages (IMO), I think that presents a problem. I think a creator should be true to the material. If RJ wanted to take things in a completely different direction, I think he should have used his own vehicle, the new trilogy, to do it, and even then not all bets are off. If he really wants to do his own thing, he should create his own universe.

Luke still represents the same thing to me that he has since I was a kid. The young farmboy from nothing who became a Jedi Knight. You can call it regression, but I think it plays to the strength of TLJ’s themes to remind us of the simple humanity he came from, and not just as the infallible legend he became to the galaxy (and us, meta-narratively). After all, his human compassion and love for his father is what won for the galaxy at the end of the day in ROTJ. His experiences training as a Jedi opened his mind and matured him, but his humanity made him the hero.

If one of TLJ’s main themes is about there being a hero in all of us despite our shortcomings - and that trying to recreate/forge our own legends isn’t that heroic - I think that’s pretty true to the spirit of the OT, more than the prequels retroactively making Luke and Leia out to be the heirs of some prophesied chosen one Force-Jesus. It’s not anything that the OT tried to say explicitly, but it works with what we had in it. The force isn’t what made Luke special.

So now, Luke thinks he’s failed not just Ben Solo, not just the galaxy, but himself. He expected better, because he was a legend, the galaxy’s hero. But in the end, it isn’t about how powerful, or wise, or infallible, he was/is that made him a hero. We can agree to disagree that Old Luke as a character is one that still needed to learn any lessons at this point, but I don’t think him learning that his failures don’t define him or his capability for good, is something that goes against the OT. It’s not really something they explore about Luke within that trilogy one way or another. What happens when he fails himself and his own ideals? Sure, ROTJ sets up that if he gives into anger and hate he will suffer his father’s fate, but that’s binary. TLJ introduces the gray area of shame and regret, but it’s rooted in that same question. And the answer is still that Luke is a good person in spite of it all.

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So while I think RJ did take the series in a new direction thematically, I don’t think he tried to undermine the old movies and what they had to say. In fact, TLJ only works if we understand the lessons we took from those.

Disney Ruined Star Wars said:

NFBisms said:

Disney Ruined Star Wars said:

This was a quote I read from someone and I agree with it very much:

Sad that in the end people just throw their hands up and say "doesn’t work for you, works for me, oh well."
Good storytelling transcends subjective solipsism. The fact of the matter is that Luke’s actions in this film were not built up to in the previous films at all, and his character is a very severe departure from what he was. He also represents a bold new moral view of this universe, from the makers of this film, which is almost too sad to describe.
Art is an extension of worldview. It taps into what matters most to us. Lucas showed what matters most to him. And what was done to that worldview, and what worldview has replaced it, is chilly in the extreme. I certainly won’t be anxious to show this film to my children, when I have them. 1-6, sure. I do not agree with the values of this film, or the worldview it presents though. It seems cynical, poisonous and nihilistic, especially in light of what came before.
You may enjoy that if you like but there is no denying the shift that occurs. Anyone who denies that shift is very likely blind to the themes of these films.

I don’t want to be that guy, but I’m kind of tired of people overlooking my posts, and I do want to discuss this.

http://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1146676

I don’t believe TLJ is that cynical, and I liked it, and it makes me disappointed that there are seemingly only a few camps that we can exist in in terms of opinion.

I don’t think that the moral values of it are even really that different or worse from or than the OT when you think about it. I think everyone saying that the Jedi are actually evil or bad for the Galaxy because of their dogma are way off base with what the movie was trying to say.

In the end, there’s a hero in all of us. You’re not defined by your failures. Trying to be the hero doesn’t make it so. Forging your own legends is more selfish than it is heroic. Sometimes just doing the right thing is enough to make a difference. All of these, I’d be fine with my children (lol if I had any) learning. I think there’s a lot more here that is important to learn than in the OT, if anything.

NFB, I didn’t mean to ignore you. I can see your point of view as possibly being between mine and Adywan’s. Maybe for you the movie doesn’t seem cynical, but I can’t imagine a Star Wars world where Luke Skywalker is hiding from his friends and letting them die and saying the Jedi need to die out. That is the opposite of everything he did and believed in during the OT.

Even Mark Hamill said he disagreed with everything he was asked to do in this movie.

The movie doesn’t end on that note, though. It’s obviously not about hiding and letting your friends die. To say that that is what is being taught is disingenuous I think. If anything, it’d be easier to say that that was the lesson of Empire Strikes Back before Return of the Jedi came out.

