Octorox

DominicCobb said:

Now that I think of it it would be nice if we could figure out some solution(s) to Mustafar. I do have a couple ideas in mind.

I’ve seen some other people post tests were they added more establishing shots culled from other sources. I think that’s probably your best bet. There is a canon reason why Mustafar looks the way it does in this movie but for someone only tuned into the films it’s a bit confusing.

Thanks! I’m waiting on a new crawl and credits additions from InitAbsolute and then I should be able to release V2. Would appreciate feedback on the changes!

idir_hh said:

Tammer5 said:

So I am going to write this down one more time… It got over looked probably because I rarely offer any suggestions, but I thought this idea of mine was pretty solid regarding moving the chess scene.

The idea of moving the chess scene is awesome and its wonderfully executed! I do have an idea… I think it would be great if there is a way to add a clip with R2 and 3PO watching the game. They are the only constant in the saga so they should be there in the end with their friends. Below is a scene from AOTC where 3PO tells R2, “for a mechanic you do a excessive amount of thinking.” There is enough dialog from 3PO to make him say, “For a Wookie you do a excessive amount of thinking.” Then you can do a cut to R2 doing a silly chirping noise like the link below. In that way they’re all together and all four of them are giving Chewie a hard time. Just like a bunch of siblings.

My thoughts are you see Chewie thinking then it cuts to 3PO and he says his line, then cut to R2 making a silly chirp noise basically agreeing with 3PO, then we cut to Poe and Fin, then the finally scene with Rey and BB-8 Thoughts?

C3PO:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I_Tl5FGBbB8&list=PLlrQRD4Rfv_CVrEGTWM3r9EZa3jYUXs0N&index=2

R2D:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EBzQQkcZZOE&list=PLs_YojqvcFd-98ggemDm1ktsVGcjxdDBW&index=9

I saw your post and I though it was neat idea, anything that adds more closure to the ending is welcome in my book! Just needs someone with the chops to implement it.

I like this idea. I think the trick would be to get footage of R2 and 3PO that works for the scene. I have a feeling that footage from A New Hope wouldn’t blend very well.

I don’t have a problem with the “All the Jedi” line, but I would have preferred if she said “And I’m no one”. The other alternatives don’t really do anything for me.

I’m split on the Jango Clone thing. After seeing all how they were used and abused in Clone Wars I kind of don’t want to put them through any more suffering lol

Please don’t touch D-O or Babu Frik. They are my children.

I kind of like D0’s current speech patterns. I interpret as him having a number of canned sentences he can say, kind of like when you’re talking to a bot on the phone.

EddieDean said:

Yeah, Octo, I tried to stay within I guess ‘feasible+’. Hux being a good example, maybe we go as far as masking him into a few scenes, to preserve him that much longer before Pryde kills him? Seems like a lot of effort for only a little reward, but I figured that’s about the realm of possibility.

Yeah, I get that. I just think it’s an example of something that while it can technically be done with a lot of work, it won’t really feel natural without additional footage. Same with adding more Rose.

I filled this out, and based my answers both on what I’d like to see and what I think is achievable given the footage we have. For example, I don’t like how they handled Hux but I’m not sure what else we can do with it given what we have to work with.

Hal 9000 said:

Good revision. I feel the need to try to modify the clause about the rising tide of dissidence, maybe an analogy that doesn’t seem at odds with that of a spark. Not sure about ‘fabled’ either. I guess it’s time to bust out a thesaurus and get into the weeds.

To quell the flames of dissent? lol.

DominicCobb said:

While I don’t disagree with your take on “Just Rey,” I don’t agree with how you feel about “Rey Skywalker.” The beginning of the film isn’t just her being ashamed of who she is, she’s thinking she’s inadequate. She doesn’t deserve the saber. To me, her taking the Skywalker name is her saying “I am good enough to be a Skywalker, I’m not just Rey, I’m more than that.” It’s a similar sort of growth I think.

That’s fair. I think it’s what the movie was going for but it didn’t land for me. I definitely felt something was off in the theater but my thoughts on this weren’t really crystallized until I watched this Just Write video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BD5mLw0A8vI&t=7m25s
The whole thing is great but I just linked to the part I feel is relevant here.

RogueLeader said:

What a great idea! Now only if Rose could be there. 😭

Unfortunately, without deleted scenes, it’s pretty much impossible to fix the fact that Rose gets royally shafted in this film 😦.

