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Would love a link to check this out!

TestingOutTheTest said:

sort of like Norm of the North: Keys to the Kingdom

This is the funniest thing I’ve ever read

sade1212 said:

Sure. Here’s a mockup with “You are nothing!” shifted a little later to alleviate the awkward silence, and here’s one with it shifted all the way to the end as DZ suggests. (Edit: maybe it’s a little quiet there, but you get the idea)

I really like the first one here, and I think that Rey’s line honestly sounds really good too.

sade1212 said:

The problem with leaving in “I am all the Sith!” is that Rey’s new “I’m a Jedi!” response has to specifically be to Sheevie’s “a SCAVENGER GIRL is no match for the power in me!” statement, right? (edit: just as the poster above said!) Perhaps swapping Palpatine’s lines would work. Here’s a crude mockup of that idea (forgive the unpolished audio and lack of ghosts).

I really like this version. I feel like removing the “all the sith” line makes palpatine’s “you cant beat me” speech a tad short. Also, it really helps soldifiy the “all the sith spirits live in me because of the essence transfer”

DZ-330 said:

So excited to have those last few beats of the TFA credits song before the TROS credits kick in. Praying this comes to fruition, it would be such a bittersweet ending and not just another “copy” and “paste” of the last trilogy’s ending!

Me too. I’ve always thought the weakest edit in V1 was the transition between the ending music and the credits. Adding in that motif really helps the transition and provides a more “triumphant” motif to end the saga on.

dgraham414 said:

Hal 9000 said:

• Removed Rey using the dagger as an impossible compass while surveying the wreckage of the second Death Star. Sith whispers have been added strategically to imply the dagger mystically guiding her to the Wayfinder✅

Okay so I’ve been pouring over this specific transition for a bit and it is so jumpy. Unlike TFA:R or TLJ:L there seem to be moments in this edit where cuts are made but the transition needed because of the deleted scene is jarring, even for first-time viewings. Another example of this is Finn showing up randomly during Rey and Poe’s argument when the Falcon Lands. It’s almost like people have gained the ability to teleport distances of about a foot or two, the in-scene continuity is lacking.

For this scene, if the horses are shown before Poe turns around and points his blaster it might justify his apparent teleportation better.
So the scene with the blade and whispers ->
then that quick shot of the horses coming over the hill (it is a close-up, which is awkward, but it would still work) ->
Then Poe turning and pointing his blaster, then the scene could continue from there.

As for the lightspeed skip conversation, I know we discussed this before, but making that cut removes the concept of lightspeed skipping yet makes that scene suffer by teleporting Finn which just seems like an edit for edits sake. As is it is just too obvious that a scene was cut introducing Finn into the conversation.

EDIT: Looking at the Falcon landing scene again Poe teleports a couple of feet in front of Rey also when Finn shows up (since we have that shot of BB8 watching them argue.)

To me, these are the only issues I’ve had with the current work print

Watching v2 of the workprint now.

I’m not a huge fan of cuttig Finn’s lines when the Falcon gets back to base, he just kind of abruptly appears between Poe and Rey while they’re arguing. Plus, I actually like the sassy “always” he says about Poe.

This is a tad off topic, but I think a way to fix some of the pacing the first act is to separate Rey and Kylo’s visions (like Dominic is planning on doing). The quick cut to Kylo is where I feel the most whiplash with this movie. The rest of the edit is pretty damn great though

Hey HAL, I’m having issues with playing the workprint. Do I need a new link PMed to me even with a link to your old stuff?

poppasketti said:

Here’s an alt for the end celebration including Coruscant in place of Endor!

Coruscant End Celebration
pw: fanedit

The incredible backplate was made by jonh, and I comped in the ships and added a bit of texture.

Oh boy its all coming together!

JakeRyan17 said:
The logic of the scene has always bothered me. Lando is the choice to go with Luke to track down a Sith assassin? And when Luke gives up to go train the next generation of Jedi, Lando just stays there? For ~30 years? Not continuing to track down the assassin, nor continuing his search for his daughter… just decides to chill the the desert, and wait 30 of the 42 years for the festival?

So many Story and logic issues.

I never once thought Lando had just stayed on Pasaana for 30 years. I assumed he was either back for the festival or some reason

Hal 9000 said:

Is there a consensus about whether to move the first Falcon sequence to between “I’ll earn your brother’s saber” and “the Falcon’s back”?