I mean, really.

darthrush said:

NFBisms said:

Disney Ruined Star Wars said:

This was a quote I read from someone and I agree with it very much:

Sad that in the end people just throw their hands up and say "doesn’t work for you, works for me, oh well."
Good storytelling transcends subjective solipsism. The fact of the matter is that Luke’s actions in this film were not built up to in the previous films at all, and his character is a very severe departure from what he was. He also represents a bold new moral view of this universe, from the makers of this film, which is almost too sad to describe.
Art is an extension of worldview. It taps into what matters most to us. Lucas showed what matters most to him. And what was done to that worldview, and what worldview has replaced it, is chilly in the extreme. I certainly won’t be anxious to show this film to my children, when I have them. 1-6, sure. I do not agree with the values of this film, or the worldview it presents though. It seems cynical, poisonous and nihilistic, especially in light of what came before.
You may enjoy that if you like but there is no denying the shift that occurs. Anyone who denies that shift is very likely blind to the themes of these films.

I don’t want to be that guy, but I’m kind of tired of people overlooking my posts, and I do want to discuss this.

http://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1146676

I don’t believe TLJ is that cynical, and I liked it, and it makes me disappointed that there are seemingly only a few camps that we can exist in in terms of opinion.

I don’t think that the moral values of it are even really that different or worse from or than the OT when you think about it. I think everyone saying that the Jedi are actually evil or bad for the Galaxy because of their dogma are way off base with what the movie was trying to say.

I definitely agree with ya there. The Last Jedi’s messages and themes are pretty optimistic in my eyes.

Yeah. To say that TLJ’s theme is “let the past die” is wrong. Kylo Ren - the villain - said that. And his entire thing, of burning down all the old institutions and starting over, is just an extension of the theme that trying so hard to be the hero - to forge your own legends - is more selfish than it is anything else. Poe trying to do the same thing for the Resistance got how many people killed?

I know people crap on the Canto Bight parts and maybe rightfully so on a pacing and tonal front, but Finn and Rose were the only ones of the Resistance in the movie that accomplished anything that mattered beyond the immediate happenings in the end, and not because they were trying to pull off some heroic scheme against all odds. Just by doing what they felt was right in the moment, they inspired a new generation of force-sensitives, and that’s the hopeful note that we end on.

DrDre said:

NFBisms said:

I don’t agree with the reading that Obi-Wan and Yoda were just using Luke, but I don’t think TLJ ruins that which came before it. I know it’s kind of a paradox, but TLJ is both dependent on the the OT, while also trying to be its own thing. It takes the franchise in a different direction for sure, and you kind of have to separate it from the thematic heart of the originals.

It’s not an exact comparison, but think Logan relative to the original X-Men trilogy.

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That being said, TLJ isn’t really as gray or cynical as people are making it out to be. I don’t think it was saying the Jedi are evil.

I think it’s still a very traditional good vs evil story, it just places less faith in ideals alone and gives less credit to principles making a hero. It embraces the human condition and makes that which is in all of us - our ability to fail and move on - good enough to be heroes. In some ways, that’s more optimistic than saying we have to work super hard just to be good people. It’s not saying that the Jedi were super bad just because they were flawed, just that they don’t have a patent on being able to save the galaxy.

Sometimes trying too hard to be the hero can backfire, like with Poe, Finn, and Rose - and in the case of Luke, who held himself to such high expectations of heroism that he exiled himself after failure (which, thinking the galaxy is better off without you is still kind of an extension of some bullshit hero complex).

You don’t have to try to be the hero - as long as you do good, there’s one in there - and your failures, flaws, and screw ups won’t take that away as long as you get back up.

EDIT: honestly I wish people wouldn’t ignore my posts

Yes, but here’s the thing. If you want to separate it from the thematic heart of the originals, than do your own thing. Create your own story with your own characters, perhaps set in the same universe. Don’t take Lucas’ story and Lucas’ characters and alter that to suit your own agenda. It’s not just that TLJ creates its own reality, it tries to alter our perspective on the earlier films, and tells us to view them through the prism of Rian’s vision. Even worse it attempts to do this by taking the same challenges, and then provide a different solution, in the process invalidating the earlier solution. It doesn’t even say, different problems require different solutions. It takes the same problem of Empire versus rebels, and a Jedi pupil turned to the dark side, and tells us the solution to that problem is not what the OT presented us, it needs to be something else. In doing so it betrays the spirit of the originals in my view.

I don’t even think it’s the same situation/plot. Maybe you disagree with the decision to have Luke cut himself off from the galaxy in the first place, but that alone is enough to be a different story with different themes. Maybe TFA set up a trajectory like the one you describe, but even Ben’s First Order is now motivated by burning down all the old institutions to begin a new world order, as opposed to the OT Empire just wishing to maintain its hold on the galaxy. It looks the same on a superficial level, I guess, but I do think it is a “different problem that the old solution can’t fix.”

