Palindromic Gas said:
I’ve just finished your edit and many of your cuts are seamless, especially when Lando and Wedge destroying the reactor was intercut with the Death Star preparing to fire and it was funny watching the ewoks be useless seeing the Empire just massacre them. There was one rough transition, which was the trimmed shot of Lando lowering his mask which suddenly cut to the exterior of Jabba’s Palace. This could be fixed by showing Chewie be led to his then cut to the outside of the Palace. Also since you cut LApti Nek it does create a plot hole for later when Threepio tries to warn Luke, even though he didn’t witness Jabba’s servant fall down the pit. So you could either somehow include the servant be killed after the Harmonica Turtle’s song, remove Threepio’s warning to Luke or unfortunately reinstate Lapti Nek.
All good suggestions. I’ll see what I can do with these two things.
Since this is Version 1.0 of the edit, I’ll suggest some further changes for Version 2.0:
- Remove Boush’s subtitle “I want fifty thousand. No less.” Since Threepio translates it straight after. Similar to how Q2 had done it.
This will now be implemented in Version 2.0.
- Trim Luke and Han’s dialogue scene on the skiff so it ends on Han saying “you’re going to die here, you know”
As long as there is no objection, I also like this idea for Version 2.0.
- Remove Han saying “3PO, tell that slimey piece of worm ridden filth” because it is strange for Han to say that, so instead he says “He’ll get no pleasure from us.”
I’ll keep this as a pending change. I personally am fine with Hans dialogue there but am willing to cut it if more people also don’t like this line.
- Remove the burp from the Sarlacc
If you mean the burp after Boba dies then I can see if this works. I’ll add it to my pending changes.
- During the shuttle scene where the clearance codes are being transmitted, you can remove some of Han’s dialogue “It’ll work… it’ll work”, “Now don’t get jittery Luke…” and “I told you it was going to work…”, So it focuses on Luke and Vader sensing each other. It can edited like:
Han: Transmission commencing
Leia: Now we’ll find out if that code is worth the price we’ve paid
Luke: Vader’s on the ship
CUT to Vader question Piett
Luke: I’m endangering the mission, I shouldn’t have come.
Then the scene could play out as normal minus Han’s “I told you it was going to work, no problem.”
I actually played with this scene and did cut one of Hans lines but the other ones I felt were too hard to remove without abrupt audio cuts. I’ll give this a try again.
- Trim everyone just standing around the meat, so it could be like Chewie goes straight for it.
I’ll test this out. Sounds like a good idea to me.
- Remove Leia’s “I know. Somehow I’ve always known” because her being speechless is a better reaction
This one is tough because I actually really like this line. It kind of calls back to her feeling Luke’s cry for help at the end of Empire Strikes Back. It’s just the kiss that makes that awkward but I’m fine with the line. I’d like to see if more people want this change. If so, then I will implement it.
- When Threepio calls out to the stormtroopers, remove the imperial officer saying “bring those two over here” since they only saw Threepio.
Good call. This will be implemented in Version 2.0.
- When the death star first fires remove Lando saying “That blast came from the Death Star. That thing’s operational” since its unnecessary.
I’m fine with it. His delivery is really charismatic and I have never had a problem with it but if more people want this gone, then I will cut it.
- Finally, you can release a separate version with the Yub Nub ending instead of the Victory Celebration ending.
This will be done for Version 2.0 also.
