Grand Admiral Thrawn

Not sure if this is on the books… but since Kathy did say all the films moving forward will have crawls now, I think a future version of this should include one.

I’d hate to see the Vader/Krennic scene go. The only issue I could see with redubbing Vader is that he does have another line later on in the movie: “Prepare a boarding party”

losthead said:

I see it better now. I like that one, but I’d substitute “tasked” for “aided”. the extraneous canon makes it clear it’s Leia’s idea, but it can be inferred that some of the New Republic has begun to sympathize with her. This may also support that scene where Leia sends an agent to Hosnian (which, I forget if its in this edit, been a minute.)

That scene is in this edit. With Leia sending Kor Sella to the New Republic Senate to “insist that they take action against the First Order immediately.”

With the goal of the First Order being extremists trying to prevent the Jedi Order’s return, having the New Republic appear competent, and explaining that the Resistance is secret but somewhat supported, AND that the New Republic is using the Resistance to secretly fight their war without approval of the Senate… here’s the best I can think of:

EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

Luke Skywalker has vanished.
Emboldened by his absence,
the sinister FIRST ORDER,
an extremist remnant of the
fallen Empire, has proclaimed
that anyone who seeks to
restore the ancient ways of
the Jedi shall be destroyed.

Leaders of the NEW REPUBLIC,
striving to maintain the fragile
peace throughout the galaxy, have
secretly aided General Leia Organa
with organizing a covert RESISTANCE
to combat this emerging threat.

Leia has sent her most
daring pilots across the galaxy,
vowing to find the last Jedi and
preserve peace and justice
amongst the darkening stars…

"Look at what you’ve become… what could a rotting clone give me?” - Kylo

“Everything” - PalpsClone #66

• Kinda plays well with Palps: “Look what you have made” later in the movie.

For the opening:

• “You’re just a weak vessel… what could you give me?”

When focusing on Rey during their bond scene where they pass the lightsaber:

• “Rey, I’m here.”

When Rey “dies”, a somber:

• “No… Rey.”

When Rey leaves, happily:

• “Rey, it’s finished. Thank you.”

Yeah, I’d suggest not adding that plot-line back in.

Just to note, I don’t have the editing experience to complete this edit, but would love to see one of the awesome faneditors here take a project like this on!

Thought that I had that I didn’t want to lose…

• Add music from the Last Crusade train scene when Indy is on the train in the opening as a fun callback

Glitched for some reason. Feel free to delete this thread please!

I thought the movie wasn’t great, but wasn’t terrible either. However, I think that by trimming off some of the fat, this film can truly become a great Indy story that can stand alongside the trilogy.

Sorry KOTCS, you will always be Extra Indy, not Essential Indy, regardless of how much fun I have with that movie.

For starters:

• Color correction to remove the oversaturated and CGI-looking backgrounds in some scenes
• Clean up the CGI in the flashback sequence if possible, some shots look amazing, others look like they belong on the PS2
• De-age Indy’s voice in the intro if possible
• Clean up any “eh-looking” Old Indy CGI shots
• Trim some of Helena’s over-the-top banter
• Less Teddy, sorry kid, you seem like a fine young man but your character was one of the weaker points of the movie
• If possible, try to have Indy decide to go back to his own time instead of Helena forcing that choice. Have Indy pass out from being shot, then wake back up in NY?
• Replace Helena’s theme at the very end before the credits with another music piece more Indy/Marion/Raiders related.

I’d love to hear what other suggestions people have for this film!

Glitched, please delete.

See
https://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Indiana-Jones-and-the-Fanedit-of-Destiny/id/106143

Hal 9000 said:

Slight update. I just don’t feel that Luke’s “final lesson” line feels right when put into context, only because it doesn’t match his tone and cadence in the scene. I love the line itself, but it just doesn’t seem like it’ll work seamlessly.

What about something like this? If possible…

Luke Skywalker: Rey, some things are stronger than blood. Confronting fear is the destiny of a Jedi. Your destiny, and my final lesson. If you don’t face Palpatine, it will mean the end of the Jedi, and the war will be lost.

I’d add some reverb/echo to the first line and it will be sounding perfect 😃

Would love an invite

Definitely like the alternative take WAY more

Wow looks great! Loving the more natural looking colors. TPM always had a weird pink saturated look to it even when they tried to fix it on the BluRay and UHD

Hal 9000 said:

I wouldn’t want to imply that a single destroyer could destroy a whole planet. I like the (unspoken) idea that they might be able to do so as an entire fleet.

Maybe something like this:
"Their fleet’s superlaser cannons leave us massively outgunned.”

"Their fleet’s superlaser cannons could annihilate any world that resists.”

“Each ship has been modified with dreadnaught-tier laser cannons”

Maybe this?
“Their fleet could annihilate us with their superlaser cannons”

Does the alternative version also include the changes on the main version?

Trooper: What’s your operating number?

3PO: Wouldn’t you like to know, buckethead?

Trooper: Then why are you–what?"

The inspiration: https://youtu.be/7b4ULg131PM

So how about that Mandalorian show guys?

Is the plan for this edit that you can still watch the first four episodes of Boba as a miniseries, then go to your edit for the “complete” Season 3 of Mando?

This outline sounds great, and I cannot wait to see how it comes to fruition.

I’m too invested in Star Wars to just move on, but the inner kid in me that wants to watch everything as soon as it comes out is fading. Gone is the time of Star Wars being must watch spoiler-free content opening day for me… I’ll make some popcorn and throw it on eventually at some point.

Meh, the only way I see Star Wars becoming great again is for them to totally ditch the PT, OT and ST eras and make something original-ish. The Old Republic content is a no-brainer to put butts in seats but onward to the unwanted Rey movie we go…