Obi-Wan and Yoda were hiding to watch over Luke until he was ready to begin his Jedi training. On the other hand, Old Luke at the start of TLJ has no intention of doing anything for the galaxy anymore. He doesn’t even know Han is dead or even what is happening in the galaxy. That it even needed his help.

I guess I just don’t think new additions to the franchise can ruin what came before it for me. The prequels didn’t ruin the original trilogy to me. And while I am welcoming of the ST’s new direction, I don’t even think it takes away from the OT. If anything, it’s just an expansion of it. Just another way to look at it. Doesn’t make what those movies have to say any less important or valid.

Disney Ruined Star Wars said:

This was a quote I read from someone and I agree with it very much:

Sad that in the end people just throw their hands up and say "doesn’t work for you, works for me, oh well."
Good storytelling transcends subjective solipsism. The fact of the matter is that Luke’s actions in this film were not built up to in the previous films at all, and his character is a very severe departure from what he was. He also represents a bold new moral view of this universe, from the makers of this film, which is almost too sad to describe.
Art is an extension of worldview. It taps into what matters most to us. Lucas showed what matters most to him. And what was done to that worldview, and what worldview has replaced it, is chilly in the extreme. I certainly won’t be anxious to show this film to my children, when I have them. 1-6, sure. I do not agree with the values of this film, or the worldview it presents though. It seems cynical, poisonous and nihilistic, especially in light of what came before.
You may enjoy that if you like but there is no denying the shift that occurs. Anyone who denies that shift is very likely blind to the themes of these films.

I don’t want to be that guy, but I’m kind of tired of people overlooking my posts, and I do want to discuss this.

http://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1146676

I don’t believe TLJ is that cynical, and I liked it, and it makes me disappointed that there are seemingly only a few camps that we can exist in in terms of opinion.

I don’t think that the moral values of it are even really that different or worse from or than the OT when you think about it. I think everyone saying that the Jedi are actually evil or bad for the Galaxy because of their dogma are way off base with what the movie was trying to say.

In the end, there’s a hero in all of us. You’re not defined by your failures. Trying to be the hero doesn’t make it so. Forging your own legends is more selfish than it is heroic. Sometimes just doing the right thing is enough to make a difference. All of these, I’d be fine with my children (lol if I had any) learning. I think there’s a lot here that is more important to learn than what the OT can teach, if anything.

I don’t agree with the reading that Obi-Wan and Yoda were just using Luke, but I don’t think TLJ ruins that which came before it. I know it’s kind of a paradox, but TLJ is both dependent on the the OT, while also trying to be its own thing. It takes the franchise in a different direction for sure, and you kind of have to separate it from the thematic heart of the originals.

It’s not an exact comparison, but think Logan relative to the original X-Men trilogy.

…

That being said, TLJ isn’t really as gray or cynical as people are making it out to be. I don’t think it was saying the Jedi are evil.

I think it’s still a very traditional good vs evil story, it just places less faith in ideals alone and gives less credit to principles making a hero. It embraces the human condition and makes that which is in all of us - our ability to fail and move on - good enough to be heroes. In some ways, that’s more optimistic than saying we have to work super hard just to be good people. It’s not saying that the Jedi were super bad just because they were flawed, just that they don’t have a patent on being able to save the galaxy.

Sometimes trying too hard to be the hero can backfire, like with Poe, Finn, and Rose - and in the case of Luke, who held himself to such high expectations of heroism that he exiled himself after failure (which, thinking the galaxy is better off without you is still kind of an extension of some bullshit hero complex).

You don’t have to try to be the hero - as long as you do good, there’s one in there - and your failures, flaws, and screw ups won’t take that away as long as you get back up.

EDIT: honestly I wish people wouldn’t ignore my posts

Surprisingly, I don’t think anything in TLJ really contradicts what we see in the OT; the events are just reframed in a new philosophical context and we take away a different reading out of them than before.

Ironically (b/c Disney), as less of a fairy tale.

Don’t watch it LOL

Wexter said:

NFBisms said:

Wexter said:

You could tell the story of the events after ROTJ and make it stand on its own. You could even improve upon the originals (a difficult task, but not an impossible one). This movie did introduce some new and potentially interesting themes: out with the old and in with the new, the Force is out there for everybody and not just the gifted, animal cruelty is bad. But goddammit make up your own story to convey those themes.