I like moving those scenes around. It just seems to flow better, but that might just be me.

Dendros said:

Can you cut out the part where Rey is levitating with rocks orbiting her? It would do wonders for never seeing her levitate again and would make her seem less overpowered

I don’t think that’s necessary. She’s never in a situation later where levitating would get her out of a jam. Plus, we do kinda see her levitate when she does all those Jedi flips.

I feel like the light speed skipping cuts away to quickly. It needs to linger on the trail the Falcon leaves for a second or two before wiping.

Panakin said:
TCJ is a terrible movie for any PT & OT character

Go back to STC, dude. We’re having a good time here.

Hal 9000 said:

It’s weird to feel a little sad to see how… close to being sort of complete the cutlist is.

I’ll be real with you, it’s gonna be hard when this thing is finished.

If only there was a way to do a big watch party premiere when it’s done. To send the HAL9000 saga out with a bang!

JakeRyan17 said:

I was re-going through my TFA edit, and I’m sure you could use a lot of those cockpit shots above Starkiller Base to help lengthen the despair before the fleet arrives.

That’s a good idea. If Hal’s edit of TFA left out some cockpit shots, they’d probably be perfect to repurpose.

Hal 9000 said:

Here’s a couple thoughts based on this wonderful clip LILLIAN02330 posted earlier: https://vimeo.com/421944019

Picture this:

Crawl

Pan down to TIEs approaching a destroyer (with some tiny specks beneath, subtly moving toward the planet

Aerial shot of a patterned lava flow, with a few troop carriers flying by, either above camera or very closeby underneath, overtaking the camera (could use the forest shot instead)

Troop carriers land, and troops emerge, heading into battle

Distant shot of a lava eruption with trees in the foreground

Kylo Ren is seen on a rampage, and scene goes on from there

That’s pretty awesome. I would only suggest flipping the shots on the troops landing. When they land they’re moving from right to left, but then once Kylo is introduced they’re moving from left to right. It breaks the 180 degree rule and is visually a little confusing. Other than that it looks awesome.

Movies Remastered said:

I’ve just spent the morning figuring it out! If you take the whoosh sound of the final lightspeed skip before the transition and lay it over the clip just after the wall burst, it fits perfectly for a seamless transition with sound and cut just before the TIE comes into frame. I hope that helps you fix the sound issue. I think it works great.

That sounds like it would work well

What’s the audio track used in this scene. Cus i feel like it fades out to suddenly

poppasketti said:

Also, here’s the falcon going into hyperspace with the ties removed:

Falcon Hyperspace - Ties Removed
pw: fanedit

Skenera did a great job extending the shot, but now the the ties are gone you may not need that extra time.

That’s pretty great! Now it can look like the falcon is on fire and dinged up from crashing through the wall

So are you suggesting not moving the chess scene to the end Hal?

kewlfish said:
I feel like it is still better to not have vision scene or the TLJ bridge as I think that Kylo’s face reveal is very powerful in the original shot as our first look at him in this movie.

Dude I totally agree. It’s such an “establishing” looking shot of his face.

Other than that, the Battlefront II footage is a little too clean and stands out a little bit, but not bad by any means. This also incorporates poppasketti’s tie footage.

I would maybe use less of the BF2 footage. Maybe cut to Kylo right before the shot of the jet troopers, cus that’s where I feel it starts looking “video gamey”

jarbear said:

Here is an idea to use both the Helmet scene and the beginning but ALSO use Dominic’s new and improved Kylo vision that leads the reforging of the helmet.

To focus more on Dominc’s vision part, instead of using the helmet scene, what if “we” were to use the deleted scene of Kylo on the bridge form TLJ

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n9SRnq1FiMw

This is shown whenever after his meet up with palps. Then que in Kylo’s vision/flash backs with dialogue that Dominic did and then cut to the helmet being reforged.

Could that work?

That might work. The only issue I have with it is that I like that Kylo has a vision about rebuilding his mask after touching Vader’s mask.

Kylo looking out of the star destroyer does give the impression that he’s upset and contemplating his actions, which could lead into why he’s rebuilding his mask.

Hal 9000 said:

Here’s the current state of the crawl. The first sentence is temporary and needs something more inspired. And the second paragraph needs another clause. Not sure if “rumored” could be replaced with something like “stashed.”

Maybe say “hidden imperial fleet” or “forgotten imperial fleet”

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