Slight tweaks that I would make:

Episode IX
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER

Across the galaxy, the spark of hope lives on. To quell the rising tide of dissent, the tyrannical First Order has silenced communication between neighboring systems.

As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training under the ailing General Leia Organa, their fledging Resistance gathers intel to forge a path to freedom.

Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar in search of a fabled hidden Imperial Fleet that would allow him to destroy any threat to his power…

snooker said:

https://streamable.com/cekikp

This edit helps cement the idea that these people are a family now, instead of Rey being completely alone on a desert planet at the end. Her friends are there waiting for her : )

It also helps explain why BB-8 is there, he’s just a curious little friend : )

Huh, I would have never thought to do this but I actually really like it. I wish we could see Rey walking past in the background behind Chewie though, just to sell that they’re in the same location. It’s not strictly speaking neccesary though, and I think it works quite well as is.

Hal 9000 said:

Octorox said:

Hal 9000 said:

DominicCobb said:

Anakin Starkiller said:

DominicCobb said:

Here’s a rough idea for changing the music in the final scene:
https://vimeo.com/415655381

As nice as this is, I wouldn’t end the Saga on character centric theme. The Force Theme, as overused as it is, is perfect because it’s universal within the Saga.

I disagree, I see it as important for the forward-looking nature of the ending. We’re used to the force theme with the binary sunset, but now it’s Rey’s turn.

+1. It’s the perfect end theme to juxtapose with Rey Skywalker.

Just Rey is fine. 😉

(Seriously if this annoys you I’ll stop talking about it in your thread. I just think a Rey nobody edit isn’t really a Rey nobody edit if she’s still Rey Skywalker in the end.)

It doesn’t bother me. But I don’t see how that’s a punchy line to end on if her identity wasn’t an issue throughout the movie. I just don’t see myself going that route, but I’m know for conservative edits.

It’s not her identity that’s the issue, it’s her own acceptance of that identity. Earlier in the film, there’s a scene where an alien child asks her what her family name is and she says her name is “just Rey” in a sort of sheepish, slightly forlorn tone. At the end of the last film, she came to the realization that she’s a “nobody from nowhere” but we can see in this scene that she’s still not quite comfortable with that newfound knowledge. It’s still a point of embrassment rather than pride. By taking it as a badge of honor at the end of the movie, she’s fully actualized and completed her arc, whereas taking the Skywalker name feels to me like it’s a step backward. It’s her clinging to an idealized version of the Skywalker legend as she did in the first half of the Last Jedi. She needs to be comfortable being “Just Rey” before she can be “Rey Skywalker”.

These are all just my opinions of course, but I cared a lot about this character and was disappointed with the direction they took in tieing her identity to other people, whether it’s the Skywalkers or the Palpatines. As we see in the prequels, the Skywalkers and the Jedi as a whole have a complicated, messy legacy and while Rey learned from and was inspired by them, she could have also been the start of something new.

poppasketti said:

Here’s a new pass! I downloaded a new 3D model of the falcon and brought it into cinema4D and recreated the flight path. After chatting with snooker, it turns out it’s the same model he’s using. I think his engines look better, though! So we’ll see what options we come up with!

https://vimeo.com/414985184
pw: fanedit

Looks incredible! My only slight nitpick is that when it goes into hyperspace, the angle of the engine trail looks like a different path than the one it was traveling on. It makes it look less like it jumped forward into space and more like it shot upward as it jumped.

Hal 9000 said:

DominicCobb said:

Anakin Starkiller said:

DominicCobb said:

Here’s a rough idea for changing the music in the final scene:
https://vimeo.com/415655381

As nice as this is, I wouldn’t end the Saga on character centric theme. The Force Theme, as overused as it is, is perfect because it’s universal within the Saga.

I disagree, I see it as important for the forward-looking nature of the ending. We’re used to the force theme with the binary sunset, but now it’s Rey’s turn.

+1. It’s the perfect end theme to juxtapose with Rey Skywalker.

Just Rey is fine. 😉

(Seriously if this annoys you I’ll stop talking about it in your thread. I just think a Rey nobody edit isn’t really a Rey nobody edit if she’s still Rey Skywalker in the end.)