I think this is the point though. It’s one of the main themes of the movie, expectation of legend vs our own humanity. The expectation that Luke is the infallible hero and legend who will step up to fight the First Order, Poe’s assumption that being simply brave and courageous alone is heroic, the expectation that Ben can still turn back to the light, that Finn and Rose’s adventure will make a difference on good intentions alone, or that Rey is a somebody…

I think parroting sequences to subvert them is how Johnson is presenting that theme that the legends and stories we (or the characters in this movie) try to live up to aren’t plausible. TLJ more than other SW movies tries to speak to our humanity and fallibility. Ben won’t turn back to the light side, Poe isn’t really a hero, Rey is a nobody, and Luke at his core is just a man. It turns around to paint the OT as an idealistic fairy tale, and that’s what’s so different about it thematically.

I think that theme becomes muddled if you don’t have the familiar story beats set up to subvert later. Otherwise you rely on even more the obvious telegraphing or expositing of the theme like some lesson at the end of a school special. Rose discovering her “Resistance hero” attempting to escape at the beginning would be an example.

That is a valid point, but I would argue that by doing that, you’re not really continuing the story. By doing that you are making a meta commentary on its earlier parts.

To be fair, that’s exactly what I said in one of my earlier posts. That’s what makes TLJ different for me.

http://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1145320

Wexter said:

You could tell the story of the events after ROTJ and make it stand on its own. You could even improve upon the originals (a difficult task, but not an impossible one). This movie did introduce some new and potentially interesting themes: out with the old and in with the new, the Force is out there for everybody and not just the gifted, animal cruelty is bad. But goddammit make up your own story to convey those themes.

I think this is the point though. It’s one of the main themes of the movie, expectation of legend vs our own humanity. The expectation that Luke is the infallible hero and legend who will step up to fight the First Order, Poe’s assumption that being simply brave and courageous alone is heroic, the expectation that Ben can still turn back to the light, that Finn and Rose’s adventure will make a difference on good intentions alone, or that Rey is a somebody…

I think parroting sequences to subvert them is how Johnson is presenting that theme that the legends and stories we (or the characters in this movie) try to live up to aren’t plausible. TLJ more than other SW movies tries to speak to our humanity and fallibility. Ben won’t turn back to the light side, Poe isn’t really a hero, Rey is a nobody, and Luke at his core is just a man. It turns around to paint the OT as an idealistic fairy tale, and that’s what’s so different about it thematically.

I think that theme becomes muddled if you don’t have the familiar story beats set up to subvert later. Otherwise you rely on even more obvious telegraphing or expositing of the theme like some lesson at the end of a school special. Rose discovering her “Resistance hero” attempting to escape at the beginning would be an example.

TLJ is different to me not because of its plot choices but thematically. Its substance, outside of the superficial tropes and rearranged story beats, is incongruous with the rest of the franchise.

There are a bunch of core themes about good and evil, heroism, and redemption, that were essentially the heart guiding the past two trilogies. TLJ goes around to challenge those, and comments on the meta-narrative of the old stories rather than try to continue them.

It’s not different because of what happens in it. I mean, to an extent it makes unexpected choices, but it still borrows plot elements.

What makes it new is how it’s not beholden to what came before and isn’t particularly interested in setting up what comes after. It’s entirely character/theme driven, and the things it explores isn’t even trying to be classic SW.

I mean, I bought it.

But I was like five, so.

Most of us going “Luke really wouldn’t do that!” just plays into the whole theme of Luke as a legend and Luke as just a man. The idea that the legends had a clear hero’s journey in which Luke became and continued to become better is just that: a pretty story. As much as Luke learned, and as good of a person he is at his core, he’s still fallible. No one of us can say we hadn’t repeated our mistakes, or had moments we thought we were better than. There’s nothing more human than having one fleeting moment come and pass, changing everything, and you can never take it back. Luke had the galaxy on his shoulders, and he felt he failed it.

“I can’t be what she needs me to be!”

That theme connects to Poe/Finn’s plot too; their efforts to forge their own heroic legends, with the Dreadnought, with their “disable the tracker” plan, all ended up being for nothing or at a heavy cost in the end. Instead of looking back to destroy or run from what you hate, for example your past or your regrets (in the case of Luke and Kylo) or in fighting your enemy (Poe), you live with it, and move on to protect what you have left - the future.

Idk, the more I think about it, the more I like it.

TV’s Frink said:

By the way in reference to the crystal foxes, I thought they were not very convincing CGI. On watching the second time today I was thinking how to cut them out completely, unfortunately that doesn’t seem possible.

Apparently they were animatronics that were physically there, according to a John Boyega interview. So at least some of them weren’t CGI.

EDIT: not the interview I was referencing but there is a video about it

http://www.starwars.com/video/the-evolution-of-the-crystal-fox-star-wars-the-last-jedi

I think that scene would have benefited from more subtlety. Instead of a long shot of Leia flying through space back to the ship, maybe keep on close ups of her hand or her face, with the space particles visibly moving around her to indicate she was somehow moving through the debris. Poe and co’s reactions to it can stay.

