I just watched your edit of RotJ and thought I'd offer some feedback:
The cuts to Threepio and Bib Fortuna's exchange are quite effective. Downplaying the comedy is definitely a good idea considering the seriousness of the situation.
The new Jabba dialogue is mostly great I think. I particularly liked "Entertain me." which felt very appropriate.
Changing there will be no bargain to there will be no deal feels unnecessary to me. Since Luke specifically states he wishes to bargain for Solo's life, Jabba repeating that terminology feels more consistent to me.
I think the subtitle "Solo!..." is a little too abrupt. I realize that Jabba's actual dialogue emphasizes the name Solo and I'm definitely on board with reflecting that in the subtitles, but I think I'd have the subtitles read as foillows:
- I will not give up my favourite decoration. (note no "...")
- Captain Solo! A reminder that you never cross a Hutt.
The intricacies of Huttese grammar make it entirely possible that the captain title is what comes after the name Solo in Jabba's speech. I'd also extend the length of time that subtitle is on screen for as I find it leaves the screen a little too early.
The cut to the Jedi Rocks intro before Boush appears feels jarring. Mostly it's the music itself. Jedi Rocks is so out of place in the Star Wars universe it shouldn't be included in any capacity. Lapti Nek fits the feel of the Palace and of Star Wars considerably more. Alas a high quality source on Lapti Nek isn't available to us, so I understand. I agree with the removal of the droid torture room sequence, but I think I would have kept Artoo and Threepio being taken away from the main audience chamber.
The first rancor scene. I'm of two minds on this. On the one hand your cut is effective and quickens the pace of the sequence. I understand and agree with your reasoning as well, that there's no need to telegraph Luke's danger. On the other hand, having watched the Jabba's palace sequence with that scene removed, I don't find that the surprise of Luke falling into the Rancor pit is as effective as the tension caused by leaving the original scene in and not knowing what's down there.
I notice that your list mentioned removing the Rancor scene entirely but that that hasn't happened. There are a number of edits in the sequence though, I presume to speed up the pace. Unfortunately I find those edits noticable on a musical level and I really don't think they speed up the pace of the scene enough to be worthwhile cuts. I was pleased with the removal of the Rancor keeper's blubbering however, that worked well.
Boush, once again I'm not a fan of the word "deal". Something about it doesn't feel formal enough for Jabba's palace. I would replace it with "Agreed". Minor point and one based on my own personal preference as opposed to any actual logic.
I'm definitely on board with the removal of Solo's goofy lines and his reunion with chewbacca.
I understand removing Boba Fett from the Sarlaac battle, but the editing as it stands now is a little jumpy in that section because of it. Skipping to Leia, then back to the skiff and then almost immediately back to Leia is jarring. I'd have stayed with Leia on the first edit, followed her through killing Jabba and then rejoined Luke and the gang outside, Luke now already on the second Skiff. We as an audience can assume he got on to that skiff while our attention was elsewhere.
I understand wanting to remove as much Ewok silliness as possible, but cutting the speederbike sequence leads to a really unnatural jump cut. Han tells Threepio to stay put and then we're instantly down by the bunker and Han is luring the guard. The needs to be some manner of wipe there otherwise there's no passage of time and it ends up looking like the film has jumped a scene. Perhaps a trimmed down ewok speederbike chase would satisfy the desire to remove ewok campiness while also providing enough screentime to get Solo down to the bunker.
Your edits to the Battle of Endor. Perfect. There's so much more urgency to the battle now, and the removal of so much Ewok capering really makes a huge difference.
The finale, I like the use of the end credit music in place of the celebration music, it really works nicely. That said, I've never been a fan of the celebrations across the galaxy sequence. Especially on Coruscant. That was the seat of imperial power, these would not be the people celebrating the fall of the Empire. Not to mention the fact that the Empire isn't destroyed, the government remains. It's going to take years for the Rebellion to truly liberate the galaxy. It just seems to me that the last placed that would be celebrating the Rebel victory would be Coruscant.
Finally, and this has nothing to do with the edit, but man do I hate PAL speed up. Makes it sound like the Star Wars universe has a lot of helium in the atmosphere. Ugh.
Great Edit, lots of really good stuff!