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#1402772
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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Okay here’s my thoughts on the two episodes below. Other than the things mentioned, I didn’t notice anything that felt out of place. However, I haven’t seen these episodes in a long time, so I probably don’t notice what was cut/trimmed or added.

Thoughts about THE NEW PADAWAN:

  • The Maul cold open works in terms of adding Maul’s presence early on, but as has been mentioned above, I think it would work better as a end of season teaser. That way Death Watch has already been introduced and people know that nothing good will come of them finding Maul.
  • 7:56-8:00, the audio transition between Yularen and Master Yoda’s communication and the following battle has a drop in volume, making it feel like something is missing until the battle comes in at full volume. I think if the blaster fire faded in a couple seconds sooner, and the music increased more gradually, like a steep curve, towards the trumpet fanfare at 8:00, the transition would feel better. Just a thought.
  • The exchange with Bail at the end still felt unnatural to me, but I think the idea is sound. The lighting is what seemed off to me most; the shots that focus on Bail and Anakin shaking his head seem like they’re night shots instead of day shots. I’m not sure if that is fixable at all, but if the lighting was similar, I think it would feel more natural.

Thoughts about CLOAK OF DARKNESS

  • In the intro text, I was momentarily confused with the line “He has delivered her to master LUMINARA UNDULI, to help her…” I read it initially as “Ahsoka would master some skill”, instead of her being delivered/tasked to help Master Luminara Unduli. I think capitalizing Master would alleviate this or adding the word Jedi before master, but if you’re going for a stylistic element like you are with the word “padawan”, I can understand that.
  • I also don’t love the idea that Anakin simply pawns her off right away. I think if you worded it like “Seeking to teach his new padawan patience, he tasks her with helping Master LUMINARA UNDULI” or something like that. That way it would convey the idea that Anakin just wants his padawan to learn from different perspectives. But if that isn’t what you’re going for no worries. Just an opinion!

Overall, I really liked the episodes and how they felt as parts of the larger TCW: Refocused series. The intro and outro music is phenomenal, and I can’t wait to watch Malevolence later tonight!

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#1399838
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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So after watching The Death Watch episode, there were a couple of possible improvement points I noticed. In general, I think the episode works well! The pacing is faster and the majority of the cuts were natural, so much so that I had trouble discerning where they were. I love the intro music, and the outro music also is nice (if it were a touch less melancholy I think it would be perfect). So a few nitpicks (apologies if they’ve been said before):

  • the music over the intro and the end credits is noticeably louder than the rest of the episode audio
  • An establishing planet shot might help the transition between the episode title and the opening scene
  • at 14:55, Obi-Wan says “Satine, look out!” or something to that effect. To me Obi-Wan’s line feels a hair early, this might be fixed if it was a hair later?
  • After Obi-Wan and Satine return from Concordia there’s little to no explanation why they’re getting on a ship. Unfortunately, this is how the original first episode ended, and the voice over for the next one explained that Satine was going to the Senate? So I’m not sure how that one would be fixed, might just have to infer based on later scenes.
  • I felt like the spider droids could have used a touch more suspense, maybe include the short shot of the spider droid climbing out of the crate, or something to that effect?

Take all of the above with a grain of salt though! I was much more entertained by your cut than the original episodes, and agreed with the excess you cut. Nice work!

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#1396446
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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I’m probably a little late on suggestions, but here’s some thoughts! On my first watch I felt the intro music was a little too mellow. Music that falls tonally somewhere between the standard Clone Wars intro music and what you used in the demo clip would feel a bit better in my eyes (or ears).

The sequence of intro text, Clone Wars title, then episode title works well, but I would be interested to see how different ordering feels, especially if you are doing a cold open format. The outro music and credits with the concept art is perfect. I wouldn’t change that at all. Great job!