But I don’t think we needed to see her Skywalking so overtly.

I’m cool with the concept too though. It’s kinda rad.

If anything, I admire the amount of balls this movie had.

There’s no way the decisions made for this movie happened with everyone involved being unaware as to how pissed off and confused its own devout fanbase would be. Especially since it’s apparently been finished for a while. I know people are like “you shouldn’t have to analyze something to like something” but I think the unexpected (to say the least) choices in the story are meant to draw your attention to why they’re being done in the first place. And from that thematic perspective, I think the movie just works exceptionally well.

I can’t say I agree with every plot choice made here, and that I wasn’t disappointed by certain things, but I definitely think it came together in a much more poignant way than I was expecting. It really doesn’t feel like a Star Wars movie tbh. But I’m feeling more positive about that than negative.

Wow, I’m really sorry guys, I’m just so slammed with school and girls that I forget about this a lot, or it’s just too much to deal with 100%. Especially when I don’t stand completely by the cut that is available, and I don’t have time to render a newer version. xP

I’ll try to respond to feedback and link requests, but I’m just one college kid, and I underestimated how interested people would be in this edit. I mean. It’s a lot. All in all, I’m glad you guys actually really like it, but I’m going to need to carve out some time at Thanksgiving to put a bow on it, and try to submit/get on .info.

On doing TPM and AotC, I have ideas, but I’m not sure if they would be drastically different from other edits of said films. I’m leaning towards RotS!TNCC being universal enough to fit with the original theatrical cuts…? But we’ll see.

There is no underwear in space…

SparkySywer said:

Skimming through this, I’m gonna watch the whole thing soon.

There are a few times where the audio… I guess the best way to describe is that it clips. They’re all around cuts, so my guess is that you just cut the video and left it like that. You should have the audio on each side of the cut fade into one another, it solves that problem.

Yeah, I faded most of the audio cuts, but there are a few where it’s the beginning of a new project file (I have to work in parts) and I wasn’t forward thinking enough to maybe start the file a little behind where I would want it to start in editing. That’s an easy fix and also fanediting 101.

There are also parts where crossfading the audio didn’t work though because there was a line or something just behind it, and it would have ran over. And it was noticeable on every channel. I might have just said “fuck it” for the night or week I was editing those specific spots and didn’t catch it when I came back and had forgotten about it. I should make notes.

Like other people have said, some added dialogue doesn’t fit right. I think it’s more that they’re running over existing dialogue, partially. Some lines don’t have this problem but still feel out of place, but idk why for them.

I agree with this. Any that stick out especially bad, though? And which ones work best?

Octorox said:

Overall, although I definitely have some nitpicks and things I’d do differently, I really like what you’ve done here. Anakin’s character comes across much more in keeping with The Clone Wars and there are some pretty original ideas. I’d say the new lines in spots work well more often than not. I did notice one pretty major technical glitch. At 1:26:51 there’s a cut and we can see a single frame of another shot before the cut (It’s a shot of Obi-Wan).

Oh my, thanks for that glitch.

And, I’m all for nitpicks and differences tbh. I am a fan of your own edits, and while I don’t expect to inspire anything in your RotS, I love discussing where our ideas for this movie would diverge.

Ah, alright. Thank you. I’ll see what I can do about that.

Are there any specific examples of an edit being jarring that isn’t related to adding/moving a line of audio? That would be appreciated.

The context for the lines are different now, though. xP

“No miswire jokes” is an exchange Obi Wan and Anakin have as they step off the elevator in my cut.

And “I was about to say that” is said after “Sith lords are our specialty.” Like Anakin was going to make the same joke as Obi-Wan.

Oh man, I hear that about the audio additions. It’s one the things I immediately regretted going a bit overboard on as soon as it finished rendering. I was constantly worried about the volume levels and a lot of the lines are just unnecessary especially when they aren’t blended with the source material too well. I will definitely tone that down when I get to the next version. The added dialogue where they’re coming on and off the elevator should probably go.

I feel I need to keep most in though, b/c I think without the audio additions Anakin came off more meek/mild mannered than I would have liked. It’s a balancing act I have yet to crack - or I did somewhere along the line before going overboard. Dave Filoni and Matt Lanter have always described Anakin as this cross between Luke and Han, and that’s generally what I’m going for.

Anyway if anyone else has gotten around to watching it, I’d really appreciate feedback. Technical or storywise.

Here’s the updated cutlist.

