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Agreed.

Commissioned works wonderfully. They’re only giving permission and direct authorization for Resistance pilots to search their territory for clues to Luke’s location, as well as the tools to travel beyond their own territories for such clues. Anything more than that would be seen by several Senators as an act of war against the First Order, which is what they’re trying to avoid.

Basically, they’re playing the political game. The Republic can tell the First Order that they aren’t fighting against them because they gave supplies to the Resistance under the pretense that it was only to find Luke Skywalker. But Hux is wise enough to realize that the Republic is just using this as an excuse to support them.

The New Republic needs to be set up as fragile in order to justify why a militia such as the Resistance is necessary in the first place. They’ve put all their eggs in one basket basically, which is to protect the Hosnian system.

We also don’t want Senators to outright support the Resistance, as this would clash with Leia’s scene where she considers that most of them think she’s crazy and won’t listen to her. It’s better that they’ve only commissioned and helped with the mission to find Luke Skywalker, rather than supporting an all-out war with the First Order.

Yes, this is the final crawl:

NeverarGreat said:

EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

It is a time of despair.
Luke Skywalker, sworn
to rebuild the legendary
Jedi Order, has vanished.

With the Jedi now facing
extinction, agents of the
evil FIRST ORDER have
risen from the shadows
of an Imperial fortress
to claim supremacy over
all star systems beyond
the fragile New Republic.

Desperate for a hero to
help resolve this crisis,
the Senate has secretly
commissioned the pilots
of a brave RESISTANCE
to find the last Jedi and
restore the light of hope
to the darkening stars….

Do you think you’ll have more or less free time during the holiday season? lol

We are of the same mind it seems, SMan. I’m a huge fan of this edit, as well as CoD, but I just can’t stop myself from a purely extended version of ROTS. Plus, I actually slid the Yoda vs. Dooku duel into the end of my personal copy of this edit.

One day I’d definitely like to see a super-duper extended version of AotC with the Kenobi flashback in it. I’d mostly want to see if that scene allows for the rest of the Anakin and Obi-Wan scenes to make sense, as well as give purpose to Anakin’s rants about him to Padme. With Padme’s family scenes, the cringe from the Anakin and Padme’s love scenes might be subdued a little, too.

But I have a feeling this will probably remain my definitive version of Episode 2. Like you said, it’s just a fun film providing a great time now without all that baggage. You don’t really have to think about or justify any of the questionable content since it’s all been smoothly cut out.

It really depends on how radically he changes the story, for me at least. If he’s changed like 25-30% of it, I’d say there’s a good chance of it being super good. But if more than half the story is completely changed he’s gonna have a seriously difficult time using the available footage to weave that new narrative in a convincing way. My suspension of disbelief might be shattered if there’s just too much trying to be reconfigured.

Hal 9000 said:

The Force Awakens: Starlight
The Last Jedi: Reforged
The Rise Of Skywalker: Ascendant

You probably meant to say “Rekindled” because that edit you mentioned is a much more radical one.

szopman said:

smudger9 said:

Here is my edited flashback sequence. Lots of trimming here meaning I’ve got it down to 13mins with Huyang being the one that rescues her.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Y4YuxylIKTCKHZJPsW8_0rF1omHsw33T

I don’t wanna be a pain in the … but I think you shouldn’t have trimmed the moment when Anakin’s ghost goes back from “evil” to “good”. I saw you trimmed a bit the transition and I think it would be better if those few extra seconds stayed. it was a great little moment, the facial expressions of Hayden was perfect and in my opinion, for the millennials fans it had a huge emotional impact to see how his face changes from ROTS evil Anakin to the good Anakin Skywalker again. I know it may be silly, as we talk about 5-10 seconds, but for me it was something that I spot right away, I remember it was really a big deal for me when I watched this episode 😉

This is also the only thing that immediately stood out to me (I watched this last night and forgot to comment).

Ok, it’s perfect!

Now, nobody else criticize it or this will go on forever! Jk, lol.

I think I actually preferred “pilots”.

I’ve got no real complaints 😃

Would it be possible to nix just “Luke” from the final paragraph? It seems a little unnecessary since only one character in this film has the name Skywalker. And we gave his full name earlier.