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#1395211
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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I think the ordering you presented is brilliant, especially with the balancing of character development and the thought you’ve given to Ahsoka’s arcs and how each one shows different aspects of her character. I do think the idea that certain Domino Squad arcs could be used as flashbacks could work well, provided the pacing still works. Really excited about all the ordering and where things lie currently!

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#1392816
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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I would be interested how it would feel to swap Grievous with Trench at the very least on a concept scale. Since Grievous wouldn’t be in the episode, it adds menace and keeps him in the shadows, which would emphasize his later appearances more. With Grievous and Dooku, I think less screen time for them in general heightens tension and makes them feel less fallible or beatable.

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#1390419
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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EddieDean said:

For the closing, I’m going to redo the credits over imagery from each episode’s episode gallery / BTS gallery on StarWars.com. This’ll be much more like Mandalorian, which has those lovely bits of art.

Here's an example

This will be over particularly dark, ponderous music - I want us to take a beat after each episode and really digest it. I think the best track for this might be the prelude to Order 66 music which slowly builds throughout the third episode of the final arc. This would serve us nicely because it’s dark and ominous - welcome since we know the inevitable conclusion of the Clone Wars and mentally it draws us toward that end…

I’m a big big fan of this, music is the way I connect to tv shows and movies, especially Star Wars. Having that subtle change in the intro and outro for each episode would help to maintain the darker atmosphere provided by the inevitability of ROTS and Order 66. I don’t know if you’re asking for suggestions on tracks to use, but there were a couple I found that might fit! They sound similar to the one you posted in terms of something more low key and emotional:

https://youtu.be/I4wlUYUtuR8 (around 43 seconds)

https://youtu.be/JsSHw6nJ2pU

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#1389098
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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EddieDean said:

CLONE WARS WEDNESDAYS?

One other thing I’ve been thinking is that, once I’ve properly got going with this, I can probably output at least one edit a week (since I have a good amount of available time, and some episodes won’t require much at all, and some will be untouched [but placed in a recommended order] so I can kind of queue them up) - what do you all think about doing ‘Clone Wars Wednesdays’ where I’ll release one every Wednesday? That way we can all watch and feedback, and it’s both a small weekly commitment where feedback can be given in a focused way, plus a simulated weekly release cycle so helps us to judge the pacing of the show as a whole? It’d help me pace myself too, and keep the momentum up.

I’m a big fan of this idea, it reminds me of when new episodes would come out weekly. Also, it would build that same excitement. In terms of your categorizations, I don’t have any objections so far; they all seem reasonable and necessary to trim the bits that aren’t as important.

*Edit
I just caught up on the rest of the posts, and I agree with Maul being the persistent underlying threat throughout the series. The fact that the end of the series climaxes with Maul and Ahsoka supports that the series’ main focus is on those two more than others. Just my opinion. I also love the idea of a cold open for episodes as well.

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#1387271
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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EddieDean said:

One other thing I might end up doing is just adding a couple of tags to the episodes, for people who want to maybe watch a more trimmed version of the show. I’d probably use two main tags: VITAL would represent something unskippable if you want context outside of TCW, and SKIPPABLE would represent those retained but just not necessary for any broader context, and not particularly good. Those without either of those tags would be optional depending on how much you wanted to commit to. A final tag - GREAT - might represent those episodes which aren’t vital to the wider SW story or universe, but which are still just danged good.

I’m super interested in this idea, that way it’s easy for people to watch who just want the essential stuff or if people want to experience the show in a format with little filler. This looks like a great idea, best of luck to you! I’m excited to see how this turns out!

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#1384981
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The Last Jedi: Rekindled (Released)
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Poppasketti, I watched your edit and I was blown away with how much the little tweaks you made changed the film to lead up to TROS! I think one of my favorite edits you made was cutting out the Leia space scene, with it just cutting to her being on the stretcher. That worked so well, it felt like that what the movie should have been like. The Palpatine laugh in the flashback with Ben and Luke was seamless as well. I could go on and on, but all in all, really impressed, nice work!