• New crawl.
• Replaced “Master” with “Obi-Wan.”
• Cut “The one crawling with vulture droids…”
• Cut “Oh” before “…I see it.”
• Added “General Skywalker, (we’re) ready to engage” from a clone pilot as they lock their whatever foils into position.
• Anakin gives orders now, too. Clones respond with “yes, sir!”
• Cut “Let them pass between us.” Obi-Wan seems less like he’s giving Anakin orders now, and Anakin having last word before the fighting makes him come off as more of a leader.
• Cut “I’m gonna go help him out” exchange.
• Cut “Missiles!”
• Added excited yelp from Anakin as missiles fly past.
• Cut visual of Anakin saying “They’re coming around.”
• Cut “No no no no no” from Obi-Wan to R4 before “Nothing too fancy.” Obi-Wan is less curmudgeon-y relative to Anakin.
• Cut “flying is for droids.”
• Cut “Buzz droids…”
• Cut Obi-Wan recapping mission.
• Cut “Hold your fire…” “I agree, bad idea…” exchange.
• Cut Obi Wan telling Anakin to go on without him.
• Cut “You’re going to get us both killed.”
• Added Obi Wan and Anakin laughing together as R2 dispatches the Buzz Droid.
• Cut “Well the shields are still up!” and R2’s anxious scream. Anakin shoots the shields down himself.
• Cut CGI Jump Obi-Wan, droid squealing, and trimmed scene length.
• Removed mentions of Count Dooku until his first appearance.
• Cut telling R2 to stay with the ships.
• Added “Never an elevator when you need one” -OB1. Moved “I agree” -ANK, as they walk backwards into the elevator deflecting the Destroyers’ shots.
• Added “roger, roger” deleted scene.
• Cut “Those are Jedi fighters, alright.”
• Cut “No, did you?”
• Cut Super Battle Droids bickering with one another at all. Deepened their voices for when they do talk. Which is like twice in the whole film.
• Cut “Always on the move.”
• Added “Good view from up there” from Anakin as he jumps down back into the elevator.
• Cut “No miswire jokes…”, “Did I say anything?” Anakin just immediately defends R2.
• Cut Super Battle Droids’ squealing and yelling for help as R2 flamethrows them.
• Added new exchange OB1 and ANK they step off elevator; “You worry too much, you know that?” “I’m not a protocol droid.”
• Added Anakin saying “Chancellor” alongside Obi-Wan.
• Cut “This time we will do it together” exchange.
• Cut “Get help.”
• Moved “I was about to say that” after Obi-Wan quips “Sith lords are our specialty.” Obi-Wan stole his joke.
• Cut Count Dooku jump off balcony.
• Cut “You won’t get away this time.”
• Cut “My powers have doubled…” exchange.
• Cut Anakin’s yelps and whine-screams of effort in the duel.
• Cut “I sense great fear in you.”
• Re-edit Dooku’s words to say “You have hate. You have anger. Use them.”
• Re-edit so Anakin just beheads Dooku without Palpatine’s encouragement.
• Cut “Yes, but he was an unarmed prisoner.”
• Cut “Remember what you told me about your mother…?”
• Cut “His fate will be the same as ours.”
• Added “Come on, buddy.” after Anakin tells R2 to bring an elevator down.
• Cut every time we cut back to Grevious on the bridge in the ship-tipping sequence.
• Cut “Easy” and “Oops” from Anakin in the shaft.
• Muted “Let’s see if we can find something in the hangar bay.” Barely swinging out of the shaft was such a ridiculous sequence, lamp-shading it with silent disbelief that they had just done that is a funny comedic beat.
• Cut “Patience?” from Obi Wan in the ray shields.
• Cut the SBD kicking R2 down onscreen.
• Cut battle droid presence on the bridge.
• Re-edit Grevious to say “General Skywalker…”
• Trimmed duels with Magna-guards.
• Moved “Time to abandon ship” to before Grevious breaks the window.
• Trimmed Grevious’ escape.
• Cut a lot of technobabble on the way down.
• Replaced firefighter’s line with “General Skywalker, come in.”
• Added Anakin chuckle after “Another happy landing.”
• Replaced Anakin’s “Are you coming master?” with a less formal “So we doing this or what?”
• Cut retelling of what happened straight into “Anakin, today you were the hero.”
• Re-edit so that Obi Wan cuts off Anakin before he can finish saying “Tenth time.”
• Added Anakin giggle.
• Cut Jar Jar.
• Added “General Skywalker” from Senator Organa.
• Replaced ominous score with more peaceful “Anakin’s Dream” in Anakin/Padme reunion.
• Re-edit reunion so that Anakin isn’t creepy and the relationship feels more healthy and loving, not a secret conspiracy.
• Moved Anakin and Obi Wan meeting at the war room here.
• Added a casual “Hey” and removed “I have no excuse” to/from Anakin’s dialogue.
• Cut “Is that bad?”
• Cut “…isn’t it?”