DominicCobb said:

Here’s a rough idea for changing the music in the final scene, using poppa’s WIP final shot:
https://vimeo.com/415655381

I like the music. Would be even better if she said “Just Rey” 😉

RogueLeader said:

I think Rey killing her parents is still better than Rey Palpatine, but if I could make a version without some new revelation about her past, I would prefer it.

This. Focus on her future.

Hal 9000 said:

This is NOT intended to represent a reservation I have about using the Falcon ending shot. This is such a nerdy thing to say that it would have rightfully been shouted down by people if this had been in the movie.

But…

The Falcon leaping right into hyperspace within a few seconds of taking off makes Han’s efforts to escape from Mos Eisley in ANH seem overly cautionary. (Doesn’t seem like entering hyperspace from within an atmosphere or planet’s gravity would normally be a good idea.)

BUT, it’s a perfect visual ending for the story. Just felt obliged to throw a neckbeard comment in for devil’s advocacy.

There’s only one example in canon of a ship entering hyperspace from within a planet’s atmosphere (in Clone Wars) but it was an accident. I think it’s generally not recommended, but I’m willing to bend the rules of the universe in this case since it’s such a perfect shot.

jonh said:

shit … I couldn’t contain myself, fucking hair
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1ibJV4LFQlxx8fkjBmT71UDQh-PuPUT8r
only a test,
I have to improve it

Looks great, but that’s a LOT of shots you’d have to replace his hair in.

KumoNin said:

I am probably in the minority and this may not be doable with the source material, but to me, in the first two movies Rey is a character with a “default” star wars background character… background. Parents either poor as shit, or dead for trivial reasons (disease/gang violence/whatever), or abandoned/sold her (or… all of the above). Such is the star wars world (except on more sophisticated worlds like naboo or alderaan where you might have more “normal” parents). And her specialness comes not from her origin, but from… the force awakening inside her for some reason and her having a good heart or whatever.

As such, a “reveal” post-TLJ about her actual origin - any reveal - diminishes that in my view. If her background is in some way special, and Kylo Ren or whoever reveals that to her, that gives her character motivation basically for free.

If she is a Palpatine, she has an innate reason to fight against her legacy, to basically cleanse her name in some way, so as to show herself not to be what her ancestry would suggest her to be (although that is also undermined by her parents being good and loving already). If Palpatine killed her parents it becomes a simple revenge story, in the end she takes her revenge against him and all is good (even though apparently that’s what he wants anyway at the start, but at some point that just changes…? and he wants her dead?). If she herself killed her parents it’s again sort of a self-redemption story and she has newfound purpose with the reveal. If the reveal is that there is no reveal - no “free” character motivation - then she has to find her place in the story herself and has to wrestle her inner demons that she has anyway - dark origin or not.

I agree with all of this in theory. However I’m not sure if it works within the structure of the movie we have, which is built around there being “reveals” about Rey’s parentage, and Rey squaring off against some sort of darkness within herself. I think the best we can do is swap out the reveals delivered by Kylo with something that’s less of a severe retcon. The movie doesn’t really build on TLJ’s themes of a nobody finding her place, so there does need to be some sort of additional motivation for it to work.

nl0428 said:

I do have to say that your commentary track will be very entertaining to listen to, Hal.

Depending on how much material from other editors ends up being integrated, a group commentary track could be cool.

The second clip you should be able to get by just masking out the tentacles and using content-aware fill to approximate the sand behind them, no 4k83 required. I’m still not super comfortable with the After Effects interface though so it would take me a while to set up the masks.

idir_hh said:

I think there needs to be a buffer shot in-between Rey walking out of fram and the falcon shot, maybe the scene could restructured so that Rey first sees the ghost of Ben alone, then when she walks out of Frame we see the ghosts of Luke and Leia watching her and then we cut to the falcon.

Great minds think alike 😉

poppasketti said:

Slight update to the end shot. I made the falcon darker, less thin, toned down the blue, and a couple of other small adjustments. Still have to things I want to tweak, though!

https://vimeo.com/414985184
pw: fanedit

Nice! Definitely improved. Do you think you’ll eventually take a stab at Ben’s ghost or leave that up to someone else? I’d be interested to see someone try the sequence of shots I laid out. I’d do a rough mockup myself but unfortunately I don’t have the movie on-hand yet. It’s currently on backorder from Amazon 😕