Unable to end this crisis
without the heroic Jedi,
the Senate has secretly
authorized the pilots of
a brave RESISTANCE to
find Skywalker and kindle
the light of hope to the
darkening stars….

I agree with both of your thoughts. Since the New Republic doesn’t serve much of a purpose in this movie it’s best to leave their reference as brief as possible here.

It just looks like you messed up on your verb tenses. Here’s an example of how you can fix that:

Amidst this rising threat,
only a daring militia
stands in RESISTANCE,
its brave pilots deployed
across the galaxy to find
the last Jedi and restore
the light of hope to the
darkening stars….

NeverarGreat said:

Across this dark expanse,
only one valiant militia
stands in RESISTANCE,
its daring pilots secretly
entrusted by the Republic
to find the last Jedi and
restore the light of hope
to the darkening stars….

This is cool but I’d make the following modifications:

Across this dark expanse,
only a valiant militia
stands in RESISTANCE,
its daring pilots secretly
equipped by the Republic
to find the last Jedi and
restore the light of hope
to the darkening stars….

Well there aren’t many commas in the second paragraph and those in the first are using them in the same manner/way that the final paragraph would be. So, if nothing else, it would make the sentence structure more rhythmic and almost poetic.

I would change “of the New Republic” to “in the New Republic”. There’s a very subtle difference there. Using “of” seems to imply that they are the main leaders there, whereas “in” could be any of the leaders regardless of status.

jmarso1 said:

The one thing I wasn’t sure I liked was the use of the Star Forge and other KOTOR references, but I will admit that Keanu as Darth Revan is definitely the way to go, if you’re going to go that way.

Yup, this is pretty much exactly what made me drop all this.

The thing about the episodic Star Wars movies is that they never rely on characters or events that originate only from books, games, or certain shows. They need to be able to stand on their own. The closest we’ve ever got to this not being the case was Ahsoka’s voice in TROS. Notice how you don’t need to know who she is in order to understand what’s going on. A cheeky reference here or there is fine. But, if anything, it’s always these mainline movies that trample over the “lesser” canon.

Woah… that is… surprisingly accurate. Seems more like something that would be said today not all the way back in 1997.

A while back I made this thread about it:

https://originaltrilogy.com/topic/What-If-Star-Wars-The-Force-Awakens-Was-Awesome-Script-Conversion-Project/id/106592

I’ve since mostly abandoned the project because I didn’t like the direction they took in IX but it was fun nonetheless.

You’re not wrong. It just depends on how much we want to clearly set the stage in the crawl versus letting the audience figure these things out in the movie itself.

Perfect. I see nothing wrong with it. We can get the added context of some Senators being wary of action from the deleted scene with Leia.

😃

vranir said:

I think that “Resistance militia” just sounds a little clumsy. I’d prefer either term by itself, and the common use of “the Resistence” in the movie means that it’s the term we have to keep.

Yup

I think it might defeat the purpose of what we are trying to accomplish here. We want it to be clear that there are some in the Republic helping the Resistance secretly, but there are also still those in it who don’t support taking any action against the First Order with their fleet. Which is actually a reasonable approach seeing as how they aren’t infringing on Republic space. It’s like the isolationist argument during the world wars.

Hey, at least we’re still in agreement concerning the first two paragraphs 😉

You’re also right that it may be best to just clearly define the RESISTANCE as an organization and forgo the whole militia thing. I’d make the following minor changes to your final paragraph so the formatting is all neat:

With the Senate in endless
debate, leaders of the New
Republic have armed a brave
RESISTANCE in secret, whose
pilots have been tasked with
locating the last Jedi and
restoring a light of hope to
the darkening stars…

EDIT: “Locating” works better than “finding” only because the movie is dealing with a map location, not with pilots trying to land at his exact location. I also wanted to share something ChatGPT said about that comma before “and” - “a comma before the ‘and’ is not necessary. The sentence is correctly punctuated as is. In lists of three or more items, you’d typically use a comma before the “and” (known as the Oxford comma), but since there are only two tasks mentioned (“locating the last Jedi” and “restoring a light of hope to the darkening stars”), no comma is needed before “and.” The sentence flows well and clearly conveys its message.”