• Added “With all due respect, sir, the council is no mood for more constitutional amendments” from Anakin in between scenes.
• Cut “Me?” and “I’m overwhelmed.”
• Replaced blatant Palpatine manipulation with “You fought many battles the jedi council thought were lost. And you saved my life.”
• Added Plot to Destroy the Jedi Deleted Scene here.
• Cut “I sense a plot to destroy the Jedi” and “…Arrested?”
• Re-edit council meeting so that Obi Wan looks sympathetic to Anakin, shaking his head as a way to talk him down from further lashing out, not to scold, and looking away out of guilt for what the council is doing to him.
• Cut “This is outrageous! It’s unfair!” from Anakin in council meeting.
• Cut “young” from “young Skywalker.”
• Cut “…master” from “Forgive me, master.”
• Trimmed rest of meeting.
• Added A Stirring in the Senate Deleted Scene and trimmed it to be much faster.
• Restructured Obi Wan’s conversation with Anakin about why the council denied his master rank. Anakin doesn’t whine about it, and Obi Wan doesn’t lowkey insult Anakin for his friendship with Palpatine paying off in a way “he wanted.” Obi-Wan is straightforward, honest, and sympathetic.
• Cut “I don’t think the boy can handle it” from Windu.
• Added Anakin/Padme giggles and a concerned “What’s the matter?” from Anakin in the establishing shot of their apartment political discourse scene.
• Restructured scene so that Anakin and Padme both seem to think they’re on the same side until it’s clear that they aren’t, at which point Anakin stops the conversation without accusing her of being a Seperatist or vindictively saying he doesn’t believe in what she’s saying.
• Moved Grevious landing on Utapau here, trimming scene to remove mentions of Mustafar.
• Moved Anakin’s dream here.
• Added Anakin screaming “no, no, no” in the dream.
• Cut Anakin/Padme’s conversation about it. Transitions directly into Opera scene.
• Added KOTOR Pazaak music in the background of the city.
• Added “General Skywalker” from Mas Amedda as Anakin walks onto the balcony.
• Cut “We can finally catch that monster…”
• Cut “I would worry about the wisdom of the council if they didn’t…”
• Cut “They asked you to spy on me” exchange.
• Cut midichlorians and creating life.
• Trimmed council meeting in which they select Obi-Wan for Utapau.
• Added Anakin saying “I” as an endorsement of his friend.
• Added Seeds of Rebellion Deleted Scene
• Added Anakin’s Theme to Anakin and Obi-Wan’s goodbye.
• Cut Anakin calling Obi Wan, “master”, as well as all references to Obi-Wan having trained him and watching him grow up.
• Added Confronting the Chancellor Deleted Scene and trimmed to go by faster, as well as to remove Palpatine’s blatant manipulation attempt.
• Moved Anakin/Padme’s baby/death conversation here.
• Trimmed Obi-Wan’s Utapau adventure to tone down Boga, Grevious, and the lightsaber duel. No staredowns, and less exposition.
• Cut “Yes, master” after Windu tells Anakin to inform Palpatine about the Utapau campaign.
• Cut scene at “I sense a plot to destroy the jedi” line.
• Restructured Anakin informing Palps so that Anakin takes the reigns in the conversation. Before Palps can finish saying something manipulative, Anakin cuts him off to tell him he already feels badly about the council. He doesn’t need extra convincing. Anakin has had more agency like this throughout the cut. Palps’ manipulation comes off as a little more unnecessary b/c Anakin already agrees and gets the point most of the time. This way, when he does turn, it’s not because Palps has convinced him, but because Anakin is just using Palps. A much more sith relationship.
• Trimmed Palps’ revelation to make Anakin more aggressive and quicker to catch on. Also downplays Padme’s relevance to Palpatine. Anakin doesn’t “You’re the sith lord!”
• Cut the “masters” to Windu from Anakin when Anakin goes to see him.
• Cut “young” from “young Skywalker” and “There is much fear that clouds your judgement.”
• Moved “I must go, master” as a phrase that is cut off before Windu tells him to stay back.
• Added a few notes of Ahsoka’s theme here.
• Cut “Yes, master.”
• Cut Palpatine V.O in the silent brooding scene.
• Trimmed Palps vs Jedi duel to look less stupid.
• Re-edit Anakin’s turn to the dark side, so that Windu is just about to kill Palpatine before Anakin cuts his hand off. No devil vs angel moment, and Palpatine transforms into his Emperor self with the flashing of the lights.
• Cut “What have I done?” and anything to do with Padme.
• Cut Palps orgasming and “A powerful sith, you will become.”
• Cut “Thank you, my master.”
• Cut “…even your friend Obi Wan Kenobi…”
• Cut “I understand…”
• Cut “We will catch them off balance.”
• Cut “…to save Padme’s life.”
• Cut “What about the other Jedi…” exchange.
• Added an Anakin is distraught reaction shot before it transitions to the march on the temple.
• Cut implied youngling murder.
• Trimmed Order 66 scene overall.
• Added “General!” from 3PO to Anakin when he returns to Padme’s apartment.
• Cut “I came to check on you and the baby.”
• Cut “I will not betray the Republic.”
• Cut “We can only hope…many jedi have been killed.”
• Cut “Have faith my love, everything will be set right. The chancellor has given me…”
• Trimmed Yoda/Bail/Kenobi interaction on Tantive Whatever.
• Re-edit Mas Amedda message to be pre-recorded.
• Cut R2 popping out of fighter.
• Cut “Not even the younglings survived.”
• Cut shot of Anakin crying as he massacres the Seperatists.
• Replaced shot of Palpatine raising his arms to applause with just a long shot of the Hall.
• Cut extraneous explanations about clones being not so smart.
• Re-edited scene where Obi-Wan learns about Vader so that he has a much more emotional reaction.
• Cut “young” from “young Skywalker.”
• Re-edited Padme/Obi-Wan scene. Since Yoda doesn’t set up a mission for him and Obi-Wan to take out the Sith, it’s implied that both think they’re just going to hide now. Obi Wan goes to see Anakin/Padme on his own accord. He isn’t looking to kill Anakin.
• Cut Obi-Wan hiding in the bathroom
• Trimmed scene Anakin informing Palps that he’s finished off the Speratists, so Anakin sounds less subservient.
• Cut dialogue between Anakin and Padme in their Mustafar conversation. Less focus on Obi Wan, and none whatsoever on saving Padme. I cut out mentions of him bringing peace to the Republic as well, bc idk. His allegiance is to the Empire, and he says it later. Also it works with the idea that he isn’t proud enough of what he’s done to tell Padme about it and Padme’s horrified reaction comes from how he doesn’t deny the “terrible things”, and how his aspirations for both of them is just more galaxy- subjecting power and control. And that she can tell something is off quicker says more about their relationship.
• Cut Hayden’s “LIAR!” Anakin isn’t supposed to be this unhinged by this point in the cut, so I had to remove this. As well as “You will not take her from me!” These are actually some of Hayden’s better acting moments imo, but it really doesn’t fit with what I’m going for in terms of Darth Vader. Too whiny, if you will.
• “Don’t lecture me, Obi Wan!” removed. It’s kind of a reference to a mentor/mentee relationship, so I’ve gotten rid of it. Also “freedom”, “then you’re my enemy”, and “you will tryy…” removed. The first just isn’t true, and the other two are too villain-taunty.
• “Anakin, please. Come back to the light!” “I won’t abandon you to the dark side!” lines of dialogue.
• The duel on Mustafar and Yoda vs. Sidious has its most cheesy moments cuts.
• Cut post-duel Sidious scenes in Senate Hall.
• Cut “It’s over Anakin!”, “I have the high ground!” and “You underestimate my power!”
• Cut Anakin’s scream as he jumps on up.
• Cut “She seems to have lost the will to live.”
• Cut Vader scream and Padme’s dying words.

PM for a link to a 720p version, I guess. There are already like 3 audio things I want to go back and fix, but fuck it. 1080p is rendering.

There are actually edits that do what you suggest about leaving Anakin/Vader ambiguous or leaving Padme alive.

For me, this is just what I wanted to do for my edit. I wanted to make something that fits better within the new canon post-Disney, and Padme remained really dead in the new comics, and Leia is Bail’s adoptive daughter throughout Rebels and Rogue One. This edit is just a reinterpretation of the same in-canon events, I’m not trying to “fix” anything in canon aside from characterization and arguably the filmmaking in which it’s presented.

It’s still a decently radical edit, but I’m not changing what happened in broad strokes.

Here’s a rough preview of the ending, since a lot of people are asking about it: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0Bx-b_Drhy38rQWlfV3J0X19FMTQ/view?usp=sharing

I have to retime the duration of some shots, and the credits will fade in instead of hard cut, but that’s essentially what it’ll look like. The audiovisual quality is also only shit because I had to render it out quickly.

I do think Anakin should visibly become Vader by the end of the movie. Not a huge fan of leaving that up in the air, tbh. What’s the point of these movies if not to see that happen?

JEDIT: changed link